A Golden Coverlet
quatrains in abab rhyme137 total reviews
Comment from Carole Rosa
Brooke, So lovely. The photo art is beautiful. I would like to have that yellow flower growing in my garden next to all my weeds. I've been gone and the weeds are taller than my flowers.
You know that I know nothing about poetry, but I always enjoy and cherish the lovely poems that you compose. Hugs. Carole
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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Brooke, So lovely. The photo art is beautiful. I would like to have that yellow flower growing in my garden next to all my weeds. I've been gone and the weeds are taller than my flowers.
You know that I know nothing about poetry, but I always enjoy and cherish the lovely poems that you compose. Hugs. Carole
Comment Written 20-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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Thanks so much, Carole :-) Brooke
Comment from humpwhistle
I love the last line, Brooke. I love writers who respect me enough not to hit me over the head.
Some marvelous phrasing:
nor had the dawn who ruled the skies
released one fiber from her gown. --so smoothly handled. Lesser poets don't have your knack for turning words to fit.
I also like the internal rhyme in the second stanza, and again the smooth wording at the conclusion of the same quatrain.
Good stuff, Brooke.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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I love the last line, Brooke. I love writers who respect me enough not to hit me over the head.
Some marvelous phrasing:
nor had the dawn who ruled the skies
released one fiber from her gown. --so smoothly handled. Lesser poets don't have your knack for turning words to fit.
I also like the internal rhyme in the second stanza, and again the smooth wording at the conclusion of the same quatrain.
Good stuff, Brooke.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 20-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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Thanks so very much, Lee - I appreciate your generous sixth star. I also am not a fan of those poems that declare I had better share the writer's religious beliefs lest I burn in hell. LOL Brooke
Comment from Louise Michelle
Hi Brooke,
What a splendid poem to read first thing in the morning. The color yellow is so vibrant and I think we talked about how it affects me a while back.
It's interesting that you classify this as philosophical and are ruling out the possibilities for the coverlet. I think it's a spread of yellow flowers, probably wild flowers.
Hugs,
Lou
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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Hi Brooke,
What a splendid poem to read first thing in the morning. The color yellow is so vibrant and I think we talked about how it affects me a while back.
It's interesting that you classify this as philosophical and are ruling out the possibilities for the coverlet. I think it's a spread of yellow flowers, probably wild flowers.
Hugs,
Lou
Comment Written 20-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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Thank you, Lou - yes, it was meant to be a spread of flowers on what was once a barren patch of ground :-) Brooke
Comment from mikemagine
Very well-written, this. Superlative use of words and rhyme. Very visual! Twenty lines seems a perfect number for many poems. "I saw a golden coverlet...and wondered who had woven it." Perfect!
Mike
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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Very well-written, this. Superlative use of words and rhyme. Very visual! Twenty lines seems a perfect number for many poems. "I saw a golden coverlet...and wondered who had woven it." Perfect!
Mike
Comment Written 20-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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Mike, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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Sure thing!!
Comment from sweetthanesue
bedazzling with excellent rhyme and verse....some things are so precious and beautiful....the artist paints the picture and you have voiced the words...nice one to warm the soul...beauty of nature ...sue
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bedazzling with excellent rhyme and verse....some things are so precious and beautiful....the artist paints the picture and you have voiced the words...nice one to warm the soul...beauty of nature ...sue
Comment Written 20-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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Sue, thank you so much for your generous and thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Dean Kuch
First, I found it interesting that you gave the sun a female persona, Brooke. I've always assumed that the Moon was feminine, and the sun, a masculine persona. But...that's just me. Probably based on most everything I read in poetry about the two givers of light.
Good enjambment in this lovely verse, as always. Nice rhyming and near rhyming, with "it/coverlet". An wonderful image of vibrant, vivid yellows your paint with your poetic palette, my talented friend.
Excellent!
~Dean
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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First, I found it interesting that you gave the sun a female persona, Brooke. I've always assumed that the Moon was feminine, and the sun, a masculine persona. But...that's just me. Probably based on most everything I read in poetry about the two givers of light.
Good enjambment in this lovely verse, as always. Nice rhyming and near rhyming, with "it/coverlet". An wonderful image of vibrant, vivid yellows your paint with your poetic palette, my talented friend.
Excellent!
~Dean
Comment Written 20-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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Thank you, Dean :-) Like I told rama devi, the sun is actually a big old ball of gas, so I figure I can personify it as whatever gender tickles my fancy. LOL Brooke :-)
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Yep, you certainly can, Brooke. Ain't no rules agin' it, as fer as far as I can tell, LOL...
Comment from Aussie
Beautifully presented quatrains, yellow the colour so wonderful. I enjoyed your story/poem so much and thought it beautiful. Well done mum.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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Beautifully presented quatrains, yellow the colour so wonderful. I enjoyed your story/poem so much and thought it beautiful. Well done mum.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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Kay, thank you so much, my friend :-) Brooke
Comment from rhymelord
Dear Brooke,
So reminiscent of "And all at once I saw a crowd, a host of golden daffodils". Just as vivid, just as powerful. Lovely writing.
Regards
Reg
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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Dear Brooke,
So reminiscent of "And all at once I saw a crowd, a host of golden daffodils". Just as vivid, just as powerful. Lovely writing.
Regards
Reg
Comment Written 20-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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Thank you, Reg, for your lovely comments :-) Brooke
Comment from Gargantuan2
The poetry is as good as the nature that inspired it. I often wonder at photography like this too. I have many pictures as background for my computer to prove this.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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The poetry is as good as the nature that inspired it. I often wonder at photography like this too. I have many pictures as background for my computer to prove this.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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Gargantuan, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
'A Golden Coverlet' is an extremely well-written and intriguing piece. Not for a moment would I attempt to guess who wove the golden coverlet. It was a pleasure to review this talented poet's work.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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'A Golden Coverlet' is an extremely well-written and intriguing piece. Not for a moment would I attempt to guess who wove the golden coverlet. It was a pleasure to review this talented poet's work.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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Duchess, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Brooke as always you're welcome
:-)the Duchess
