Comment from Smoothiecool

Excellent

good luck in the contest

your acrostic 5-7-5 follows the prompts

your letters portray the image of the birth of a bird well

good visual

cheers Smoothiecool

 Comment Written 22-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014

thank you! :)

reply by Smoothiecool on 23-Aug-2014

welcome...SC >> Faye

Comment from sgalletti

Excellent

Well, I don't particularly like the crazy prompt, but I love what you did with it! Great choice of words (embryonic, porcelain) in this short poem. Best of luck in the contest. Sue

 Comment Written 22-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014

thank you! :)

Comment from rrabinow

Excellent

I like the line grown within porcelain shell. Wonderful use of description in your acrostic haiku poem that create a wonderful image. Best of luck.

 Comment Written 22-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014

thank you! :)

Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

Beautiful concept for what I had for breakfast......I must pause and consider before I break the porcelain shell....my embryonic cell on toast
Well done........I have thought a different way because of it
Thanks
God bless

 Comment Written 22-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014

thank you! :)

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

Your poem is in excellent 5/7/5 syllable count
It is also a solid acrostic for Egg
good descriptive detail
I like the rhyme of cell/shell
good alliterative pairing of grown/greets
excellent consonance of L sounds throughout
Brooke

 Comment Written 22-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014

thanks so much! :)