Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep

Excellent

What a fantastic and enjoyable children's poem, perfect for a story book. Such jolly rhythm is attractive to children. They enjoy it and the images are so attractive on them, Giddy

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014

Giddy, thank you so very much :-) Brooke

Comment from nancyjam

Excellent

Great word choice in this delightful poem
about rain and its aftermath.
Excellent AABB rhyme
Good use of onomatopoeia with "plop"
and alliteration.
A charming story about the worms that magically
turn to golden flowers in the child's mind.
What fun! Nancy

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014

Nancy, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from mikemagine

Excellent

VERY good children's poem! Funny, visual. This is very entertaining for children and adults...

Much thanks for sharing!

Mike

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014

Thank you, Mike, for your thoughtful review. Brooke :-)

reply by mikemagine on 26-Aug-2014

You got it Brooke!!

Comment from TAB_that's me

Excellent

ha ha - gold lawn of dandelions:) This is a very cute children's poem. I keep telling you Brooke, you need to put together a book of this or write a children's book for each poem - you just need an artist for the pictures.
Teresa

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014

Thanks so much, Teresa, for your encouragement :-) Brooke

Comment from CR Delport

Excellent

I love the smell of rain and can't wait to smell it again. It is very dry and windy here at the moment, which means a lot of dust. This is very well written. Good luck.

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014

Thank you, CR, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke

Comment from His Grayness

Exceptional

Dear Brooke: Turning a rainy day into a lilting happy song of joy and delight is true genius! I loved this work very sincerely and thanks for the genuine uplift!! Vance

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014

Vance, thank you so much for your generous rating and thoughtful comments :-) Brooke

Comment from lauriesummer

Excellent

This piece of writing could definitely be turned into a children's picture book, if you were so inclined. The rhymes are strong, and I can picture it being broken into wonderful pages with illustrations. Good writing!

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014

lauriesummer, thank you so much for your encouragement :-) Brooke

Comment from Glasstruth

Excellent

What a lovely sound. Great rhythm and flow throughout. This also reminds of a Beatles song, "All Together Now" was in the movie "Yellow Submarine" Also has counting in it as you so. Fantastic sounding. Would be great for a recital. Superb!!!!!! Les

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2014

Comment from Domino 2

Excellent

I remember my dear mother calling our activity of a bowel movement as 'plops', when we were kids, Brooke, so thanks for that fun memory. :-)

VERY cute entry for the contest which I'm, sure would 'make children smile' - it did me, too.

Good early educational element with the counting, too.

Good luck and best wishes, Ray. xx

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014

Thanks so much, Ray :-) Luckily, Ollie the Owl won't be judging this particular contest, so I don't have to worry about being eaten. LOL :-) Brooke

reply by Domino 2 on 26-Aug-2014

LOL, Brooke. xx

Comment from jadapenn

Excellent

Oh, dear, is Sawyer's area having a drought. Not so nice. Loved the poem with all the good visuals of worms coming out to chat and then there is just gold all over the place. Nice imaginary poem for a child. Best wishes for the contest. luv jada.

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014

Jada, thanks so much - yep, a long drought at that. Brooke :-)