Final Words of Life
My mom's final words82 total reviews
Comment from Spiritual Echo
sure, every person who read this story broke into tears during this story, and I'm no exception.
Would that my life be a rose garden.
congrats on a well-deserved win.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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sure, every person who read this story broke into tears during this story, and I'm no exception.
Would that my life be a rose garden.
congrats on a well-deserved win.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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Thanks, I appreciate your wonderful feedback.
Comment from tfawcus
Such a poignant farewell scene for one much loved whose parting is deeply mourned. You express the moment beautifully with simple language that brings out all the deep emotion of the moment.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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Such a poignant farewell scene for one much loved whose parting is deeply mourned. You express the moment beautifully with simple language that brings out all the deep emotion of the moment.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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Thank you for taking the time to read my story. It took me 15 years to actually sit down and write it. I have been wanting to write this for a while, just didn't know how. Then the contest presented itself. Many, many, thanks.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Good heavens. Were you with my family when my wife's mother told us she was dying of pancreatic cancer? If not, then you have transcended there by virtue of your own experience, because this is exactly...and I do mean exactly... how it went down for our family the day she told us in her living room. Your details gave me the chills, they were so similar, all the way down to what my mother-in-law said to me that day; me being her eldest son-in-law. Even the rocking chair and discarded, empty blanket is eerily similar.
I'll admit to you, I rarely ever cry. But, I did when I read this, and find that typing a review through eyes filled with tears is much harder than I thought it would be. It's as if we were both there, in each other's presence, yet experiencing the exact same thing, but with very different people.
I'm so sorry I am out of sixes, this truly deserves one. A virtual six will have to suffice for now. Tom and his stupid no HTML rules be damned! I'll gladly risk being barred from this site to show you my appreciation, if it should come to that. Let them bar me, I don't really care.
You do have my vote, however, and my gratitude....for what that's worth.
***** +
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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Good heavens. Were you with my family when my wife's mother told us she was dying of pancreatic cancer? If not, then you have transcended there by virtue of your own experience, because this is exactly...and I do mean exactly... how it went down for our family the day she told us in her living room. Your details gave me the chills, they were so similar, all the way down to what my mother-in-law said to me that day; me being her eldest son-in-law. Even the rocking chair and discarded, empty blanket is eerily similar.
I'll admit to you, I rarely ever cry. But, I did when I read this, and find that typing a review through eyes filled with tears is much harder than I thought it would be. It's as if we were both there, in each other's presence, yet experiencing the exact same thing, but with very different people.
I'm so sorry I am out of sixes, this truly deserves one. A virtual six will have to suffice for now. Tom and his stupid no HTML rules be damned! I'll gladly risk being barred from this site to show you my appreciation, if it should come to that. Let them bar me, I don't really care.
You do have my vote, however, and my gratitude....for what that's worth.
***** +
Comment Written 28-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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You give me the chills, as far as I know we are not from the same family, but this is what my mother died of. Yes, Pancreatic Cancer. This was in 99.
Thank you for your comment and the 6 star review, it counts in my heart. Hugs. This is proof that my writing is meaningful and comes from the heart of God. God bless you.
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Wow! How ironic is this?
Hey, it was my pleasure entirely, believe me. I've bookmarked this so my wife can read it later. I know she'll be literally blown away by the similarities.
God bless, and happy writing!:}
Comment from Genya
A very moving and sad story about the last words from a person dying of cancer to her family. Really sad and it brings home how precious life is and each day should be values. Ver y visual and you could see all the family waiting for their time and the parting words. Beautifully crafted story. I did find one typo... Hate mentioning this after reading what I have just read...standing in line I patiently. Think you missed the t out... Genya
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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A very moving and sad story about the last words from a person dying of cancer to her family. Really sad and it brings home how precious life is and each day should be values. Ver y visual and you could see all the family waiting for their time and the parting words. Beautifully crafted story. I did find one typo... Hate mentioning this after reading what I have just read...standing in line I patiently. Think you missed the t out... Genya
Comment Written 28-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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Thank you for your kind and wonderful review. I appreciate your kind words and I'm humbled. Hugs.
