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Comment from Chrisluca
What a pleasant and true read. The balance and flow and balance of the poem is consistent throughout. Thank you for sharing your work.
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What a pleasant and true read. The balance and flow and balance of the poem is consistent throughout. Thank you for sharing your work.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
Comment from Eternal Muse
Oh, this is so very beautiful, MoonWillow, and after my own heart. The beast in the picture is just incredible - so adorable and gorgeous as can be.
I loved your nice soft rhyming, flow, cadence, and the great pictures you draw in a reader's mind.
Then lilacs bud and bloom
and pansies wake,
when ice is still afloat
on Harper's Lake.
When hummers choose to
hum in early spring,
Jack Frost jumps up to
rime each fragile wing.
Loved it, loved it! A very accomplished and memorable composition.
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Oh, this is so very beautiful, MoonWillow, and after my own heart. The beast in the picture is just incredible - so adorable and gorgeous as can be.
I loved your nice soft rhyming, flow, cadence, and the great pictures you draw in a reader's mind.
Then lilacs bud and bloom
and pansies wake,
when ice is still afloat
on Harper's Lake.
When hummers choose to
hum in early spring,
Jack Frost jumps up to
rime each fragile wing.
Loved it, loved it! A very accomplished and memorable composition.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
Comment from TAB_that's me
I didn't know that about polar bears. Interesting. Great poem that has a nice smooth flow and without forced rhymes.
Teresa
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I didn't know that about polar bears. Interesting. Great poem that has a nice smooth flow and without forced rhymes.
Teresa
Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
Comment from RodG
I really like how you have described Spring here and its unexpected "gifts."
There are some wonderful contrasts shown with the ice in the lake and the budding flowers and the frost on the hummingbirds' wings. I also like the zoology lesson about polar bears and ounces. Your stanzas flow and the rhymes are very well chosen.
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I really like how you have described Spring here and its unexpected "gifts."
There are some wonderful contrasts shown with the ice in the lake and the budding flowers and the frost on the hummingbirds' wings. I also like the zoology lesson about polar bears and ounces. Your stanzas flow and the rhymes are very well chosen.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
Comment from rama devi
Wonderful descriptive poem with fine personification and super rhyming, timing and musicality in phonetics too. Sounds super read aloud. I especially like the slant rhyme in this stanza - dens and winds...sounds lovely read aloud:
All polar bears are black
while in their dens,
'til fur is frosted
white by icy winds.
Favorite stanzas:
Then lilacs bud and bloom
and pansies wake,
when ice is still afloat
on Harper's Lake.
and this is so creative (line four):
When hummers choose to
hum in early spring,
Jack Frost jumps up to
rime each fragile wing.
Wonderful presentation as well!
Bravo
Warmly, rd
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Wonderful descriptive poem with fine personification and super rhyming, timing and musicality in phonetics too. Sounds super read aloud. I especially like the slant rhyme in this stanza - dens and winds...sounds lovely read aloud:
All polar bears are black
while in their dens,
'til fur is frosted
white by icy winds.
Favorite stanzas:
Then lilacs bud and bloom
and pansies wake,
when ice is still afloat
on Harper's Lake.
and this is so creative (line four):
When hummers choose to
hum in early spring,
Jack Frost jumps up to
rime each fragile wing.
Wonderful presentation as well!
Bravo
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
Comment from adewpearl
Gorgeous presentation of your poem
which is in excellent abcb rhyme
with good enjambment of thought from line to line
good alliteration in blue birds/bud and bloom and frosted fur and black bear and nature never knows
excellent use of personification
vivid detail of the springlike scene until the snow returns
good internal rhyme in spring will bring
I never would have understood the ounce reference without the author notes
Brooke
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Gorgeous presentation of your poem
which is in excellent abcb rhyme
with good enjambment of thought from line to line
good alliteration in blue birds/bud and bloom and frosted fur and black bear and nature never knows
excellent use of personification
vivid detail of the springlike scene until the snow returns
good internal rhyme in spring will bring
I never would have understood the ounce reference without the author notes
Brooke
Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
Comment from skye
I like the difference that abcb makes in how a poem reads.
The short, succinct lines jump quickly from image to image and you have captured the changes and quirks of the seasons.
Excellent.
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I like the difference that abcb makes in how a poem reads.
The short, succinct lines jump quickly from image to image and you have captured the changes and quirks of the seasons.
Excellent.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
Comment from Sasha
This clearly deserves a 6, but even though it is only Tuesday, I am already out. Beautiful imagery and superb rhyme. I love your stunning artistic presentation and you taught me a new word. Excellent work with this one, I enjoyed it very much.
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This clearly deserves a 6, but even though it is only Tuesday, I am already out. Beautiful imagery and superb rhyme. I love your stunning artistic presentation and you taught me a new word. Excellent work with this one, I enjoyed it very much.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
Comment from kiwijenny
I never knew a snow leopard was an ounce.....I d hate to meet a pound on a cold frosty night....! Well written and beautiful picture too
God bless
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I never knew a snow leopard was an ounce.....I d hate to meet a pound on a cold frosty night....! Well written and beautiful picture too
God bless
Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
Comment from hari anand
Interesting description of seasonal change shown via different animals signalling weather changes.ABCB rhymes is In its perfect form. Nicley written.
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Interesting description of seasonal change shown via different animals signalling weather changes.ABCB rhymes is In its perfect form. Nicley written.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
