Worries Removed
The mental landscape with...5 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
On my computer screen your middle 9 syllable line is formatted to look like two lines:
without clouds lead/to crazed desolate
other than that, your poem is in good 1/9/1 structure
good alliterative pairing of clouds/crazed
you create mood well, especially when paired with the stunning photo
Brooke
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015
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On my computer screen your middle 9 syllable line is formatted to look like two lines:
without clouds lead/to crazed desolate
other than that, your poem is in good 1/9/1 structure
good alliterative pairing of clouds/crazed
you create mood well, especially when paired with the stunning photo
Brooke
Comment Written 26-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015
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Thank you so much for your kind review :)
Comment from Smoothiecool
good luck in the contest
you follow the contest prompt
your few words portray the image of desolation well
good visual
cheers smoothiecool
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015
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good luck in the contest
you follow the contest prompt
your few words portray the image of desolation well
good visual
cheers smoothiecool
Comment Written 22-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015
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Thank you so much for your kind review :)
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most welcome...SC
Comment from LoannaLois
Oh the worry that becomes crazed, indeed, to the farmer without rain and the people living in drought conditions. The illustration is perfect.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015
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Oh the worry that becomes crazed, indeed, to the farmer without rain and the people living in drought conditions. The illustration is perfect.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015
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Thank you so much for your kind review :)
Comment from Charlene0513
A picture that discloses the true parched lands when not nourished by the warmth of the sunshine.
Your second line is broken into two lines should only be 1-9-1
straight across.
Charlene
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015
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A picture that discloses the true parched lands when not nourished by the warmth of the sunshine.
Your second line is broken into two lines should only be 1-9-1
straight across.
Charlene
Comment Written 22-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015
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Thank you so much for your kind review :)
Comment from Linda England Bonam
Very nicely done! I have seen some pictures of California, and I am sitting here wondering if that is where this is from, and feeling a little guilty for getting so much rain last night in central Indiana. You did a very good job with this 1-9-1. Good Luck!
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015
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Very nicely done! I have seen some pictures of California, and I am sitting here wondering if that is where this is from, and feeling a little guilty for getting so much rain last night in central Indiana. You did a very good job with this 1-9-1. Good Luck!
Comment Written 22-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015
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Thank you so much for your kind review :)
