Texas Dream Catcher
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "CHAPTER CUATRO, PART DOS"Drug & human trafficking, can romance win?
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Comment from lindalcreel
I have a feeling that the guy who wants to take Soni away for the weekend, may be the same one who attacked Jim and his vehicle. I understand why he wants to keep his job a secret -- he doesn't know who to trust. Hopefully, he'll realize Soni is one of the good guys and they can come up with a plan to stop this drug trafficking. This is a far different story from your last, but it's just as exciting.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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I have a feeling that the guy who wants to take Soni away for the weekend, may be the same one who attacked Jim and his vehicle. I understand why he wants to keep his job a secret -- he doesn't know who to trust. Hopefully, he'll realize Soni is one of the good guys and they can come up with a plan to stop this drug trafficking. This is a far different story from your last, but it's just as exciting.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Sorry for the late reply. School has started and my time for FS is extremely tight. I do appreciate your review and the time it took to read.
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My pleasure. Take care of those kids. I know you're an awesome teacher with a great big heart.
Comment from arnie47
This was a short chapter but it did deliver the message of urgency and ended with that page turning quality. This is different to me from what you usually write and I think you're doing a good job. Looking forward to the next installment.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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This was a short chapter but it did deliver the message of urgency and ended with that page turning quality. This is different to me from what you usually write and I think you're doing a good job. Looking forward to the next installment.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Sorry for the late reply. School has started and my time for FS is extremely tight. I do appreciate your review and the time it took to read.
Comment from rama devi
Good chapter. I cannot comment with insight on character and plot development having not read all the story, but it seems to be cohesive and building up. The flow and pacing are good. The dialog sounds true to life. The only nit I noticed was a tendency to use Soni's name too often. A few of them could be replaced with pronouns (like HER) instead.
Did not notice any spag this time.
Love,
rd
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Good chapter. I cannot comment with insight on character and plot development having not read all the story, but it seems to be cohesive and building up. The flow and pacing are good. The dialog sounds true to life. The only nit I noticed was a tendency to use Soni's name too often. A few of them could be replaced with pronouns (like HER) instead.
Did not notice any spag this time.
Love,
rd
Comment Written 18-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Sorry for the late reply. School has started and my time for FS is extremely tight. I do appreciate your review and the time it took to read.
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Comment from CALLAHANMR
Hi Barbara:)
So 'Jim' is back with a bullet wound and his suburban has bullet holes. Soni keeps making stupid decisions by not calling the sheriff to investigate. Criminal activity is apparent whether or not Jim is A criminal and there could be bad consequences for Soni and the ranch.Just because Jim wants to avoid the law, it seems more prudent to call the sheriff.
In her meeting with the ranch supervisors, all Soni's remarks are aimed at compliance to the law, especially in regard to drug and immigration laws. She has an improved security pan, but won't specifically say why. This makes her actions regarding Jim even more dubious.
Each chapter seems to raise more questions than answers.
As usual, your writing is excellent and I noticed only one nit: suburban is a generic name for one type of vehicle and should not be capitalized when used without a brand name.
You certainly have my interest, so more love and Irish Hugs, my friend.
Roger
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Hi Barbara:)
So 'Jim' is back with a bullet wound and his suburban has bullet holes. Soni keeps making stupid decisions by not calling the sheriff to investigate. Criminal activity is apparent whether or not Jim is A criminal and there could be bad consequences for Soni and the ranch.Just because Jim wants to avoid the law, it seems more prudent to call the sheriff.
In her meeting with the ranch supervisors, all Soni's remarks are aimed at compliance to the law, especially in regard to drug and immigration laws. She has an improved security pan, but won't specifically say why. This makes her actions regarding Jim even more dubious.
Each chapter seems to raise more questions than answers.
As usual, your writing is excellent and I noticed only one nit: suburban is a generic name for one type of vehicle and should not be capitalized when used without a brand name.
You certainly have my interest, so more love and Irish Hugs, my friend.
Roger
Comment Written 18-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Sorry for the late reply. School has started and my time for FS is extremely tight. I do appreciate your review and the time it took to read. I have had more comments on that dang suburban than on anything else. I didn't have it capitalized to start with, then was told to capitalize it then was told not to. I have changed it six times.
Comment from Cian Mateo
Jim is back. But once again, because of an injury.
