Bel Air: A Bard's Guide
Viewing comments for Chapter 44 "How Convenient!"Sequel to The Bard of Bel Air.
14 total reviews
Comment from GracieAnn
Mikey, this is totally original and allows the reader to step into the mind of the Bard and see it like frames of an old sixties cartoon up to now. Way creative and fun, my friend. :0 GracieAnn
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Mikey, this is totally original and allows the reader to step into the mind of the Bard and see it like frames of an old sixties cartoon up to now. Way creative and fun, my friend. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 28-Aug-2014
Comment from CR Delport
Just when Sgt Petticoat thought he escaped, he had the bad luck of running into the Bard. Barry is in for another nasty surprise too. This is another well crafted chapter with a lot of things going on all over the place. I sense things are running to a close now?
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Just when Sgt Petticoat thought he escaped, he had the bad luck of running into the Bard. Barry is in for another nasty surprise too. This is another well crafted chapter with a lot of things going on all over the place. I sense things are running to a close now?
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
Comment from ProjectBluebook
Ok, you got me spoiled. I love these pictures. Don't know how I ever read a book without them. This is a new generation that likes new things. Some comical pictures too. Lots of live action going on. I like to be bounced around like a pinball. Simple is boring to me -- and this is not simple. Lot so creativity went into this chapter. Not as easy as it looks -- writing a novel. Lots of humorous lines. Saw no obvious SPAG errors. You forget to look for them when the story is good. Count your doubloon, Mikey.
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Ok, you got me spoiled. I love these pictures. Don't know how I ever read a book without them. This is a new generation that likes new things. Some comical pictures too. Lots of live action going on. I like to be bounced around like a pinball. Simple is boring to me -- and this is not simple. Lot so creativity went into this chapter. Not as easy as it looks -- writing a novel. Lots of humorous lines. Saw no obvious SPAG errors. You forget to look for them when the story is good. Count your doubloon, Mikey.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
Comment from Darkhorse555
really mikey a very enjoyable piece of reading loved the image you drew in wisdom is thoughtful and motionless this stuck in my mind beautifully penned as always dear friend
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really mikey a very enjoyable piece of reading loved the image you drew in wisdom is thoughtful and motionless this stuck in my mind beautifully penned as always dear friend
Comment Written 26-Aug-2014
Comment from nordicgirl
Great chapter. This is on track and focused on an ending now. Don't forget the Diamond girls and all the rescued orphans. Trip and we haven't heard about what happened to Anntoinette. Samson, the cat. Can't think of anything else.
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Great chapter. This is on track and focused on an ending now. Don't forget the Diamond girls and all the rescued orphans. Trip and we haven't heard about what happened to Anntoinette. Samson, the cat. Can't think of anything else.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2014
Comment from Selina Stambi
You are a clever man, Mikey. Hard to believe that you're writing without any prior plot or plan.
Well done on almost concluding your book - you've worked really hard.
Have a wonderful weekm Michael..
Until next time,
Sonali
scratched his mostly (bald head)
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You are a clever man, Mikey. Hard to believe that you're writing without any prior plot or plan.
Well done on almost concluding your book - you've worked really hard.
Have a wonderful weekm Michael..
Until next time,
Sonali
scratched his mostly (bald head)
Comment Written 25-Aug-2014
Comment from l.raven
OH Michael, a lot going on in this chapter....But I love Bards description of Barry... Booth and Oswald ...he is to funny...and they found Harpster's ransom money...and who was in the cave...ok!!! next...very interesting you...Luff Linda xxoo
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OH Michael, a lot going on in this chapter....But I love Bards description of Barry... Booth and Oswald ...he is to funny...and they found Harpster's ransom money...and who was in the cave...ok!!! next...very interesting you...Luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 25-Aug-2014
Comment from nelliesellie
It would be one great big book. You could possibly make more money and make more people interested if it was tow. I love the way the ending is coming. The crew has a way out of the mine. They also have Barry in their sights. One criminal will get to face the system. Great work.
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It would be one great big book. You could possibly make more money and make more people interested if it was tow. I love the way the ending is coming. The crew has a way out of the mine. They also have Barry in their sights. One criminal will get to face the system. Great work.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2014
Comment from Loren (7)
mikey, this was a good line: "Tenaya had her weapon at his forehead cocked and ready to fire. Even in the dim light., it was clear she wished to use it right then and there.: In that it shows the strength of your writing ability to convey not only a characters's intent but to tell a story overall as well. I have to admit that following everything going on is not the easiest thing for me, but I do like some of the things you say and your characters. I think Khin is wise in saying/seeing this: Khin stroked a short tuft of beard that had been shaved off a month earlier. "I'm not for chasing our tails in a circle. I don't think splitting up is wise. Glad you've got an inkling of how this is going to end : ) Good luck and will forward to it. Loren
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mikey, this was a good line: "Tenaya had her weapon at his forehead cocked and ready to fire. Even in the dim light., it was clear she wished to use it right then and there.: In that it shows the strength of your writing ability to convey not only a characters's intent but to tell a story overall as well. I have to admit that following everything going on is not the easiest thing for me, but I do like some of the things you say and your characters. I think Khin is wise in saying/seeing this: Khin stroked a short tuft of beard that had been shaved off a month earlier. "I'm not for chasing our tails in a circle. I don't think splitting up is wise. Glad you've got an inkling of how this is going to end : ) Good luck and will forward to it. Loren
Comment Written 25-Aug-2014
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Good chapter. Love how Barry is just standing there. LOL! DO not combine books... separate is better, unless you call them novellas and put two separate stories in the one book.
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Good chapter. Love how Barry is just standing there. LOL! DO not combine books... separate is better, unless you call them novellas and put two separate stories in the one book.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2014
