If Love Be Flowers
rhyming quatrains in 8/7/8/7156 total reviews
Comment from Sanku
absolutely endearing poem and an equally endearing picture.I loved the way you went about emphasizing the need for abundance and for drawing in sun and showers to full the fields. What a gifted pen you have ,Brooke and the closing stanza is brilliant .Thanks for posting these
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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absolutely endearing poem and an equally endearing picture.I loved the way you went about emphasizing the need for abundance and for drawing in sun and showers to full the fields. What a gifted pen you have ,Brooke and the closing stanza is brilliant .Thanks for posting these
Comment Written 25-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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Sanku, thank you so much for your generous response to this poem, my friend :-) Brooke
Comment from michaelcahill
This sounds so heroic and classic. It brings to mind a knight on one knee professing his love to a princess. Excellent flow throughout. Easy to follow the very first time. The word flower stood out slightly being used twice. I really have to use a fine tooth comb to find anything to talk about with your work. Hahaha I thought blossums might work in the first line. Eh... Then I was trying to fit "endless hours" into the second line of the third stanza. "we'd run for endless hours". All to no avail!! Well such a minor thing, but at least I'm attempting some kind of input! In any case, this is wonderful. I'm going to try it on Donna and see if I get a kiss!! mikey
Update... I did!!
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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This sounds so heroic and classic. It brings to mind a knight on one knee professing his love to a princess. Excellent flow throughout. Easy to follow the very first time. The word flower stood out slightly being used twice. I really have to use a fine tooth comb to find anything to talk about with your work. Hahaha I thought blossums might work in the first line. Eh... Then I was trying to fit "endless hours" into the second line of the third stanza. "we'd run for endless hours". All to no avail!! Well such a minor thing, but at least I'm attempting some kind of input! In any case, this is wonderful. I'm going to try it on Donna and see if I get a kiss!! mikey
Update... I did!!
Comment Written 24-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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Thanks so much, Mikey - so glad you got a kiss out of it! LOL :-) Brooke
Comment from NightWriter
If Love Be Flowers is a beautiful set of rhyming quatrains. Perfect as always with nice flow, perfect rhythm and rhyme. Outstanding work here once again.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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If Love Be Flowers is a beautiful set of rhyming quatrains. Perfect as always with nice flow, perfect rhythm and rhyme. Outstanding work here once again.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Steve, thank you so very much for your generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Terror2s
Ah, he already looks like a lady charmer. This one made me smile. I hope you are getting a chance to see him before school begins- if he is in pre-school. T2
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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Ah, he already looks like a lady charmer. This one made me smile. I hope you are getting a chance to see him before school begins- if he is in pre-school. T2
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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Abby, thank you so much. Yep, he is a charmer for sure :-) I will see him in early December. He starts pre pre pre school in September - he is in the 2 and a half year old class though he is not quite that old yet. He will just have two four hour sessions a week :-) Brooke
Comment from risktaker
I love the choice of words and the imagery. I feel the intense love for the person in the poem. The photo is outstanding and illustrates the sincerity of the love. I relate to "a vase could not contain the blooms to show my true love's substance." Thanks
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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I love the choice of words and the imagery. I feel the intense love for the person in the poem. The photo is outstanding and illustrates the sincerity of the love. I relate to "a vase could not contain the blooms to show my true love's substance." Thanks
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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risktaker, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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Comment from nancyjam
So sweet, these two. What a darling picture
to illustrate your charming love poem.
Great rhyme and meter.
Good use of enjambment for smooth flow.
I love the idea of a field of flowers as a measure of
love for someone. Nancy
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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So sweet, these two. What a darling picture
to illustrate your charming love poem.
Great rhyme and meter.
Good use of enjambment for smooth flow.
I love the idea of a field of flowers as a measure of
love for someone. Nancy
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Nancy, thank you for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Leineco
A perfect poem to end my reviewing run on! What better way to turn a metaphor of love into a proclamation? (Both imagistically and literarily :-)
I'm glad I saved my last six!!! I totally loved this. :-)
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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A perfect poem to end my reviewing run on! What better way to turn a metaphor of love into a proclamation? (Both imagistically and literarily :-)
I'm glad I saved my last six!!! I totally loved this. :-)
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Leineco, thank you for spending that final six :-) I appreciate your encouragement and generosity :-) Brooke
Comment from lancellot
Actually, I have though Love and flowers go together because, a flower is a perfect representation of love. I begins as a small seed, is cared for, nurtured and then blossoms into a beautiful new form. This is the perfect poem to go with it. Well done.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Actually, I have though Love and flowers go together because, a flower is a perfect representation of love. I begins as a small seed, is cared for, nurtured and then blossoms into a beautiful new form. This is the perfect poem to go with it. Well done.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Lancellot, thank you for your thoughtful reading of this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from sibhus
Wow, what a touching poem about the abundance of love. Wonderful images that show the possiblities of love in bloom all around us. The picture is perfect, they make such a cute couple. Really good stuff there, Brooke.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Wow, what a touching poem about the abundance of love. Wonderful images that show the possiblities of love in bloom all around us. The picture is perfect, they make such a cute couple. Really good stuff there, Brooke.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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sibhus, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from N.K. Wagner
A declaration of unlimited love is abcb rhymed quatrains with the treat of a graceful enjambment tying the third and fouth stanzas. Such sweet simplicity, yet so meaningful. Good job, Brooke! (Outta sixes now. Sorry!) :) nancy
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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A declaration of unlimited love is abcb rhymed quatrains with the treat of a graceful enjambment tying the third and fouth stanzas. Such sweet simplicity, yet so meaningful. Good job, Brooke! (Outta sixes now. Sorry!) :) nancy
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Nancy, thank you so much :-) No need for apologies! Brooke
