The Girl in the Diner
a narrative poem about lost love in WWII14 total reviews
Comment from w.j.debi
An excellent story poem. You create realistic characters with believable emotions--the caring old coot, and the faithful and worried young woman. Excellent description of their interaction. Love bites for both of them. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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An excellent story poem. You create realistic characters with believable emotions--the caring old coot, and the faithful and worried young woman. Excellent description of their interaction. Love bites for both of them. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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I really appreciate your wonderful comments and best wishes. Thank you!
Comment from Eric1
This is a beautifully written poem about the loneliness sustained by those left behind in the horrors of war, theyoung girl alone in the cafe was a great setting, your poem flows along smoothly with good description and imagery, I wish you luck my friend.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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This is a beautifully written poem about the loneliness sustained by those left behind in the horrors of war, theyoung girl alone in the cafe was a great setting, your poem flows along smoothly with good description and imagery, I wish you luck my friend.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Thank you so much, Eric. I really appreciate your kind praise and best wishes.
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You are very welcome my friend.
Comment from Pyrrho
A bit-of-a-surprise ending that and a good one to boot. We leave her problem unresolved and hone in on your old one.
Reminds me of an old country western song titled "War is hell o the home front." google it and get a laugh.
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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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A bit-of-a-surprise ending that and a good one to boot. We leave her problem unresolved and hone in on your old one.
Reminds me of an old country western song titled "War is hell o the home front." google it and get a laugh.
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Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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It really pleases me you enjoyed the ending so much, and I will try to find that western song. Thanks for sharing!
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi,
Great story for this prompt, and the ending sign, seals, and delivers. Great artwork for a great presentation.
Good luck in the contest.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax (*-*)
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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Hi,
Great story for this prompt, and the ending sign, seals, and delivers. Great artwork for a great presentation.
Good luck in the contest.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax (*-*)
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Hopper has inspired me in the past to write prose, but not poetry up until now. I truly appreciate your kind comments and best wishes.
