Don't Stop Me Now
200 words. Contest Entry47 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
fat-bottomed girls - add hyphen
you set the stage most effectively
excellent descriptive detail of this "john" and the situation the prostitute finds herself in
good dialogue that sounds natural and conveys emotion well
night was gonna go, motherfucker, and I got - add commas for direct address
a most dramatic story, a good interpretation of the contest's required title
Brooke
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014
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fat-bottomed girls - add hyphen
you set the stage most effectively
excellent descriptive detail of this "john" and the situation the prostitute finds herself in
good dialogue that sounds natural and conveys emotion well
night was gonna go, motherfucker, and I got - add commas for direct address
a most dramatic story, a good interpretation of the contest's required title
Brooke
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014
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Brooke.Thanks for the excellent review. It is much appreciated.
Comment from country ranch writer
WELL HE WENT OUT WITH A WOMP ON THE HEAD DIDN'T HE SO NOW SHE CAN GET BACK TO WORK FOR HIM FOR THE REST OF THE NIGHT TO GO MAKE HIM SOME MONEY
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014
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WELL HE WENT OUT WITH A WOMP ON THE HEAD DIDN'T HE SO NOW SHE CAN GET BACK TO WORK FOR HIM FOR THE REST OF THE NIGHT TO GO MAKE HIM SOME MONEY
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014
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True, True. Thanks for the excelent review.
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MONEY IS MONEY AS THEY USED TO SAY
Comment from J Patience
Nice! You got them all in there. Lots of action for few words, and few grammar/spelling/ punctuation distractions except this one:
The strikes, not unbearable weren't nearly - should have a comma after "unbearable"
Great job on the challenge!
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014
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Nice! You got them all in there. Lots of action for few words, and few grammar/spelling/ punctuation distractions except this one:
The strikes, not unbearable weren't nearly - should have a comma after "unbearable"
Great job on the challenge!
Comment Written 26-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014
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Thanks for that, I fixed that minor SPAG (but properly glaring in a 200 word piece). Thanks for taking the time and effort to review.
Comment from Jay Squires
A clever story, entertainingly written. You took the contest requirement of one title and threw in the other seven for free.
This should do well in the contest. (I kept trying to figure where I'd seen your handle, then I remembered you reviewed my story today.)
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014
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A clever story, entertainingly written. You took the contest requirement of one title and threw in the other seven for free.
This should do well in the contest. (I kept trying to figure where I'd seen your handle, then I remembered you reviewed my story today.)
Comment Written 26-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014
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Yup, I did indeed. thanks for taking the time to review. I'm glad I could entertain you.
Comment from Pyrrho
I do not know how this wound up on my screen. i was answering reviews and suddenly here it is. it reads OK but is a bore to me. So here is a fiver.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014
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I do not know how this wound up on my screen. i was answering reviews and suddenly here it is. it reads OK but is a bore to me. So here is a fiver.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014
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Well thans for the fiver. Hope you found something else more to your liking.
Comment from Acquired Taste
Okay then, instead of picking one title - you used them all. Creative way to incorporate all of Queen into the story. Short, concise and fills the requirements. Best of luck in the contest. AT=/
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reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014
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Okay then, instead of picking one title - you used them all. Creative way to incorporate all of Queen into the story. Short, concise and fills the requirements. Best of luck in the contest. AT=/
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Comment Written 26-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014
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AT,
Thank you for taking the time and effort to review this one. It is much appreciated.
Comment from Glasstruth
You put all the song titles together so well that I had to reread it again cause I missed it the first time. Fit so well. A very high powered story. Enjoyed immensely. Good luck with the contest. Les
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reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014
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You put all the song titles together so well that I had to reread it again cause I missed it the first time. Fit so well. A very high powered story. Enjoyed immensely. Good luck with the contest. Les
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Comment Written 26-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014
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I'm glad you got it, I wasn't sure if everyone would. Thanks tons for reading and reviewing, it is much appreciated.
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I'm glad you got it, I wasn't sure if everyone would. Thanks tons for reading and reviewing, it is much appreciated.
