Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

Through the eyes of a child everything is much more free and easy. And sweets are always more important than anything else.

I like the monorhyme and internal rhyme mixture in this poem.

Keep writing

Joan

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014

Thanks Joan

reply by dragonpoet on 20-Aug-2014

Any time, Gary.

Joan.

Comment from Lulube

Excellent

What a wonderful day at the beach and of course, ice cream on the way home or to the car. Love the white sheets, gets in there snuggling into a dream.
good imagery
good rhyming

good work

lulube enjoyed this poem

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014

Thank you for this

reply by Lulube on 20-Aug-2014

welcome

lulube

Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens

Excellent

And that sums up a lovely day at the beach, with a child and his parents. What more could a little boy ask for?
Ice cream perhaps. ;-)
Well done, Carolyn

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014

Thank you Carolyn

Comment from BCScot

Excellent

A wonderful piece full of innocent messages, we have lost so much in the last 40 years, the days of picnics, swimming, building sand castles etc. We have turned into tanning, texting and taking on boyfriends at the shore. Loving the photo too, so evocative, thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014

Thank you BC

Comment from nancyjam

Excellent

I love this nostalgic look back at a special
day at the beach.
This images are wonderful and bring the sweetness of
the memory to the reader.
Well done. Nancy

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014

thank you Nancy

Comment from Judd7

Excellent

It is great to relive childhood in poetry. This does it. I write in a different style and I do not want to bend you to my style. I think it is just right. It made me remember my own childhood days by the sea. Thanks....Poet Q

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014

thank you for this

Gary

Comment from lynglyng

Exceptional

This poem makes me want to be six years old again at the beach with my parents. I loved the feel of innocence and remembering a simple time that was carefree and full of goodness. Thank you for sharing it.

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014

thank you for this
Gary

Comment from Bobby Jo

Excellent

some of my favorite pictures of my kids, are them sitting in their swimsuits with an ice cream melting down their faces. It's those simple messy pleasures in life that many miss, because they are scared of the mess.

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014

thank you

Comment from expressions9

Excellent

This is a lovely poem, deepwater, filled with imagery of what sound like beautiful memories of childhood. The black and white photo complements the poem well. I especially liked

"Long hot summers on a beach with warm winds blowing off the sea.
Gulls fly high on the wing, all are looking down at me calling can you see?" (perhaps add comma after "calling")

Nice finishing line too that sums of the enjoyment of the day

"Soft white sheets on my bed as I drift off to see the wonders, so free"

I'd say this must evoke lovely memories of days by the sea in us all. It certainly did me :) Thanks for sharing!

God bless, Christine

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014

thank you

Comment from amada

Excellent

Delightful story of a little boy in the sun, at the beach and the best memory, eating ice cream, of course. it reminds me of my childhood years.

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014

thank you