Texas Dream Catcher
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "CHAPTER CINCO, PART UNO"Drug & human trafficking, can romance win?
48 total reviews
Comment from L.M.Mullins
Excellent chapter. I could feel the tension in the room during the meeting. You also did a good job creating a subtle suspicion of Miguel's intentions.
LM
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2014
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Excellent chapter. I could feel the tension in the room during the meeting. You also did a good job creating a subtle suspicion of Miguel's intentions.
LM
Comment Written 22-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2014
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Thank you, and God Bless.
Comment from CHIGYSISKI
Nice intriguing plot. Well written.I have only one correction to suggest:
Soni brushed a few stray(insert 'strands of hair') hairs from her face.
Well done!
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2014
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Nice intriguing plot. Well written.I have only one correction to suggest:
Soni brushed a few stray(insert 'strands of hair') hairs from her face.
Well done!
Comment Written 29-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2014
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this helpful review. I have made the correction.
Comment from Lynette Marie
I agree with Kuruk, I don't like him either. I'm wondering if he is the unknown enemy.
The faith that Soni has in her father's plan, even though she is blind to the purpose, is admirable.
You show emotion very well. When she turned away with drooping shoulders, I could feel her dejection.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2014
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I agree with Kuruk, I don't like him either. I'm wondering if he is the unknown enemy.
The faith that Soni has in her father's plan, even though she is blind to the purpose, is admirable.
You show emotion very well. When she turned away with drooping shoulders, I could feel her dejection.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2014
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review.
Comment from Cian Mateo
..."Sanchez isn't your boyfriend, is he?"..."Good. I don't like him."...
Good call, Kuruk. I don't like him much either. There seems to be a bit of an edge to him, that raises red flags.
Smiled at the ending..."Are you going to say something or just stare at me?" While Soni is assuming he's sleeping.
I continue to enjoy this storyline, and look forward to your next post.
Cian
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2014
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..."Sanchez isn't your boyfriend, is he?"..."Good. I don't like him."...
Good call, Kuruk. I don't like him much either. There seems to be a bit of an edge to him, that raises red flags.
Smiled at the ending..."Are you going to say something or just stare at me?" While Soni is assuming he's sleeping.
I continue to enjoy this storyline, and look forward to your next post.
Cian
Comment Written 28-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2014
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review. Your review caused me to smile.
Comment from SilverWoulfCreations
But midnight is eating the tomatoes. I tried chased him away, but... Here you have too many "but"... It is important to remember not to redundantly repeat words unnecessarily. I would suggest...
Midnight is eating the tomatoes. I tried chasing him away, but...
You seem to like the word but. Might I suggest dropping not word where able to. Other than that it's a good read.
Thank you for sharing. Have a blessed.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2014
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But midnight is eating the tomatoes. I tried chased him away, but... Here you have too many "but"... It is important to remember not to redundantly repeat words unnecessarily. I would suggest...
Midnight is eating the tomatoes. I tried chasing him away, but...
You seem to like the word but. Might I suggest dropping not word where able to. Other than that it's a good read.
Thank you for sharing. Have a blessed.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2014
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review. This child's first language isn't English and this is how he would speak. I teach at a bilingual school, it's extremely accurate.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
landmarks is one word
Good chapter, my friend. I have been posting work with a lot of spags in it. My concentration hasn't been the best lately with all that has gone on. I really would appreciate it if you would read the chapters of Debbie's Friends since you work with young children which is my target audience for this one. Hope this is a better week, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2014
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landmarks is one word
Good chapter, my friend. I have been posting work with a lot of spags in it. My concentration hasn't been the best lately with all that has gone on. I really would appreciate it if you would read the chapters of Debbie's Friends since you work with young children which is my target audience for this one. Hope this is a better week, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2014
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review.
Comment from Fridayauthor
This reads very smoothly and conveys a lot of information without being wordy. It holds the readers interest very well.
Very good writing,without unnecessary words.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2014
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This reads very smoothly and conveys a lot of information without being wordy. It holds the readers interest very well.
Very good writing,without unnecessary words.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2014
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review.
Comment from Max Edon
Another interesting post. Your dialogue is especially strong. Everything is getting very mysterious. The little boy Antonio is a cute character.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2014
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Another interesting post. Your dialogue is especially strong. Everything is getting very mysterious. The little boy Antonio is a cute character.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2014
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review.
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You are welcome
Comment from Writingfundimension
Barbara, so sorry for the delay in getting to this review. Been traveling. I've always enjoyed your novels, but this is one that I find especially compelling. I love your protagonist and how she's managing to handle herself with such finesse when dealing with all these males! I'm looking forward to learning more about Jim when the time is right.
Great job!
Bev
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2014
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Barbara, so sorry for the delay in getting to this review. Been traveling. I've always enjoyed your novels, but this is one that I find especially compelling. I love your protagonist and how she's managing to handle herself with such finesse when dealing with all these males! I'm looking forward to learning more about Jim when the time is right.
Great job!
Bev
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2014
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review. I late with the reply.
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You're very welcome, Barbara. I imagine you're pretty busy this time of year. :)
Comment from deepwater
Barbara, great pen to paper when is the book coming out ?
all I can or dare say is keep writing,
"Ma'am, I'd like to say something. I hope I speak for more than just myself. I've got almost twenty-five years on this ranch. When your dad hired me, you were just knee-high-to-a-goose."
England we would say grass hoper,
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2014
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Barbara, great pen to paper when is the book coming out ?
all I can or dare say is keep writing,
"Ma'am, I'd like to say something. I hope I speak for more than just myself. I've got almost twenty-five years on this ranch. When your dad hired me, you were just knee-high-to-a-goose."
England we would say grass hoper,
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2014
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review.
