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Pooping a Sonnet (acrostic sonnet)

Acrostic Poetry contest entry

7 total reviews 
Comment from Leineco
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I have to admit, your poem has a lot of merit! The iambic meter of a sonnet, the structure of a sonnet (third stanza volta even!) and even the metaphor you engaged are all meticulously crafted :-)

BUT - the poem loses the power of "surprise and delight" by laying it out in advance, in the title. Acrostic poems are, admittedly, most often titled with the word or phrase that is being spelled out. . .but they don't have to be!

I can't help but think, I would have enjoyed the slow dawning of the "light" so much more than being bludgeoned by the title.

Seriously, this was cleverly written as a "final reveal" poem (with its well maintained series of on theme lines pertaining to the rather unique approach ) that I really wish the title hadn't been so off-putting :-( Nonetheless. . .I did enjoy the read once I got over it LOL

 Comment Written 21-Aug-2014

reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
    Lol. Yeah I figured I'd go ahead with the title letting them half way knowing what to expect because if not once they read the very first line I would have lost some of them, haha. So if they read past the title they sort of knew what was coming, lol. Thank you for the great review, Leineco. I'm glad you liked it even though the title gave it away.
Comment from Maggieluv
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This is amazing - accrostiic-sardonic- ironic and best of all hilarious. Loved your entry and won't be surprised if you win - champion!

 Comment Written 21-Aug-2014

reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
    Thank you for the fantastic review, Maggie. I really appreciate the gracious stars. I'm glad you liked this silly thing.
Comment from Page 3
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There is nothing forced in this sonnet. The metaphor speaks clearly to be. I hope you wipe up with this. Good luck. Page 3

 Comment Written 21-Aug-2014

reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
    Lol, wipe up, haha. Thank you for the great review, Page 3. I'm glad you liked this silly thing.
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
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My question is this: Did you really write this on the toilet? Actually, no don't tell me. LOL. Great job and good luck in the contest

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2014

reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
    Lol. Thank you for the great review and good luck wishes, EL. I'm glad you liked this silly thing.
Comment from rrabinow
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I like that you wrote your acrostic poem on the sonnet form. Wonderful flow from line to line of your poem. Great use of description as well. Best of luck.

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2014

reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
    Thank you for the great review, rr. I'm glad you liked this silly thing.
Comment from kiwijenny
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Two words ....ew and ew
Ok the sonnet I get...pooping one out and thinking of stools is ...well ....ew
Do you have a key cleanser? Ew
God bless

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2014

reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
    Lol. Thank you for the review, Jenny. just goofing around with the prompt.

    ;)
reply by kiwijenny on 20-Aug-2014
    I get it...:o)
Comment from Linda England Bonam
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This is very creative, funny and clever, to name a few! I enjoyed it, and started smiling just reading the title! If the contest is based on creativity you have this one nailed!!!

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2014

reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
    Thank you for the great review and stars, Linda. I'm glad you liked this silly thing.