Comment from amaranthblue

Excellent

Wow, all I can think of is "passion feed words" the intense euphoria that comes with trusted and shared love a complete surrender that brings even more back to you... A very special bond that few know but we you hold it , it is treasured and nurtured through every tide of life...

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2005

Comment from Seancuig

Excellent

Great last line Pili.
Thoughts of loss? Not sure, but it certainly had a sadness to it. Maybe melancholy is a better description of the emotion I got from it.

Anyways, it was a wonderful read nonethless

Thanks
Sean

 Comment Written 06-Sep-2005

Comment from sengwriter

Excellent

Pain is welcomed for the shake of a love which has every touch of truth and sensibility. So I consider your pain expressed here is definitely something of that sort. Your memories is so rich in love and that intimacy being absent, now you always cherish those past unisons of a intimate togetherness.

I like the subtle way of expression that you've used here as your love is hold high, a great esteem is paid to your love ( except "the dampness of your unison") and what is more important to note here is that no great tune of frustration ( barring the 3rd stanza) that way is presented here.

I read this poem and review it with great pleasure and concern. Gautam

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2005

Comment from AuroraSky

Excellent

I love the reference to the cosmic dance of tranquility--very beautiful and ties the poem into itself just perfectly. (sorry, I've been slack in reviewing lately...trying to catch up).

now escape/escapes

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2005

Comment from bayley

Excellent

Sensual and emotive but it seems to be holding back a little. The author is reflecting on past experiences and is not sure about the possibility of opening old wounds. " things if I may. In the 3rd verse you use the word 'sad' twice. That's unusual for you not to come up with an alternative. And in the 4th verse, should 'escape' be 'escapes' to connect with mind? Beautiful words and mood ~Sean

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2005

Comment from Winbow

Excellent

Hi Pili
Lovely Sunday morning read. Sad though, yet I think I understand it, I hope. Past relationships seem to have a way of carving crevices of pain in the soul/heart. One kind of becomes allergic to new love and passion.
Everything works fine and just as one wants to give the heart to another, the old pain has a way of knocking on the door. So the soul has a way of retreating to the "sleepy blue water of the lake". I guess to protect itself. I wonder if we really do have control over that?

I apologize if I misunderstood.

A suggestion re escape.
My mind
now escape - (escapes?)

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2005

Comment from CYRANOGATOR

Excellent

What a wonderful moving and simply pure poem. The thoughts of intimacy and wonder of the emotion created entertwines in a fluid thought. Good job.

Wally III

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2005

Comment from Bryana

Excellent

Another romantic, beautiful poem my friend.

I love this...

I could love you
So deeply
tonight,
palpate
the new life
of my cells,
breath the warmth
of your skin.

Have a happy Sunday. Un abrazo

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2005

Comment from jkhudson

Excellent

I interpret this poem to mean that union between two people in love brings release from sad memories and also brings tranquility. this poem is a beautiful way to say so. However, one observation: sad is repeated in this verse, and kind of throws it off a bit. Perhaps a synonym exchanged for one of them
Contained
by dismal memories
from the past,
I slowly become
sad, remote
and detached.

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2005

Comment from Lainee

Excellent

Beautiful Pili. I like the subtle twist mid way through showing reservations then the strong ending of decision. Another little beauty from you that carries such depth throughout.

May mind ...may my mind...perhaps...
now escape
into the sleepy
blue waters

Goodluck always,
Lainee :O)

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2005