Comment from NurseBarb
Incredible writing worthy of a win. Kept my full attention the entire read with a feeling of sadness, however so beautifully written. The fact that it's true makes it even more sad, but yet happy that she was able to say goodbye to all her family members. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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Incredible writing worthy of a win. Kept my full attention the entire read with a feeling of sadness, however so beautifully written. The fact that it's true makes it even more sad, but yet happy that she was able to say goodbye to all her family members. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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Thank you, I'm humbled. Many hugs.
Comment from TheSprite
I'm sorry. I too have recently lost my mother. There is nothing like that loss because there is nobody like our mother. Three years and I still have a hard time talking about it. Love the picture, too. Nice story progression and great visuals. I could feel you pain. Good job! :)
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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I'm sorry. I too have recently lost my mother. There is nothing like that loss because there is nobody like our mother. Three years and I still have a hard time talking about it. Love the picture, too. Nice story progression and great visuals. I could feel you pain. Good job! :)
Comment Written 28-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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Sorry about you losing your mother. My mother has been gone for 15 years this month. It took me 10 years of Christmas's not to totally be sad. However, 8 years ago I also lost my dad to heart attack. In our home. The kids didn't see him go down, but they did watch the ambulance out the window. Yes, it's tough. Many hugs in your healing process and thanks for the wonderful review.
Comment from Cian Mateo
This was an interesting read. It was emotional; the passing of one's mother with family gathered.
The ending unexpected, but refreshingly honest.
Her words are not consoling me. But I put on a smiling face to satisfy my mother....
Her family are her roses.
And she is their thorn.
Prior--
A surge of energy is gifted to her and she takes full advantage of the opportunity.
Tears are falling uncontrollably.
This is very well written.
Good luck in the contest.
And my condolences.
Cian
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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This was an interesting read. It was emotional; the passing of one's mother with family gathered.
The ending unexpected, but refreshingly honest.
Her words are not consoling me. But I put on a smiling face to satisfy my mother....
Her family are her roses.
And she is their thorn.
Prior--
A surge of energy is gifted to her and she takes full advantage of the opportunity.
Tears are falling uncontrollably.
This is very well written.
Good luck in the contest.
And my condolences.
Cian
Comment Written 28-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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You made my day, thanks for the great review.
Comment from c_lucas
It is a good thing to express your love for your family. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very emotional read.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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It is a good thing to express your love for your family. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very emotional read.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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Thank you for stopping by and reading. I appreciate your kind review and wonderful generosity.
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You're welcome, BJ. Charlie
Comment from michaelcahill
Wonderfully written. There is no guarantee that even a beautiful story like this is going to be effective. It still needs skill to write it and convey the facts and feelings in a way that capture it. You have done so beautifully here and everyone that reads this will be touched by it and drift to memories in their own lives that are awakened as I have. I won't mind at all losing to this excellent work. Lovely, mikey
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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Wonderfully written. There is no guarantee that even a beautiful story like this is going to be effective. It still needs skill to write it and convey the facts and feelings in a way that capture it. You have done so beautifully here and everyone that reads this will be touched by it and drift to memories in their own lives that are awakened as I have. I won't mind at all losing to this excellent work. Lovely, mikey
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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Thank you for your wonderful and kind review. I appreciate your generosity. I'm humbled and honored with your kind words. You made my day.
Comment from bard owl
Your story is extremely sad. Witnessing the dying hours of a loved one has to be one of the most difficult necessities of life. Your mother exited with love. And that is a blessings. Not dying alone is a blessings. A very poignant contest entry. Best of luck.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014
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Your story is extremely sad. Witnessing the dying hours of a loved one has to be one of the most difficult necessities of life. Your mother exited with love. And that is a blessings. Not dying alone is a blessings. A very poignant contest entry. Best of luck.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014
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Thank you for your wonderful review. I'm humbled.
