A Golden Coverlet
quatrains in abab rhyme137 total reviews
Comment from Kenneth Schaal
That's easy--Brooke did, that's who. The poems a beautiful compliment to the photo. The verse offers the usual easy read, but has a couple of interesting rhymes and rhythms. 'Coverlet, and, woven it--lines S1L4 and S2L3. Kenny
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014
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That's easy--Brooke did, that's who. The poems a beautiful compliment to the photo. The verse offers the usual easy read, but has a couple of interesting rhymes and rhythms. 'Coverlet, and, woven it--lines S1L4 and S2L3. Kenny
Comment Written 22-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014
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Thank you, Kenny, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from GracieAnn
Brooke, I enjoyed the shifting of meter gears and the rhythm in the words. It is a touching tribute to nature's finery. Nicely crafted. :0 GracieAnn
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014
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Brooke, I enjoyed the shifting of meter gears and the rhythm in the words. It is a touching tribute to nature's finery. Nicely crafted. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 21-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014
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GracieAnn, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Linda England Bonam
This was very beautiful, Brooke, as your writing always is. The picture and colors are lovely, too. I just noticed in your author notes that the photo inspired the poem! Very nice!
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014
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This was very beautiful, Brooke, as your writing always is. The picture and colors are lovely, too. I just noticed in your author notes that the photo inspired the poem! Very nice!
Comment Written 21-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014
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Linda, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from thedreampeddler
Yet another fantastic poem by a master poet.
There exist a certain playfulness about your works that make them unique.
Awesome.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014
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Yet another fantastic poem by a master poet.
There exist a certain playfulness about your works that make them unique.
Awesome.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014
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thedreampeddler, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from giovannimariatommaso
A catchy little piece & the yellow writing goes with the poem exactly. I can see Monet's field of yellow flowers. I went to the web & saw beautiful fields of flowers this poem is inspiring.
Rhymes & flows well. I didn't see any spelling or grammatical errors.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
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A catchy little piece & the yellow writing goes with the poem exactly. I can see Monet's field of yellow flowers. I went to the web & saw beautiful fields of flowers this poem is inspiring.
Rhymes & flows well. I didn't see any spelling or grammatical errors.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
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giovanni, thank you so much for your positive comments. Since all the comments are possible, could I ask for clarification of the 4 rating? What would you like me to improve? Brooke
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Wow; this mouse in the half-dark can be tricky. I apologize I wasn't paying attention. I'd have given this a six Star if I had had it to give.
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thanks so much for changing the number :-)
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Comment from OLA THOMAS
This is a very thoughtful poem, having semblance to some life experience. Getting the unusual from least expected enclave. Life and nature do spin some surprises from time to time; and one begins to wonder how and why. I love this.
ola thomas
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014
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This is a very thoughtful poem, having semblance to some life experience. Getting the unusual from least expected enclave. Life and nature do spin some surprises from time to time; and one begins to wonder how and why. I love this.
ola thomas
Comment Written 21-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014
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Thank you, Ola, for your thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from desire333
This poem read so smoothly, and beautifully. And the photo provided is so magical! Thank you for sharing such a lovely poem.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014
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This poem read so smoothly, and beautifully. And the photo provided is so magical! Thank you for sharing such a lovely poem.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014
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desire, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Dawn Munro
Geez Louise, you never fail to charm and awe, Brooke - this is so beautiful! I can tell you this - yellow is my favorite colour, so you can imagine how much I enjoyed the mental picture you painted!
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014
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Geez Louise, you never fail to charm and awe, Brooke - this is so beautiful! I can tell you this - yellow is my favorite colour, so you can imagine how much I enjoyed the mental picture you painted!
Comment Written 21-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014
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Dawn, thanks so much - I love that expression but don't hear it very often anymore :-) Brooke
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:) My pleasure, Brooke.
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Brooke,
When I read and re-read your poem, I thought of the line, "only God can make a tree", from Joyce Kilmer's poem, "Trees".
Trees
BY JOYCE KILMER
I think that I shall never see
A poem lovely as a tree.
A tree whose hungry mouth is prest
Against the earth's sweet flowing breast;
A tree that looks at God all day,
And lifts her leafy arms to pray;
A tree that may in Summer wear
A nest of robins in her hair;
Upon whose bosom snow has lain;
Who intimately lives with rain.
