Rain is Falling
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Comment from Trybuck
This one should make Sawyer smile and even help him learn to count a little. An excellent entry for the contest and I hope it does well, Buck
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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This one should make Sawyer smile and even help him learn to count a little. An excellent entry for the contest and I hope it does well, Buck
Comment Written 24-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Buck, thanks so much, my friend :-) Brooke
Comment from Acquired Taste
Delightful read - this rhymes really well and think it would be a very sweet thing for a teacher to read to their younger wards. Can't you see the teacher - inflections in her voice - talking about how the wizards built the lawn?
As always Brooke, quite nice. Jean
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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Delightful read - this rhymes really well and think it would be a very sweet thing for a teacher to read to their younger wards. Can't you see the teacher - inflections in her voice - talking about how the wizards built the lawn?
As always Brooke, quite nice. Jean
Comment Written 24-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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Jean, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from OLA THOMAS
What a very well done poem for chldren, done with alluring words and muses of the children. Sure, i f where worms were once crowded is now full of golden dandelions, them they must have been made by wizards ::). Love this work with strings of alliterations.
ola thomas
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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What a very well done poem for chldren, done with alluring words and muses of the children. Sure, i f where worms were once crowded is now full of golden dandelions, them they must have been made by wizards ::). Love this work with strings of alliterations.
ola thomas
Comment Written 24-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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Ola, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from giovannimariatommaso
I can see this as a book of 18 pages masterfully filled w/pictures on glossy paper dividing 1/2 of each stanza on the page; children would love it, I know because I did & I pictured it in my head as I read this poem that rhymed wonderfully & rolled & plopped & bobbed along without spelling or grammatical errors. I even learned to count to eight with other numbers too, hundreds, thousands, millions, more. The yellow dandies did fill my view as Monet's yellow fields did too.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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I can see this as a book of 18 pages masterfully filled w/pictures on glossy paper dividing 1/2 of each stanza on the page; children would love it, I know because I did & I pictured it in my head as I read this poem that rhymed wonderfully & rolled & plopped & bobbed along without spelling or grammatical errors. I even learned to count to eight with other numbers too, hundreds, thousands, millions, more. The yellow dandies did fill my view as Monet's yellow fields did too.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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Thank you so much, giovanni, for your thoughtful look at this poem and its possibilities as a book :-) Brooke
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Comment from visionary1234
Impeccable rhythm bouncing along here Brooke, particularly suited to the prompt. And, of course, I can just hear and see little guys enjoying this one tremendously!
:)S
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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Impeccable rhythm bouncing along here Brooke, particularly suited to the prompt. And, of course, I can just hear and see little guys enjoying this one tremendously!
:)S
Comment Written 24-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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Sharon, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from LIJ Red
Another good read 'em to sleep poem. I like the imagery and
the rhymes, and admire the youthful attitude. Another example of excellent craftsmanship.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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Another good read 'em to sleep poem. I like the imagery and
the rhymes, and admire the youthful attitude. Another example of excellent craftsmanship.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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Thank you, LIJ, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Brooke
I need a towel! Another terrific poem, so fun to read. Kids would love it, I know. You take us through a rainstorm, from those first fat drops to a downpour to complete silence. I can picture the brown puddles I used to jump in with my rubber boots and those long fat night-crawlers on the pavement.
Your poem could teach kids to count to eight.
Lots of good alliteration, for instance
"drop by drop"
"slant, not straight"
"plops start pounding"
"round and round"
I like the inner rhymes,
"wiggling, squiggling"
and consonance,
"plops aplenty"
You've written the poem as though you were a child, mentioning Grandpa & Grandma. I like that, and so would any child.
As I read the poem, I think of songs about rain... BJ Thomas & "Raindrops Keep Falling On My Head",
http://youtu.be/t30cX6OGO0U
Gordon Lightfoot's "Early Mornin' Rain",
http://youtu.be/1pqttl9aWm0
and The Cascades singing "Rhythm of the Falling Rain"
http://youtu.be/lC2Fu20X_KY
As you can tell, I love the rain...especially when I'm walking in the woods. God is cleaning the earth like only He can. And we both know this earth can use a lot of cleaning.
Nicely penned! Thanks for sharing.
your fan,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Hi Brooke
I need a towel! Another terrific poem, so fun to read. Kids would love it, I know. You take us through a rainstorm, from those first fat drops to a downpour to complete silence. I can picture the brown puddles I used to jump in with my rubber boots and those long fat night-crawlers on the pavement.
Your poem could teach kids to count to eight.
Lots of good alliteration, for instance
"drop by drop"
"slant, not straight"
"plops start pounding"
"round and round"
I like the inner rhymes,
"wiggling, squiggling"
and consonance,
"plops aplenty"
You've written the poem as though you were a child, mentioning Grandpa & Grandma. I like that, and so would any child.
As I read the poem, I think of songs about rain... BJ Thomas & "Raindrops Keep Falling On My Head",
http://youtu.be/t30cX6OGO0U
Gordon Lightfoot's "Early Mornin' Rain",
http://youtu.be/1pqttl9aWm0
and The Cascades singing "Rhythm of the Falling Rain"
http://youtu.be/lC2Fu20X_KY
As you can tell, I love the rain...especially when I'm walking in the woods. God is cleaning the earth like only He can. And we both know this earth can use a lot of cleaning.
Nicely penned! Thanks for sharing.
your fan,
Kimbob
Comment Written 24-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Kimbob, I love all those songs too :-) Thank you so much for your great comments and generous six stars :-) Brooke
Comment from Dawn Munro
Oh my goodness, you sure did manage to capture the feeling of a heavy rainfall, and the sweet stillness when it stops - I loved this kid's poem - an absolute charmer!
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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Oh my goodness, you sure did manage to capture the feeling of a heavy rainfall, and the sweet stillness when it stops - I loved this kid's poem - an absolute charmer!
Comment Written 24-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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Dawn, thank you so much, my friend :-) Brooke
Comment from Pili Pubul
LOL. ... Good reason, but miss his sweet face. What a delightful
perfect poem , children's will love it so much and so do I.
Great joyful imagery, great style and rhyme . A winner my friend. Pili
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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LOL. ... Good reason, but miss his sweet face. What a delightful
perfect poem , children's will love it so much and so do I.
Great joyful imagery, great style and rhyme . A winner my friend. Pili
Comment Written 24-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Pili, thank you for your generous sixth star and thoughtful comments, my friend :-) Brooke
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You are so welcome. Pili
Comment from Shirley B
Ah Brooke, This is perfect for the contest. On my week with Gracie we sang so many songs and I found my self singing your poem. Now anytime I read anything with a great rhythm I want to sing it. Your poem passed the Gracie test! LOL Best of luck to you, Shirley
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Ah Brooke, This is perfect for the contest. On my week with Gracie we sang so many songs and I found my self singing your poem. Now anytime I read anything with a great rhythm I want to sing it. Your poem passed the Gracie test! LOL Best of luck to you, Shirley
Comment Written 24-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Shirley, thank you so much :-) I'm so glad you had a great week with Gracie :-) Brooke
