Make That Two Orders To-Go
Not exactly a homily.37 total reviews
Comment from Janeyjane
i liked this writing very much the flow and descriptions have been done great. I give this a well deserving five stars. Thank you very much for sharing will be looking forward to more of your work.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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i liked this writing very much the flow and descriptions have been done great. I give this a well deserving five stars. Thank you very much for sharing will be looking forward to more of your work.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Thank you again, Janeyjane. Glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
Comment from mikemagine
6-Star day today! Lots of incredible writers on this site!!
This is VERY creative and funny. At one point, I thought "Oh no! NOT Adam and Steve...!" Yep. I was afraid THERE was where U were going. I'm not a gay-basher, but...No pun intended...
Great stuff!
Mike
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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6-Star day today! Lots of incredible writers on this site!!
This is VERY creative and funny. At one point, I thought "Oh no! NOT Adam and Steve...!" Yep. I was afraid THERE was where U were going. I'm not a gay-basher, but...No pun intended...
Great stuff!
Mike
Comment Written 17-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Thanks so much for the galaxy, mikemagine. I'm delighted you enjoyed. Adam and Eve are such easy targets.
Peace, Lee
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Great going Lee!! Keep writing!!
Mike
Comment from chasennov
Not exactly a homily. "Make That Two Orders To-Go" This is a good piece of work you have created here, Lee. I enjoyed the read very much. Good work.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Not exactly a homily. "Make That Two Orders To-Go" This is a good piece of work you have created here, Lee. I enjoyed the read very much. Good work.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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thank you, chasennov. So glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
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You are most welcome, Lee.
Comment from gypsycaravan
Now THAT'S original. So many things in here were funny and thought provoking---like words not being invented yet, chest goiters, etc. Way to go, humpwhistle. And these silly poets with their three unrelated words and huge artwork (courtesy of someone else) think they've done something terrific. They should spend more time reading some material with talent. Heaven forbid they have to read more than 6 lines to get a reward. Thanks for posting and for your talent and creativity .
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Now THAT'S original. So many things in here were funny and thought provoking---like words not being invented yet, chest goiters, etc. Way to go, humpwhistle. And these silly poets with their three unrelated words and huge artwork (courtesy of someone else) think they've done something terrific. They should spend more time reading some material with talent. Heaven forbid they have to read more than 6 lines to get a reward. Thanks for posting and for your talent and creativity .
Comment Written 17-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Thank you so much for the galaxy and your extra kind comments.
I'm humbled. So glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
Comment from sibhus
Ha, ha, ha, I believe that in a psat life you must have been one of the minor monitors of the Garden of Eden. This seems like a very plausible descriptions of those events of eons ago. Particularly Eve's response to Adam, which is still played out today day in and day out and bars all across the world. Excellent rendition of humnkinds earliest beginnings. Amazingly good stuff there, Lee.
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Ha, ha, ha, I believe that in a psat life you must have been one of the minor monitors of the Garden of Eden. This seems like a very plausible descriptions of those events of eons ago. Particularly Eve's response to Adam, which is still played out today day in and day out and bars all across the world. Excellent rendition of humnkinds earliest beginnings. Amazingly good stuff there, Lee.
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Comment Written 17-Aug-2014
Comment from royowen
I think you're taking a huge spoonful of " poetic license "! Except for the God bit, it's just as well God is gracious! The dialogue between Adam and Eve was quite funny, and cleverly woven into the story! Well done, but God is not like "us" , but I guess you know that! Blessings, Roy.
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I think you're taking a huge spoonful of " poetic license "! Except for the God bit, it's just as well God is gracious! The dialogue between Adam and Eve was quite funny, and cleverly woven into the story! Well done, but God is not like "us" , but I guess you know that! Blessings, Roy.
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Comment Written 17-Aug-2014
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Only you could get away with this one! LOL, I hope everyone sees just how funny this is, it's hilarious! And it makes you think, how did they know what to do?? They didn't arrive with instructions, or warnings on how to use or not to use. It's a wonder we survived. I suppose those floppy things soon got the message and started to get curious! LOL. That's what men do, isn't it?? :) Got to tell you, this was brilliant! xsx Sandra
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Only you could get away with this one! LOL, I hope everyone sees just how funny this is, it's hilarious! And it makes you think, how did they know what to do?? They didn't arrive with instructions, or warnings on how to use or not to use. It's a wonder we survived. I suppose those floppy things soon got the message and started to get curious! LOL. That's what men do, isn't it?? :) Got to tell you, this was brilliant! xsx Sandra
Comment Written 17-Aug-2014