Poems are made by fools like me,
But only God can make a tree."
This took me to the 1993 movie, "Groundhog Day", as Bill Murray (playing Phil Connors, the weatherman) was reading the poem to Andie MacDowell (playing Rita, Phil's producer) to win her affections. He had no interest in poetry. He was a scammer. But the powers that be made him re-live Groundhog Day over and over and over again... until he learned a lesson about life... until he learned to appreciate truth, loving his fellow man more than himself, and offering love instead of taking it. He tried to kill himself so many times because he was tired of living the same day over and over and over. It showed him, eventually, how meaningless his life was. He ended up learning how to play the piano, sculpting ice, saving a kid from falling out of a tree, being a good Samaritan, earning a doctorate, and asking Rita what he could do for her...today. Thinking of others first. The tree, the beautiful flowers... they are so beautiful, quietly offering us shade and colour. They enrich our lives. And they are a gift, made by God's own hand. You know, it would do a lot of people good to follow Phil in re-living the same day, over and over and over again, until they learned the same lesson.
I love a poem with fairies in it! I'm a firm believer that they exist, and I'm sure we'd find one if we looked hard enough. They could be under any toadstool.
I like the personification here,
"I asked the sun if she had spun
the silken threads so rich and bold,
but she replied that she had none
to spare among her stores of gold."
I enjoyed the ABAB rhyme in each verse. You are a wonderful poet.
Thanks for sharing this gem. Only God can make a flower.
your fan,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
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Hi Brooke,
When I read and re-read your poem, I thought of the line, "only God can make a tree", from Joyce Kilmer's poem, "Trees".
Trees
BY JOYCE KILMER
I think that I shall never see
A poem lovely as a tree.
A tree whose hungry mouth is prest
Against the earth's sweet flowing breast;
A tree that looks at God all day,
And lifts her leafy arms to pray;
A tree that may in Summer wear
A nest of robins in her hair;
Upon whose bosom snow has lain;
Who intimately lives with rain.
Poems are made by fools like me,
But only God can make a tree."
This took me to the 1993 movie, "Groundhog Day", as Bill Murray (playing Phil Connors, the weatherman) was reading the poem to Andie MacDowell (playing Rita, Phil's producer) to win her affections. He had no interest in poetry. He was a scammer. But the powers that be made him re-live Groundhog Day over and over and over again... until he learned a lesson about life... until he learned to appreciate truth, loving his fellow man more than himself, and offering love instead of taking it. He tried to kill himself so many times because he was tired of living the same day over and over and over. It showed him, eventually, how meaningless his life was. He ended up learning how to play the piano, sculpting ice, saving a kid from falling out of a tree, being a good Samaritan, earning a doctorate, and asking Rita what he could do for her...today. Thinking of others first. The tree, the beautiful flowers... they are so beautiful, quietly offering us shade and colour. They enrich our lives. And they are a gift, made by God's own hand. You know, it would do a lot of people good to follow Phil in re-living the same day, over and over and over again, until they learned the same lesson.
I love a poem with fairies in it! I'm a firm believer that they exist, and I'm sure we'd find one if we looked hard enough. They could be under any toadstool.
I like the personification here,
"I asked the sun if she had spun
the silken threads so rich and bold,
but she replied that she had none
to spare among her stores of gold."
I enjoyed the ABAB rhyme in each verse. You are a wonderful poet.
Thanks for sharing this gem. Only God can make a flower.
your fan,
Kimbob
Comment Written 21-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
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I've loved that poem since I was a kid, Kimbob. Thanks for mentioning it in connection with my poem. As a Pennsylvanian, I also love the movie. LOL I so appreciate your thoughtful response to this poem and your generous sixth star. Brooke :-)
Comment from MM lives on :)
What a simply beautiful poem Brooke
Your imagery alongside your poem
Was stunning...most enjoyed as always
Thank you ever much for sharing
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014
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What a simply beautiful poem Brooke
Your imagery alongside your poem
Was stunning...most enjoyed as always
Thank you ever much for sharing
Comment Written 21-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014
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Thank you, Christopher, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
