Dex and Chianti
A pleasant ride in the woods.35 total reviews
Comment from Eigle Rull
This story was very well written in easy to read and understand words. It has a great storyline but the dialog is what made it so good. It was perfect in my opinion. I found no errors. This story was exciting from beginning to end.
Always with respect,
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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This story was very well written in easy to read and understand words. It has a great storyline but the dialog is what made it so good. It was perfect in my opinion. I found no errors. This story was exciting from beginning to end.
Always with respect,
Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Thank you so much, Eigle Rull, for the galaxy and the fine comments. Much appreciated. Peace, Lee
Comment from Drew Delaney
Wow! Quite an entertaining piece of work. I felt like I was watching a TV show with gangsters and all.
I hope you do well in the contest. It was quite a story, and full of hype. Good job.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Wow! Quite an entertaining piece of work. I felt like I was watching a TV show with gangsters and all.
I hope you do well in the contest. It was quite a story, and full of hype. Good job.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Thanks so much, Drew. I'm delighted you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
Comment from AAud
I sure didn't see that ending coming. Dexter so clever, I thought he'd be able to talk his way out of getting shot. Thugs. Whaddaya gonna do, am I right? LOL
The colloquial dialog was perfect. You did a great job showing the characters through their speech. You didn't come out and say it, you trusted that the reader would figure it out from your clues that Chianti was no Einstein. Yea!
Dexter was a very likeable character. Sorry to see him go. Still, it was an awesome story!
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reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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I sure didn't see that ending coming. Dexter so clever, I thought he'd be able to talk his way out of getting shot. Thugs. Whaddaya gonna do, am I right? LOL
The colloquial dialog was perfect. You did a great job showing the characters through their speech. You didn't come out and say it, you trusted that the reader would figure it out from your clues that Chianti was no Einstein. Yea!
Dexter was a very likeable character. Sorry to see him go. Still, it was an awesome story!
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Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Thanks, AAud. Who knows? Dexter might show up in a prequel.
I'm glad you liked the dialogue--my bread and butter. Thank you so much. Peace, Lee
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, humpwhistle. you did an excellent job crafting this story about the hole in the ground that was filled up from the conmen working a play. I enjoyed reading it. I only spotted one error====It wasn't hard work instead of I wasn't hard work. good luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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this is very well written, humpwhistle. you did an excellent job crafting this story about the hole in the ground that was filled up from the conmen working a play. I enjoyed reading it. I only spotted one error====It wasn't hard work instead of I wasn't hard work. good luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Thank you, Sweetie. I'm delighted you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
Comment from adewpearl
Love your opening which not so subtly makes fun of the prompt's required opening line
Great description of Tom Chianti
Excellent dialogue between the guy waiting to be whacked and the guy waiting to whack him
skimming as expected creative reassignment - love the logic of this rationalization
stallin' for time you don't have, Dex add comma for direct address
dead men grow no tails LOL
great ending - another perfect gem of a tale :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Love your opening which not so subtly makes fun of the prompt's required opening line
Great description of Tom Chianti
Excellent dialogue between the guy waiting to be whacked and the guy waiting to whack him
skimming as expected creative reassignment - love the logic of this rationalization
stallin' for time you don't have, Dex add comma for direct address
dead men grow no tails LOL
great ending - another perfect gem of a tale :-) Brooke
Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Thanks, Brooke. Half the fun of writing this was making fun of the opening line--and I got to bring up Groucho!
Thanks for your kind comments and generosity. Peace, Lee
