Night
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Comment from Glasstruth
Beautifully described. The night is a special time for me, do a lot of my writing then. Great enjambment. Like how you've arranged your lines. Great write! Les
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
Beautifully described. The night is a special time for me, do a lot of my writing then. Great enjambment. Like how you've arranged your lines. Great write! Les
Comment Written 21-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
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Thanks, glasstruth! Caroline
Comment from DALLAS01
This deserves a six. Sorry I do not have one. the verb choices are strong. they are the power that moves this poem. Nice alliteration throughout.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
This deserves a six. Sorry I do not have one. the verb choices are strong. they are the power that moves this poem. Nice alliteration throughout.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
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Thanks, Dallas! Caroline
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You're welcome.
Comment from Emily George
What a lovely view of night your imagery was a delight to the senses.
I particularly loved the origami reference,along with the tie between verse with crease by crease
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
What a lovely view of night your imagery was a delight to the senses.
I particularly loved the origami reference,along with the tie between verse with crease by crease
Comment Written 20-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
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Thanks, Emily--for both the stars, but mostly for the specific comments. Caroline
Comment from liz10240
This poem creates such a calm serene ambiance and your choice of words describing the nights are amazing. My favorite line is
Origami
Each crease sealing in daylight (lovely)
The picture enhances the writing but you almost don't need it as this poem stands strong by itself. Well done, a great write.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
This poem creates such a calm serene ambiance and your choice of words describing the nights are amazing. My favorite line is
Origami
Each crease sealing in daylight (lovely)
The picture enhances the writing but you almost don't need it as this poem stands strong by itself. Well done, a great write.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
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Thanks, Liz! Caroline
Comment from Selina Stambi
Origami
Each crease sealing in daylight .. love the imagery
A nocturnal nest holds us
until dawn peels back night
crease by crease ... this one too it fabulous!
Hi Zinnia,
A stunning little piece of free verse. I felt I was outside looking up at the sky on a clear night.
Lovely!
Sonali
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
Origami
Each crease sealing in daylight .. love the imagery
A nocturnal nest holds us
until dawn peels back night
crease by crease ... this one too it fabulous!
Hi Zinnia,
A stunning little piece of free verse. I felt I was outside looking up at the sky on a clear night.
Lovely!
Sonali
Comment Written 20-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
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Thanks, sonali. I like the picture of you looking at the sky on a clear night! caroline
Comment from Acquired Taste
So enjoyed how the manifestation of the evening arriving took on the characteristics of origami - how original... beautifully visual and really quite calming. I enjoyed this. AT=/
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
So enjoyed how the manifestation of the evening arriving took on the characteristics of origami - how original... beautifully visual and really quite calming. I enjoyed this. AT=/
Comment Written 20-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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Thanks so much! Caroline
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is a very creative write, zinnia, great imagery presented about night coming like creases in an origami artist folding the pages gently, then unraveling to a new day. I enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
this is a very creative write, zinnia, great imagery presented about night coming like creases in an origami artist folding the pages gently, then unraveling to a new day. I enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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Thanks, Sweetwoodjax! Caroline
Comment from rrabinow
I enjoyed reading your poem. Wonderfully written poem. I like the way you describe how night makes you feel. Great flow to your poem as well.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
I enjoyed reading your poem. Wonderfully written poem. I like the way you describe how night makes you feel. Great flow to your poem as well.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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Thanks, rrabiinow! Caroline
Comment from adewpearl
rock as darkness - excellent consonance
as is dusk cradles
excellent alliteration in the stars slipping passage
effective use of personification throughout
good assonance in deeper/sleep
and alliteration in nocturnal nest
lovely detail that creates a serene mood well
Brooke
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
rock as darkness - excellent consonance
as is dusk cradles
excellent alliteration in the stars slipping passage
effective use of personification throughout
good assonance in deeper/sleep
and alliteration in nocturnal nest
lovely detail that creates a serene mood well
Brooke
Comment Written 20-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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Thanks, Brooke! Caroline
Comment from flamingstar
Okay, I loved "The moon and I breathe together" and "...until dawn peels back night crease by crease." Had trouble with the "spinning me into slumber" as I would be running for the nearest trashcan. LOL. Rocking, swaying, drifting, maybe????
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
Okay, I loved "The moon and I breathe together" and "...until dawn peels back night crease by crease." Had trouble with the "spinning me into slumber" as I would be running for the nearest trashcan. LOL. Rocking, swaying, drifting, maybe????
Comment Written 20-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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thanks for the note of humor, Flamingstar! I don't have your spinning issues and regret that it might send you running for a trashcan! Spinning for me is a pleasant experience. However, I loved your comments! Caroline