Rain is Falling
quatrains in 7/7/7/7149 total reviews
Comment from Eternal Muse
Brooke, I loved this! I was following Michael's contest, and this certainly is one of the top entries! I am sure this would make Sawyer smile.
Daisies too have sprung right up,
and a glowing buttercup --
wizards must have turned those worms
straight to gold where they once squirmed.
Grandpa says they grew from seeds,
and the gold is really weeds.
Grandma says he's just too old --
she thinks wizards made the gold.
How very entertaining, you pick things that kids like and words that guarantee to make them smile.
Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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Brooke, I loved this! I was following Michael's contest, and this certainly is one of the top entries! I am sure this would make Sawyer smile.
Daisies too have sprung right up,
and a glowing buttercup --
wizards must have turned those worms
straight to gold where they once squirmed.
Grandpa says they grew from seeds,
and the gold is really weeds.
Grandma says he's just too old --
she thinks wizards made the gold.
How very entertaining, you pick things that kids like and words that guarantee to make them smile.
Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 25-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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Thank you so much, Yelena - I appreciate your generous sixth star and contest encouragement. It is a fun contest :-) Brooke
Comment from DerivedBetter
I'm finding many poems on here that my son's would love and I can just add thus to the list. Thanks for sharing. It was very cute with some excellent imagery.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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I'm finding many poems on here that my son's would love and I can just add thus to the list. Thanks for sharing. It was very cute with some excellent imagery.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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Derived Better, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from James Dooney
I like this ! You tackle the theme of the work here very nicely and you go outside your short form standard to give us something longer ! good job !
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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I like this ! You tackle the theme of the work here very nicely and you go outside your short form standard to give us something longer ! good job !
Comment Written 25-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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Thanks so much, James :-) Brooke
Comment from Loren (7)
Sweet and endearing and certainly told from a child's POV and as an adult, listening, I would believe it all true as well. As usual, thank-you for the smile : ) Loren
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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Sweet and endearing and certainly told from a child's POV and as an adult, listening, I would believe it all true as well. As usual, thank-you for the smile : ) Loren
Comment Written 25-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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Loren, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Just2Write
This is truly a delightful children's poem. It's fun and interesting and the counting parts really fit well with the story and are educational. And - I love the word 'plop' A great use of Onomatopoeia to express the sound of rain. It's cute too, that Grandpa the grump doesn't seem to know anything - but Grandma - knows about everything that's magic.
This one will be tough to beat.
Rose.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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This is truly a delightful children's poem. It's fun and interesting and the counting parts really fit well with the story and are educational. And - I love the word 'plop' A great use of Onomatopoeia to express the sound of rain. It's cute too, that Grandpa the grump doesn't seem to know anything - but Grandma - knows about everything that's magic.
This one will be tough to beat.
Rose.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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Rose, thank you so very much for your generous response to this poem :-) I'm so glad you enjoyed it. Brooke
Comment from GeraldS
Beautiful writing. You really have the knack for expressing mundane things in magical words. This is perfect for a child's mind to understand and enjoy.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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Beautiful writing. You really have the knack for expressing mundane things in magical words. This is perfect for a child's mind to understand and enjoy.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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Gerald, thank you so much :-) I appreciate your gracious and generous review. Brooke
Comment from Adri7enne
Kids love worms and wiggling things. A counting poem, from one all the way to "hundreds, thousands, millions, more," Fun stuff. Good luck in the contest, Brooke!
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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Kids love worms and wiggling things. A counting poem, from one all the way to "hundreds, thousands, millions, more," Fun stuff. Good luck in the contest, Brooke!
Comment Written 25-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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Adrienne, thank you so much for your kind contest wishes and thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from boxergirl
Great children's poem, Brooke. It will surely make them smile. It did me! Loved the rhythm from the aabb rhyme scheme and the alliteration from loops pounding and plops aplenty. Great imagery from the wriggling squiggly worms popping up from the ground. 8-)
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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Great children's poem, Brooke. It will surely make them smile. It did me! Loved the rhythm from the aabb rhyme scheme and the alliteration from loops pounding and plops aplenty. Great imagery from the wriggling squiggly worms popping up from the ground. 8-)
Comment Written 25-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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boxergirl, thank you so very much for your gracious comments and generous sixth star :-) Brooke
Comment from Kim14
This was so wonderful. I loved this poem. It was extremely descriptive, and so full of joy! I would not change a word, as you know. I love your writing, you have great skills!! I would read this to the children in our family and one little boy would love the worms part:))Well done...
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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This was so wonderful. I loved this poem. It was extremely descriptive, and so full of joy! I would not change a word, as you know. I love your writing, you have great skills!! I would read this to the children in our family and one little boy would love the worms part:))Well done...
Comment Written 25-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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Kim, thank you so much for your generous sixth star and gracious comments :-) Brooke
Comment from honeytree
I loved the art work very much for these words written.
Children have lots of fun with the weather
rain is falling and worms pop out of the ground
magic wizards worked hard and daises even were there.
honey tree
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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I loved the art work very much for these words written.
Children have lots of fun with the weather
rain is falling and worms pop out of the ground
magic wizards worked hard and daises even were there.
honey tree
Comment Written 25-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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Annie, thanks so much for your generous sixth star and thoughtful comments :-) Brooke
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loved what you wrote Brooke
Annie
