The Journey
A person's journey in life61 total reviews
Comment from deepwater
Reflecting on past history
approaching events occur
Ultimate finality the body expires
complete fulfillment
Mystery wraps each soul
impending journey transcends
I do like this good job
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2014
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Reflecting on past history
approaching events occur
Ultimate finality the body expires
complete fulfillment
Mystery wraps each soul
impending journey transcends
I do like this good job
Comment Written 17-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2014
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Thank you for reading and commenting. RJ
Comment from Dean Kuch
This is an exceptionally well written acrostic, RJ. Not an easy feat to write an acrostic of this heft, and make it this good. A virtual "shopping list", if you'll excuse the expression, of the stages of an individuals life, ultimately ending up at the same destination we all do, at death's dreary doorstep.
Excellent work, and it flows very quickly, with a great pace, when read out loud, as all poetry should be when being reviewed.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2014
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This is an exceptionally well written acrostic, RJ. Not an easy feat to write an acrostic of this heft, and make it this good. A virtual "shopping list", if you'll excuse the expression, of the stages of an individuals life, ultimately ending up at the same destination we all do, at death's dreary doorstep.
Excellent work, and it flows very quickly, with a great pace, when read out loud, as all poetry should be when being reviewed.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2014
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Thank you very much for the nice comments. RJ
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No problem, RJ.
Comment from Tegan1311
This is a very well written poem. It must have been hard to write in this style, but you did it very well. Your words flowed well and your descriptions were easy to understand. Well done.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2014
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This is a very well written poem. It must have been hard to write in this style, but you did it very well. Your words flowed well and your descriptions were easy to understand. Well done.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2014
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Thank you for your kind words, for feeling how it flowed and understanding. It took me several days to put it together, then a couple re-writes. RJ
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi RJ,
Beautiful acrostic journey, just as the title states, with just as beautiful artwork to compliment.
Always hard to accept the prospect of losing loved ones. We recently lost '6' family members within '4' months time. Far too many, and all from cancer.
Nice work with this one.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax ('/')
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2014
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Hi RJ,
Beautiful acrostic journey, just as the title states, with just as beautiful artwork to compliment.
Always hard to accept the prospect of losing loved ones. We recently lost '6' family members within '4' months time. Far too many, and all from cancer.
Nice work with this one.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax ('/')
Comment Written 17-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2014
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Thank you for reading my poem and for your nice comments. RJ
Comment from Ben Colder
Tough call trying adjust after someone close leaved. You did good with this style, something I yet need to trey. Well done with good wording. Shalom.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2014
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Tough call trying adjust after someone close leaved. You did good with this style, something I yet need to trey. Well done with good wording. Shalom.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2014
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Thank you for your review. I like the challenge this style poem gives me. Do try it. RJ
Comment from drivenbackward
I like reading this style of poetry. Only form I like better is Haiku. Anyway, sorry to hear about this news. The emotion is evident throughout the poem. At the same time, this poem also hints at reasons for hope.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2014
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I like reading this style of poetry. Only form I like better is Haiku. Anyway, sorry to hear about this news. The emotion is evident throughout the poem. At the same time, this poem also hints at reasons for hope.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2014
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Thank you for your review. I also like Haiku. RJ
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, rj, you did an excellent job writing this acrostic poem about the puzzle that life holds, I enjoyed reading it. I am sorry you are having to deal with family illness.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2014
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this is very well written, rj, you did an excellent job writing this acrostic poem about the puzzle that life holds, I enjoyed reading it. I am sorry you are having to deal with family illness.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2014
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Thank you for your kind review. I am please that you enjoyed it. RJ
Comment from GWHARGIS
It is really sad that it takes the news of someones death to get us going. Maybe that's part of the plan. Great awakening in this. Loved the line about mystery wrapping each soul. Wonderful flow to this.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2014
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It is really sad that it takes the news of someones death to get us going. Maybe that's part of the plan. Great awakening in this. Loved the line about mystery wrapping each soul. Wonderful flow to this.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2014
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Thank you for you nice review. You do never know what triggers you to write a poem, when I get that urge I can't stop. RJ
Comment from onebrit
Beautiful use of words. You paint a wonderful picture. If anything I found this poem long, and read it in 2 sittings as I wanted to give it my full attention.....these days we tend to think/read in sound bites .....sad but true!
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2014
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Beautiful use of words. You paint a wonderful picture. If anything I found this poem long, and read it in 2 sittings as I wanted to give it my full attention.....these days we tend to think/read in sound bites .....sad but true!
Comment Written 16-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2014
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Thank you for reading my poem twice, even with the length. It is one of the longest poems I have ever written, but well worth getting my feeling out. RJ
Comment from Eric1
Hi RJ, this is a very moving and haunting acrostic poem that you have composed for this competition, sadly, I can relate to most of your heartfelt words having recently lost my own darling daughter, this is a beautiful reflection my friend, I wish you lots of luck for the competition.
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reply by the author on 17-Aug-2014
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Hi RJ, this is a very moving and haunting acrostic poem that you have composed for this competition, sadly, I can relate to most of your heartfelt words having recently lost my own darling daughter, this is a beautiful reflection my friend, I wish you lots of luck for the competition.
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Comment Written 16-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2014
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Thank you for your kind review and feeling the movement. RJ
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You are welcome RJ