Even so--I suspect, on a subliminal level; Soni's not too disappointed.
Am curious to learn more about this character. Why was he on the ranch to begin with? Why does he continue to shy away from any contact with authorities?
Who wants him dead? And why?
And, why all the sudden interest in Soni's ranch by outsiders?
I look forward to future posts.
Cian
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Jim is back. But once again, because of an injury.
Even so--I suspect, on a subliminal level; Soni's not too disappointed.
Am curious to learn more about this character. Why was he on the ranch to begin with? Why does he continue to shy away from any contact with authorities?
Who wants him dead? And why?
And, why all the sudden interest in Soni's ranch by outsiders?
I look forward to future posts.
Cian
Comment Written 18-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Sorry for the late reply. School has started and my time for FS is extremely tight. I do appreciate your review and the time it took to read.
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I hope your school year goes well!
I come from a family of teachers, so understand outside time restraints.
Look forward to your future posts, as time permits.
Cian
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
I'm glad I came in on this one at the beginning because it would be confusing otherwise, and it's a terrific story. I didn't find any mistakes. I'm enjoying the buildup and the development of the characters, Giddy
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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I'm glad I came in on this one at the beginning because it would be confusing otherwise, and it's a terrific story. I didn't find any mistakes. I'm enjoying the buildup and the development of the characters, Giddy
Comment Written 18-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Sorry for the late reply. School has started and my time for FS is extremely tight. I do appreciate your review and the time it took to read.
Comment from Curly Girly
This is a well-written chapter which read smoothly to me. Nothing amiss spotted. I wonder if a few slurps of whiskey was enough to really deaden the pain of having a slug surgically removed. I doubt it, but all the old cowboy films seemed to suggest that it was. Perhaps the real cowboys actually drank until they passed out. A bit of a dodgy anaesthetic if you ask me! Kill or cure. And I am sure some unfortunate ones may have even aspirated on their whiskey as it came up.
All good.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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This is a well-written chapter which read smoothly to me. Nothing amiss spotted. I wonder if a few slurps of whiskey was enough to really deaden the pain of having a slug surgically removed. I doubt it, but all the old cowboy films seemed to suggest that it was. Perhaps the real cowboys actually drank until they passed out. A bit of a dodgy anaesthetic if you ask me! Kill or cure. And I am sure some unfortunate ones may have even aspirated on their whiskey as it came up.
All good.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Sorry for the late reply. School has started and my time for FS is extremely tight. I do appreciate your review and the time it took to read.
Comment from Titan Black
I like this write... You have the potential to be a "Bomb writer. Even though I would like to see more action. And it probably is. But I wanna see it soon. Nevertheless, I think you could have picked a better picture to fit the circumstances... Something like James Bond, standing on foreign land..? Anyway, keep doing your thing, and i will be watching.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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I like this write... You have the potential to be a "Bomb writer. Even though I would like to see more action. And it probably is. But I wanna see it soon. Nevertheless, I think you could have picked a better picture to fit the circumstances... Something like James Bond, standing on foreign land..? Anyway, keep doing your thing, and i will be watching.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Sorry for the late reply. School has started and my time for FS is extremely tight. I do appreciate your review and the time it took to read.
Comment from boxergirl
Good luck with your new school year. This is another interesting scene with Jim returning with the gunshot wound and the Feds still lingering around. Lots of questions to be answered. 8-)
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Good luck with your new school year. This is another interesting scene with Jim returning with the gunshot wound and the Feds still lingering around. Lots of questions to be answered. 8-)
Comment Written 17-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Sorry for the late reply. School has started and my time for FS is extremely tight. I do appreciate your review and the time it took to read.
Comment from Sankey
Hi stranger. Another great chapter. Trying to re-arrange my autobiography more sequentially as to being able to be read in line with when the events recorded occurred. Really hard work I hope to open it all up for more reviewing later also adding to it as suggested by a lot of reviewers. Sorry for raving I really enjoy your stories.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Hi stranger. Another great chapter. Trying to re-arrange my autobiography more sequentially as to being able to be read in line with when the events recorded occurred. Really hard work I hope to open it all up for more reviewing later also adding to it as suggested by a lot of reviewers. Sorry for raving I really enjoy your stories.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Sorry for the late reply. School has started and my time for FS is extremely tight. I do appreciate your review and the time it took to read.
