Texas Dream Catcher
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Comment from Genya
Hi Barbara, well this is another good chapter. I am really hooked into this story and the end always seems to come too quick for me. The characters are so true to life that l feel l know them already. Grandfather is an amazing character and you just know he knows everything. Intrigued to see what that slimy Miguel is up to. You have really made him grow into the villain l thought he was going to be. A really good chapter yet again. Look forward to the next part. Genya
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2014
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Hi Barbara, well this is another good chapter. I am really hooked into this story and the end always seems to come too quick for me. The characters are so true to life that l feel l know them already. Grandfather is an amazing character and you just know he knows everything. Intrigued to see what that slimy Miguel is up to. You have really made him grow into the villain l thought he was going to be. A really good chapter yet again. Look forward to the next part. Genya
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
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Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi barbara,
I am a long way behind I think, quite a lot seems to have happened while I wasn't looking. Miguel is a guy I could easily take a strong disliking for ...
One correction -
You have '... Rochin' A's Brand ...' should be the Rockin' A's ... ?
Patrick
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2014
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Hi barbara,
I am a long way behind I think, quite a lot seems to have happened while I wasn't looking. Miguel is a guy I could easily take a strong disliking for ...
One correction -
You have '... Rochin' A's Brand ...' should be the Rockin' A's ... ?
Patrick
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this helpful review. I have made the correction.
Comment from chasennov
Soni discusses security measures with the area mangers.
Texas Dream Catcher CHAPTER CINCO, PART UNO.' This is yet another very good chapter you have created here, Barbara. I always enjoy to read your work. Well done.
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Soni discusses security measures with the area mangers.
Texas Dream Catcher CHAPTER CINCO, PART UNO.' This is yet another very good chapter you have created here, Barbara. I always enjoy to read your work. Well done.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
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Comment from Ric Myworld
Thanks for the pleasure of another great chapter. You do such an outstanding job with your characters, and I like the way you add the doubts about them. Enjoyed! :-)
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Thanks for the pleasure of another great chapter. You do such an outstanding job with your characters, and I like the way you add the doubts about them. Enjoyed! :-)
Comment Written 26-Aug-2014
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Comment from CALLAHANMR
Hi Barbara:)
I think this is your best post yet, for this novel. I noticed that the men didn't totally like the new security plan that Soni was asking them to follow, but the men all agreed to support her, even when she couldn't explain why the changes were needed.
Miguel really gets on my nerves. He seems far too nosy about what is going on around the ranch and is far too presumptuous about his relationship with Soni.
Miguel's interest in Soni's grandfather also seems unusual, Does Miguel work with Hughes in checking out the ranch or is his unusual interest more nefarious?
After Miguel finally leaves, Soni find that Jim appears to be asleep, but he is actually awake, perhaps also waiting for Miguel's departure. Will Jim finally explain about who attacked him?
I noticed one awkward sentence:
"We'll get to know each other slowly [,] as we have been." {I think this needs a comma as shown to fix it, but you may want a minor rewrite.}
I'm ready to learn more about both Jim and Miguel. As usual, you have more love and Irish Hughs to give you energy,
Roger
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Hi Barbara:)
I think this is your best post yet, for this novel. I noticed that the men didn't totally like the new security plan that Soni was asking them to follow, but the men all agreed to support her, even when she couldn't explain why the changes were needed.
Miguel really gets on my nerves. He seems far too nosy about what is going on around the ranch and is far too presumptuous about his relationship with Soni.
Miguel's interest in Soni's grandfather also seems unusual, Does Miguel work with Hughes in checking out the ranch or is his unusual interest more nefarious?
After Miguel finally leaves, Soni find that Jim appears to be asleep, but he is actually awake, perhaps also waiting for Miguel's departure. Will Jim finally explain about who attacked him?
I noticed one awkward sentence:
"We'll get to know each other slowly [,] as we have been." {I think this needs a comma as shown to fix it, but you may want a minor rewrite.}
I'm ready to learn more about both Jim and Miguel. As usual, you have more love and Irish Hughs to give you energy,
Roger
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Comment Written 26-Aug-2014
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review. I will take care of that sentence.
Comment from pbroussard209
I think I may of missed a chapter, I have been off the site for a while. I will go back a check.
As for this chapter, awesome, I love Soni's grandfather, I love how he tells it like it is. I also love how Miguel thinks he is dating Soni only she has no intention of it. It adds a bit of comical tension.
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I think I may of missed a chapter, I have been off the site for a while. I will go back a check.
As for this chapter, awesome, I love Soni's grandfather, I love how he tells it like it is. I also love how Miguel thinks he is dating Soni only she has no intention of it. It adds a bit of comical tension.
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Comment from Hareem.S
I really like how your story is developing. The dialogues are very well structured and kept me entertained till the end. It was a pleasure to read it.
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I really like how your story is developing. The dialogues are very well structured and kept me entertained till the end. It was a pleasure to read it.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2014
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Comment from Gargantuan2
I did not have a problem keeping up with the character development at all, and I had not seen any prior posts. You do well with the writing and I am sure from seeing this that not too much was a problem beforehand. I did spot one thing:
They didn't say it had the Rochin' A's brand
(Rochin' or Rockin' ?)
Other than this everything looked fine to me.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2014
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I did not have a problem keeping up with the character development at all, and I had not seen any prior posts. You do well with the writing and I am sure from seeing this that not too much was a problem beforehand. I did spot one thing:
They didn't say it had the Rochin' A's brand
(Rochin' or Rockin' ?)
Other than this everything looked fine to me.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2014
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review. I have made that correction.
Comment from jadapenn
Hi Barbie, a nice chapter. This Miguel ha quite the attitude and I guess Kuruk can sense this. I don't much like him either. Reminds me of one of my old boyfriends who just assumed! Well penned. luv jada
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Hi Barbie, a nice chapter. This Miguel ha quite the attitude and I guess Kuruk can sense this. I don't much like him either. Reminds me of one of my old boyfriends who just assumed! Well penned. luv jada
Comment Written 26-Aug-2014
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Comment from Auroraboreal800
Lot of action and very good dialogues, just my favorite two things, in this chapter. I am enjoying your story and anxious to read what will happen next. I hope you will be able to continue writing, no matter how busy school keeps you.
Saludos amiga!
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reply by the author on 31-Aug-2014
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Lot of action and very good dialogues, just my favorite two things, in this chapter. I am enjoying your story and anxious to read what will happen next. I hope you will be able to continue writing, no matter how busy school keeps you.
Saludos amiga!
:)
Comment Written 26-Aug-2014
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