When Mortal Life Drops Its Facade
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Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
I think you did a really good job with this. When life falls away, what is left but the spirit within. Still there and waiting for reuniting.
Lovely written with a wistful tone.
Good stuff
G
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reply by the author on 12-Dec-2015
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Hi there,
I think you did a really good job with this. When life falls away, what is left but the spirit within. Still there and waiting for reuniting.
Lovely written with a wistful tone.
Good stuff
G
(Check out 'Pay it forward' by IamCat)
Comment Written 08-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2015
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Hi G,
I was surprised to find a review when I logged in, and on a piece that is a bit older. I did as you recommended and looked up the IamCat poem. I appreciate you going so far back in my portfolio to find this one, and what a lovely reason as well. I'll have to take up the challenge and spread the good cheer. Thank you so much.
Merry Christmas
Debi
Comment from words
A terrific contest entry.
Wonderfully crafted.
I especially liked the line: when mortal life drops its facade
Yes, we are essentially spirit and eventually we all recognize this.
Bravo.
Hugs,d
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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A terrific contest entry.
Wonderfully crafted.
I especially liked the line: when mortal life drops its facade
Yes, we are essentially spirit and eventually we all recognize this.
Bravo.
Hugs,d
Comment Written 12-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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Thank you for the kind comments about the writing and the inspirational words as well.
Thank you also for reviewing something further back in my portfolio. It is so kind of you. I appreciate it . Debi
Comment from Dean Kuch
This was exquisite, w.j. debi, uniquely formatted and eloquently spoken. Certainly no mentions of either Heaven nor Hell.
Very nice work here...:)
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014
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This was exquisite, w.j. debi, uniquely formatted and eloquently spoken. Certainly no mentions of either Heaven nor Hell.
Very nice work here...:)
Comment Written 26-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014
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It is very sweet of you to say so, Dean. It didn't do so well in the contest, but maybe next time.
Comment from Eternal Muse
That was a great response to this difficult prompt. You painted a vivid picture for the reader.
What is really out there when we die? I often asked myself that question, and am fearful of the answer.
Great lines:
But somehow it's another place--
You don't respond to touch or call.
My presence seems an empty space;
physically, I'm not there at all.
Still, heart to heart you sense I'm near;
you smile at good times you recall.
You've done a good job, and presented an original composition.
Love, Y.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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That was a great response to this difficult prompt. You painted a vivid picture for the reader.
What is really out there when we die? I often asked myself that question, and am fearful of the answer.
Great lines:
But somehow it's another place--
You don't respond to touch or call.
My presence seems an empty space;
physically, I'm not there at all.
Still, heart to heart you sense I'm near;
you smile at good times you recall.
You've done a good job, and presented an original composition.
Love, Y.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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Thank you for the very encouraging review, Yeltel. I appreciate the kind comments about the composition and your insights on whatever is after death.. Thank you for pointing out the lines you liked, too. Debi
Comment from Nosha17
It seems like a place of peace and serenity, sounds very ideal. Good descriptive language and pleasant imagery to convey your message. Enjoyable read. Faye
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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It seems like a place of peace and serenity, sounds very ideal. Good descriptive language and pleasant imagery to convey your message. Enjoyable read. Faye
Comment Written 25-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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Thank you for the kind comments about the language and imagery, Faye. I am happy you enjoyed reading it. Debi
Comment from Linda England Bonam
You did a really wonderful job of writing this
poem and I think it is a good entry for the contest.
I also love Angelheart's pictures....always good!
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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You did a really wonderful job of writing this
poem and I think it is a good entry for the contest.
I also love Angelheart's pictures....always good!
Comment Written 25-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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I agree about Angelheart's pictures. She is an amazing artist. I keep thinking I'd like one of her pieces of art on my wall, but which on?
Thank you for the kind words about the writing. I appreciate the encouragement. Debi
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That would be a hard choice to make. All of her stuff that I have seen in awesome!
Comment from ArtGal
Wow, I think you did a great write on this! Wherever you may be, you don't seem to remember love. It's sad that the one who left has no recall as to the other's love who stayed behind. But, there's some hope that the one who left feels a nearness, and even smiles at good times recalled. But wherever this is, the two will see one another again. Excellent, and I really enjoyed. . .Sharon
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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Wow, I think you did a great write on this! Wherever you may be, you don't seem to remember love. It's sad that the one who left has no recall as to the other's love who stayed behind. But, there's some hope that the one who left feels a nearness, and even smiles at good times recalled. But wherever this is, the two will see one another again. Excellent, and I really enjoyed. . .Sharon
Comment Written 24-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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Thank you for the very encouraging comments about the writing, Sharon. I am flattered that you enjoyed reading it. Debi.
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I enjoyed this very much, Debi!
Comment from c_lucas
Some times we can feel the presence of someone who is not in physical form. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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Some times we can feel the presence of someone who is not in physical form. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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Thank you for the great review, Charlie. I am happy you enjoyed reading it. I appreciate the encouragement. Debi
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You're welcome, Debi. Charlie
Comment from RGstar
Haunting and binding, yet softly hopeful.
A nice write concerning neither hear nor there...just a place whee one could meet at the end of this life.
Well done,
Best wishes,
good luck.
RGstar
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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Haunting and binding, yet softly hopeful.
A nice write concerning neither hear nor there...just a place whee one could meet at the end of this life.
Well done,
Best wishes,
good luck.
RGstar
Comment Written 24-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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Thank you for the excellent review and kind remarks about the writing, RGstar. I also appreciate the good luck wishes. I like that you found it haunting and hopeful. Your comments leave me smiling.
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
This is a lovely poem for the contest. Content is perfect and follows the rules and your rhyme scheme is unusual aba etc throughout. I enjoyed this unusual love story and with you Good Luck in the contest. Regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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This is a lovely poem for the contest. Content is perfect and follows the rules and your rhyme scheme is unusual aba etc throughout. I enjoyed this unusual love story and with you Good Luck in the contest. Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 24-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Thank you for the kind comments and good luck wishes, I am happy you enjoyed the love story.
