A Breeze Swept Through
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Comment from Kaila Mari
A well structured commentary and philosophy poem written in four quatrain metered rhyme. I really like how your first line becomes your second line in the following stanza, until you finish with in the fourth place at the last stanza. There must be a name in poetry for that kind of writing. The story line easily flows. Good alliteration with breeze/brushed, shift/stance, stayed/steady, strong/still. The word imagery shows the Oak to be strong and the artwork enhances the total image on the breeze just passing through.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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A well structured commentary and philosophy poem written in four quatrain metered rhyme. I really like how your first line becomes your second line in the following stanza, until you finish with in the fourth place at the last stanza. There must be a name in poetry for that kind of writing. The story line easily flows. Good alliteration with breeze/brushed, shift/stance, stayed/steady, strong/still. The word imagery shows the Oak to be strong and the artwork enhances the total image on the breeze just passing through.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Kalia, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is a beautiful write, brooke, I love the repeating line because a breeze caressing the skin is just a wonderful feeling, great imagery presented in this quatern
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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this is a beautiful write, brooke, I love the repeating line because a breeze caressing the skin is just a wonderful feeling, great imagery presented in this quatern
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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sweetwoodjax, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from c_lucas
The Texas coast has numerous trees that shows the effect of high winds. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. "Was that Sawyer, who just flew by?" (LOL)
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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The Texas coast has numerous trees that shows the effect of high winds. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. "Was that Sawyer, who just flew by?" (LOL)
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Charlie, thanks so much :-) Brooke
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You're welcome, Brooke. Charlie
Comment from lynglyng
another great poem. I liked the feel that you gave to the reader as if they could actually feel the wind brush their skin or see it blowing the leaves on the trees. Your imagery in this poem is excellent. Thank you for sharing. Blessings, LyngLyng
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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another great poem. I liked the feel that you gave to the reader as if they could actually feel the wind brush their skin or see it blowing the leaves on the trees. Your imagery in this poem is excellent. Thank you for sharing. Blessings, LyngLyng
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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lynglyng, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from TAB_that's me
If we could understand the voice of the breeze, I bet it is a big ol' gossip spreader:) Beautifully written poem Brooke!
Teresa
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reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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If we could understand the voice of the breeze, I bet it is a big ol' gossip spreader:) Beautifully written poem Brooke!
Teresa
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Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Teresa, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from kiwijenny
Well done Brooke.....
I love the wind breezing on from who knows where and oak tree not deigning to join in the dance,,,,,it is a dance that leaves do
Well done
God bless
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reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014
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Well done Brooke.....
I love the wind breezing on from who knows where and oak tree not deigning to join in the dance,,,,,it is a dance that leaves do
Well done
God bless
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Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014
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Jenny, thank you so much :-) Brooke
