A Breeze Swept Through
A Quatern126 total reviews
Comment from madhatter1977
A lovely tale in a poem with a peaceful and calming message in the last lines:
"Not all's a war to lose or win.
A breeze swept through and brushed my skin."
A great message, natural imagery and flowing rhymes too! Well done and best wishes, Brooke. Pete :)
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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A lovely tale in a poem with a peaceful and calming message in the last lines:
"Not all's a war to lose or win.
A breeze swept through and brushed my skin."
A great message, natural imagery and flowing rhymes too! Well done and best wishes, Brooke. Pete :)
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Pete, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from ArtGal
Brooke, if only we could all be more like the mighty oak and stand firm. The breeze was just passing through, like people do. Although the leaves were in dance, the oak would have no part, for the breeze lacked power, so just moved on, again, as people do. I really like this poetry form, and you write it so beautifully. . .Sharon
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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Brooke, if only we could all be more like the mighty oak and stand firm. The breeze was just passing through, like people do. Although the leaves were in dance, the oak would have no part, for the breeze lacked power, so just moved on, again, as people do. I really like this poetry form, and you write it so beautifully. . .Sharon
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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Sharon, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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You're so very welcome, Brooke.
Comment from gypsycaravan
Another beautiful poem to read out loud. The breeze seemed gentle under the protection of the mighty oak. Thank you for posting.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Another beautiful poem to read out loud. The breeze seemed gentle under the protection of the mighty oak. Thank you for posting.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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gypsycaravan, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from risktaker
I love the imagery and the message. it made me think of people. People come and go in our lives. Some just pass by briefly like the wind passing across your skin. there is no connection or injury, you just touch lightly and move on. We are not meant to have deep connections with all people who pass us during this life walk. I relate to "not all's a war to lose or win."
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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I love the imagery and the message. it made me think of people. People come and go in our lives. Some just pass by briefly like the wind passing across your skin. there is no connection or injury, you just touch lightly and move on. We are not meant to have deep connections with all people who pass us during this life walk. I relate to "not all's a war to lose or win."
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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risktaker, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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OK
Comment from Aussie
Been (pronounced bin?) rhyming with skin - yes? Interesting philosophy from you. The four winds have bin' so many places and will never tell you where - we just accept the hot wind from the desert and in the Bible...the Lord sent the south wind to cool the land. If winds could speak - so many tales could be told. Well done mum.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Been (pronounced bin?) rhyming with skin - yes? Interesting philosophy from you. The four winds have bin' so many places and will never tell you where - we just accept the hot wind from the desert and in the Bible...the Lord sent the south wind to cool the land. If winds could speak - so many tales could be told. Well done mum.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Yep, Kay - in American it is an exact rhyme LOL
thank you so much, my Aussie friend :-) Brooke
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Posting a story now! :-)
Comment from royowen
The wind, mysterious, untameable, unpredictable, the great metaphor that serves poets, writers and weather people the best, it brings, dust, rain, snow and sleet, destruction, and beauty! Great descriptive poem, well penned, beautifully presented! Nice even metered poem in aabb rhyming, well done, blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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The wind, mysterious, untameable, unpredictable, the great metaphor that serves poets, writers and weather people the best, it brings, dust, rain, snow and sleet, destruction, and beauty! Great descriptive poem, well penned, beautifully presented! Nice even metered poem in aabb rhyming, well done, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Roy, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from OLA THOMAS
A good philosophical poem that is so real and true about life. The wind of life blows and cause harm to many, but undeterred some remained without any effect. A well done quatrin done with deep thoughts. Well done.
ola thomas
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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A good philosophical poem that is so real and true about life. The wind of life blows and cause harm to many, but undeterred some remained without any effect. A well done quatrin done with deep thoughts. Well done.
ola thomas
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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Ola, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from nomi338
A very beautiful and powerful statement. Some events in our live barely touch or affect us, while others have the capacity to knock us to our knees. A minor setback need not cause us to consider suicide, while the loss of a dear loved one may cause us such despair that we may never recover. You are such a source of profound wisdom, I am again awed.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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A very beautiful and powerful statement. Some events in our live barely touch or affect us, while others have the capacity to knock us to our knees. A minor setback need not cause us to consider suicide, while the loss of a dear loved one may cause us such despair that we may never recover. You are such a source of profound wisdom, I am again awed.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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nomi, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Ben Colder
Sounds refreshing. Our month of March normally gives this feeling when sitting out beneath the oaks. Soon we will see the change of colors here in our mountains. Well done Brooke.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Sounds refreshing. Our month of March normally gives this feeling when sitting out beneath the oaks. Soon we will see the change of colors here in our mountains. Well done Brooke.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Ben, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from nancyjam
Beautiful Quatern. Lovely images.
Repeating lines well placed and rhymed for smooth
flow.
Good use of alliteration and assonance and
personification of nature.
A beautiful poem and presentation. Nancy
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Beautiful Quatern. Lovely images.
Repeating lines well placed and rhymed for smooth
flow.
Good use of alliteration and assonance and
personification of nature.
A beautiful poem and presentation. Nancy
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Nancy, thank you so much :-) Brooke
