Comment from w.j.debi

Excellent

My goodness this is heart rending. I know all life needs to survive, but my thoughts went to the baby dolphin. Excellent job creating the imagery, no matter how horrible.

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014

Thank you so much for the great review. So sorry for the delay in replying to it.

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

Your poem is in excellent haiku form
a compelling visual of those circling sharks with the cute little baby dolphin as their impending meal
I'm practically crying at the thought of the water's turning read with the baby's spilled blood
Brooke

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014

Thank you so much for the great review. So sorry for the delay in replying to it.

Comment from Susanne M. Psyris

Exceptional

Yelena! This is so cool. The imagery is a horror; it slaps you in the face. Good color choices. Loved it! Hugs, Susanne

 Comment Written 22-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014

Susanne, thank you so much for the awesome review! There are a couple of poets here who do these kinds of presentations, I liked it and decided to try it. Of course you liked it - the imagery is horror, you the VP of BRPS! (smile).

So glad to see you at my page.

reply by Susanne M. Psyris on 23-Aug-2014

truly great work, honey. your deserved. hugs, Susanne

Comment from Just Pete

Excellent

A most topical haiku. (There have been quite a few shark attacks here in the last few months). The satori is well chosen and creates a vivid image. I wish you luck in the contest - Pete

 Comment Written 21-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014

Thank you for the great review. I had to change it quite a bit to fit the contest format (as sharks are not considered mammals! lol.). Still, it featured two sharks. You may want to take another look, I changed the presentation too.

Comment from JM

Excellent

Another "jaws" episode. Great choice of color scheme: red (blood), black (death). The victim is a beloved water friend and a helpless one at that. Powerful imagery.

 Comment Written 21-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014

Thank you so much for the great review. So sorry for the delay in replying to it.

Comment from rrabinow

Excellent

The syllable count is correct and all the other rules were followed. Wonderful use if description in your poem to create the imagery. Best of luck.

 Comment Written 21-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014

Thank you so much for the great review. So sorry for the delay in replying to it.

Comment from tfawcus

Excellent

Nature is indeed cruel. In these days of unrelenting bad news from warring nations in the Middle East I cannot help making a connection with the sharks of war and the innocent victims being torn apart like your baby dolphin.

 Comment Written 21-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014

Thank you so much for the great review. So sorry for the delay in replying to it.

Comment from RYME4U

Excellent

Very well chosen words. This Haiku tells a cautionary tale. It also lets the reader know about the inborn habits of sharks
Good job!

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014

Thank you so much for the great review. So sorry for the delay in replying to it.

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

Ouch! I live across from the ocean, but I'm glad I'm not a surfer after reading your poem. I enjoyed your economy of words in this vivid 3-7-3. Best wishes in the contest- Joan

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014

Thank you so much for the great review, Joan. So sorry for the delay in replying to it. Yes, living near ocean can be hazardous!

Comment from shelley kaye

Excellent

this was a great haiku.... unfortunately, sharks are not mammals.

suggestion: maybe change the surfer dude to an ocean mammal?

sharks circle

around bold [insert ocean mammal here]

they smell blood


just a thought ;-)

thanx for sharing and good luck in the contest :)

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014

I am sorry, Shelley, I was too involved in my own sharks contest (lol). I made changes, take a look.

reply by shelley kaye on 21-Aug-2014

lol no problem! all fixed now! good luck :)