Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

Just gorgeous imagery.....brilliant photo....brilliant prismatic preeners,,,,
Well done........I love these bright birds....like flowers in flight
God bless

 Comment Written 30-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014

Thank you very much, kiwijenny. I think they are some of the most beautiful birds there are.

I really appreciate your review.:)

Comment from James Dooney

Exceptional

oh this is really good ! I love how you worked in all the p words here. You have done a great job here with this one. Good good !

 Comment Written 30-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014

Thank you very much for your enthusiasm, James. I hope the voters are as inspired and as enthused as you, my friend, LOL.

Thanks for the sixer, as well as your encouraging comments.

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

delightfully colorful presentation of your poem :-)
a fun abundance of alliteration
great visual of these birds plucking the yucky little parasites from their pretty feathers
clever characterization of them as prismatic preeners :-)
I like how you manage to have this make sense while using all that alliteration - most people force things so they don't make sense in order to save the alliteration
Brooke

 Comment Written 30-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014

I love Lorakeets, Parakeets, Parrots and Cockatoos. So naturally, it was easy for me to get into a fun sort of "groove" with this one, and just go with the flow.

Thanks for the wonderful and complimentary review, Brooke.

reply by adewpearl on 30-Aug-2014

I marvel that my Australian friends have some of those birds in their own back yards. Not that I have anything against robins...

reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014

I like blue jays and cardinals. Just as beautiful in their own right, I feel. :]

reply by adewpearl on 30-Aug-2014

I like them too, though seeing them is a once in a month kind of occurrence :-)

Comment from mfowler

Excellent

Nice one, m.
The rainbow lorikeet is a native of my shores and your image is excellent, showing all of its prismatic colours. I see these beauties every day in spring/summer, out stripping my pine tree of its cone nuts. The highly alliterative poem is introduced with the behavioural observation in lyrical:Parrots primp plumage

plucking pesky parasites

and is completed with a great alliterative stori in 'prismatic preeners'. You really seem to like birds.
Excellent fun. Good luck.

 Comment Written 30-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014

Thanks, 'M', and I do love birds. Birds, and dogs, two of my most cherished of God's creatures.

Thanks for the fantastic review, my friend.

Comment from jandeck

Excellent

Great form and alliteration. I love the theme of the beautiful parrots and their colorful plumage. The art is beautiful and complementary to the words.
Good job!

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014

Thanks very much, jandeck. I truly appreciate it. I hope it does well in the voting, but, we'll just have to wait and see...

Thanks so much again! :]

Comment from TAB_that's me

Excellent

pppppplease no more pppppeas my tongue can't take any more! Great entry though for the contest:) Wishing you well in it.
teresa

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014

Ha ha...well, thanks Teresa...I think, hee-hee. Seriously, I appreciate the review.:)

Comment from Jeanie Mercer

Excellent

This uses the plethora of alliteration that the prompt calls for, in this case beginning every word with the same letter. As you may know, that much alliteration and other poetic devices actually are discouraged in traditional haiku, but that's another matter as far as this contest is concerned. Good luck to you. Jeanie Mercer

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014

Yes, Jeanie, and thank you. I enjoy some alliteration in haiku and senryu myself, but usually not to this extent. Had it not been for the contest rules requiring it, I would have opted for other words.

I truly apprecaite your very thoughtful review.:}

Comment from kiwisteveh

Excellent

trust you to go over the top and have th same alliteration throughout.

This could have gone astray, but you have done well to keep it on the straight and narrow and there is even a hint of true haiku satori in the 'prismatic pruners'

Good luck.

Steve

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014

Thanks, Steve, and the seemingly over-the-top usage of alliteration was required by contest rules, I'm afraid. Otherwise, I certainly never would have attempted to have written it in this manner, not with so much alliteration. I realize many frown upon that.

Thanks so much for your very thoughtful review. Much appreciated.:)

reply by kiwisteveh on 29-Aug-2014

Yes, I knew alliteration was required in every line, but yours is the only entry I've read that uses the same sound throughout and in every word, I believe.

Steve

reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014

Oh, I see what you meant now. I'm sorry, I misunderstood, Steve. I thought that maybe you weren't aware of the contest it was written for, that's the reason for my explanation.

I got 'cha, though, and thanks again!:)

Comment from rrabinow

Excellent

Wonderfully written poem that you wrote for this prompt. Great alliterations used in your poem. I like that all of the words you use start with the letter p. I like that the last word is a mixture of colors. Best of luck.

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014

Thank you very much, rrabinow, and it had to be alliteration laden as per contest rules. Each word had to begin with the same letter as the first.

I appreciate your review.:)

Comment from Rmocruz

Excellent

Alliteration is well employed in this colorful, worthy prompt entry. An appropriate artwork selection as well.
My very best wishes in the contest.
An enjoyable brief read.

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014

Thank you, Rmocruz. I sincerely appreciate your thoughtful and encouraging review.:)

reply by Rmocruz on 28-Aug-2014

You're welcome, my pleasure.