Gold Of Dawn
A Naani22 total reviews
Comment from words
Such a lovely romantic write.
i do think that in love, we do "hold each other's hearts".
And in doing that our souls are truly, "renewed".
Well done.
Hugs, d
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014
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Such a lovely romantic write.
i do think that in love, we do "hold each other's hearts".
And in doing that our souls are truly, "renewed".
Well done.
Hugs, d
Comment Written 08-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014
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Hello words, thank you for the wonderful review and for sharing your thoughts. I truly appreciate the time spent. LateBloomer
Comment from w.j.debi
How romantic and uplifting I love the imagery of the two holding each other's hearts and the dawn unveiling their faces. I can imagine the smiles as they look into each other's eyes. Excellent formatting, including the wonderful picture, to enhance your verse.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014
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How romantic and uplifting I love the imagery of the two holding each other's hearts and the dawn unveiling their faces. I can imagine the smiles as they look into each other's eyes. Excellent formatting, including the wonderful picture, to enhance your verse.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014
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Hello w.j. debi, thank you for the great review and for sharing your thoughts. I truly appreciate the time spent. LateBloomer
Comment from kiwijenny
Ooooooo I love the gold of dawn,..the promise of a new day...it's beauty embraces...as does this poem
Well written.........
God bless
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014
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Ooooooo I love the gold of dawn,..the promise of a new day...it's beauty embraces...as does this poem
Well written.........
God bless
Comment Written 01-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014
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Hello kiwij, thank you for the great review and for sharing your thoughts. I truly appreciate the time spent. LateBloomer
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
A lovely naani in 21 syllables. Your second line is a good use of metaphor ' We held each other's heart'. Very nice. An enjoyable read. Good Luck in the contest. Kind regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014
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A lovely naani in 21 syllables. Your second line is a good use of metaphor ' We held each other's heart'. Very nice. An enjoyable read. Good Luck in the contest. Kind regards Dorothy
Comment Written 30-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014
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Hello Dorothy Fennell, thank you for the great review and for sharing your thoughts. I truly appreciate the time spent. LateBloomer
Comment from Teri7
This is a very beautiful naani poem you have penned. I love the artwork you chose for this piece as well. Very good wording. hugs, teri
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014
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This is a very beautiful naani poem you have penned. I love the artwork you chose for this piece as well. Very good wording. hugs, teri
Comment Written 29-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014
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Hello Teri7, thank you for the wonderful review and for sharing your thoughts. I truly appreciate the time spent. LateBloomer
Comment from amada
This is a very romantic and nice Naani. You say beautiful thoughts in less than 25 syllables. The artwork selections fits very well with your words.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014
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This is a very romantic and nice Naani. You say beautiful thoughts in less than 25 syllables. The artwork selections fits very well with your words.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014
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Hello amada, thank you for the wonderful review and for sharing your thoughts. I truly appreciate the time spent. LateBloomer
Comment from Nichola
A beautifully written succinct poem. It is amazing how such few words can have a powerful effect.
In the gold of dawn
We held each other's heart
Our faces now unveiled
Our souls renewed
Well done.
Nichola
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014
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A beautifully written succinct poem. It is amazing how such few words can have a powerful effect.
In the gold of dawn
We held each other's heart
Our faces now unveiled
Our souls renewed
Well done.
Nichola
Comment Written 29-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014
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Thank you, Nichola. I truly appreciate the time spent. LateBloomer
Comment from Dom G Robles
This is a Naani poem with 4 lines and syllables between 20-25. It followed the requirements. I liked the poem as well as the picture accompanying, depicting dawn--the sun in gold peeping in the Eastern horizon. I think, "In the gold of dawn..." is a beautiful expression" followed by "we held each other's heart...faces now unveiled Our souls renewed." This, to me is little weak. My creative thinking tells me that in the wee hours of dawn when one is entwined with a loved one, there is more to it--a sharper image stronger and more powerful. How about this: "We held each other's heart igniting the core of our Being. Or "of our existence..." Just a suggestion.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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This is a Naani poem with 4 lines and syllables between 20-25. It followed the requirements. I liked the poem as well as the picture accompanying, depicting dawn--the sun in gold peeping in the Eastern horizon. I think, "In the gold of dawn..." is a beautiful expression" followed by "we held each other's heart...faces now unveiled Our souls renewed." This, to me is little weak. My creative thinking tells me that in the wee hours of dawn when one is entwined with a loved one, there is more to it--a sharper image stronger and more powerful. How about this: "We held each other's heart igniting the core of our Being. Or "of our existence..." Just a suggestion.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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Hello Dom, Thank you for the great review and for sharing your thoughts and suggestions. I truly appreciate the time spent. LateBloomer
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You are very welcome,LateBloomer. And thank you, too, for acknowledging my suggestions.
Comment from acerisestory
What a beautiful image:
We held each other's heart
Such lovely imagery! Your use of alliteration with held and heart make for a nice flow. Your accompanying artwork perfectly enhances your words. Thank you for sharing, LateBloomer. Alana
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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What a beautiful image:
We held each other's heart
Such lovely imagery! Your use of alliteration with held and heart make for a nice flow. Your accompanying artwork perfectly enhances your words. Thank you for sharing, LateBloomer. Alana
Comment Written 28-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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Hello acerisestory, thank you for the great review and for sharing your thoughts. I truly appreciate the time spent. LateBloomer
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You are welcome! Alana
Comment from Jackarrie
A very beautiful image to go with the well written naani.
In the gold of dawn
We held each other's heart
Our faces now unveiled
Our souls renewed
Good luck in the contest
Mary
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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A very beautiful image to go with the well written naani.
In the gold of dawn
We held each other's heart
Our faces now unveiled
Our souls renewed
Good luck in the contest
Mary
Comment Written 28-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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thank you for the great review and for sharing your thoughts. I truly appreciate the time spent. LateBloomer
