The Journey
A person's journey in life61 total reviews
Comment from Sonaleeka
Very awesome flow with wordings.I enjoyed every stanza of it.
Keep amazed us with new writting.Worth reading .
God bless!
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
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Very awesome flow with wordings.I enjoyed every stanza of it.
Keep amazed us with new writting.Worth reading .
God bless!
Comment Written 21-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
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Thank you for your review and kind words. RJ
Comment from Jackarrie
I really enjoyed reading your poem about how life is a conundrum of destiny, we all need to follow a technique for living a balanced life. It reminds me of a quote I heard
When we can accept all of life's contradictions, when we can comfortably flow between the banks of pleasure and pain, experiencing them both while getting stuck in neither, then we are free."
A great acrostic poem
Well done
Mary
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
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I really enjoyed reading your poem about how life is a conundrum of destiny, we all need to follow a technique for living a balanced life. It reminds me of a quote I heard
When we can accept all of life's contradictions, when we can comfortably flow between the banks of pleasure and pain, experiencing them both while getting stuck in neither, then we are free."
A great acrostic poem
Well done
Mary
Comment Written 21-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
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Thank you for your kind review, and your quote. It does give me more too ponder, we do strive to be free. RJ
Comment from MM lives on :)
Hello RJ..the only suggestion I would have for you is to maybe make your formatting a bit darker..your imagery is stunning it's just some people may have issues seeing your poem and it was great ....thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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Hello RJ..the only suggestion I would have for you is to maybe make your formatting a bit darker..your imagery is stunning it's just some people may have issues seeing your poem and it was great ....thanks for sharing
Comment Written 20-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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Thank you for your review and comments. RJ
Comment from Selina Stambi
Hello RJ,
Mystery wraps each soul
impending journey transcends ... and these lines sums it all up.
An intricate acrostic - not an easy phrase to work with.
Thought-provoking and deep.
I don't think I've bumped into you before. Nice to meet you. :)
Sonali
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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Hello RJ,
Mystery wraps each soul
impending journey transcends ... and these lines sums it all up.
An intricate acrostic - not an easy phrase to work with.
Thought-provoking and deep.
I don't think I've bumped into you before. Nice to meet you. :)
Sonali
Comment Written 20-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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Thank you for your review and comments. Nice to meet you too. RJ
Comment from Acquired Taste
Our walk through life is filled with detours, hills and valleys and when we find there is but a short time left with a relative or close friend, we revisit each and every step and choice. I think you've done a nice job with this offering. AT=/
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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Our walk through life is filled with detours, hills and valleys and when we find there is but a short time left with a relative or close friend, we revisit each and every step and choice. I think you've done a nice job with this offering. AT=/
Comment Written 20-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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Thank you for you nice review. RJ
Comment from rrabinow
I enjoyed reading your poem. Wonderful acrostic poem that you wrote. I like how you format your poem, and the way that it flows. Great use of descriptive words as well.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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I enjoyed reading your poem. Wonderful acrostic poem that you wrote. I like how you format your poem, and the way that it flows. Great use of descriptive words as well.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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Thank you for your nice review. RJ
Comment from flamingstar
Very clever. It takes us from the time where we start to feel our power in this world, assert ourselves and strive for what we want to the point where we become disillusioned, questioning meaning, then facing the reality of our mortality. Each line was a necessary part of the whole to make the picture complete.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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Very clever. It takes us from the time where we start to feel our power in this world, assert ourselves and strive for what we want to the point where we become disillusioned, questioning meaning, then facing the reality of our mortality. Each line was a necessary part of the whole to make the picture complete.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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Thank you for your review and comments. RJ
Comment from Ekim777
I think you are stretching the Acrostic rule by introducing it in couplets. In a poem like this; a sketch of life and death and the journey in between, it is easy to full into a trap of abstractions. The very spirit and fiber of poetry lies in the imagery all bound by the cadence of the phrases. Paint a picture and make it sing. You would do well in sketching a portrait of that family member confronting the final, unanswerable question. It almost represents a blue print of what the poem is trying to depict. In the coming days I hope to present my Acrostic and I welcome technical advice. Best of luck. -Ekim777
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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I think you are stretching the Acrostic rule by introducing it in couplets. In a poem like this; a sketch of life and death and the journey in between, it is easy to full into a trap of abstractions. The very spirit and fiber of poetry lies in the imagery all bound by the cadence of the phrases. Paint a picture and make it sing. You would do well in sketching a portrait of that family member confronting the final, unanswerable question. It almost represents a blue print of what the poem is trying to depict. In the coming days I hope to present my Acrostic and I welcome technical advice. Best of luck. -Ekim777
Comment Written 20-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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Thank you for your kind review and comments. You are right that I did stretch the acrostic rule. I was very inspired on this one. RJ
Comment from emrpoems
Like my husband will say from the time we are born we are dying and that is so true.
Mystery wraps each soul
impending journey transcend
strong ending lines
awesome complimentary picture
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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Like my husband will say from the time we are born we are dying and that is so true.
Mystery wraps each soul
impending journey transcend
strong ending lines
awesome complimentary picture
Comment Written 20-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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Thank you for your kind review and comments. RJ
Comment from Oatmeal
RJ,
My family is safe but about 2 months ago I had to put my cat down. It was very painful for me. I had him from 4 weeks old to 19 years old.
I am so sorry for your pain. I feel for you. sometimes they go when you least expect it.
All arrangement is fine, smoothly readable and understandable. This is a very detailed poem.
Flowing very nicely. This poem was heart-wrenching. Very painful.
I saw no SPAG and no typos. Everything looked in place.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014
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RJ,
My family is safe but about 2 months ago I had to put my cat down. It was very painful for me. I had him from 4 weeks old to 19 years old.
I am so sorry for your pain. I feel for you. sometimes they go when you least expect it.
All arrangement is fine, smoothly readable and understandable. This is a very detailed poem.
Flowing very nicely. This poem was heart-wrenching. Very painful.
I saw no SPAG and no typos. Everything looked in place.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014
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Thank you very much for your kind comments. Means a lot. I only had 10 days to write this poem, from the time I new my cousin only had a few days left, and wanted to get a lot in. RJ
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RJ,
Kindness will always be a better tool than negativity. I have always tried to explain te errors that I found in a gentle way.
you are a very good author.
Love you,
Camille
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RJ,
Kindness will always be a better tool than negativity. I have always tried to explain te errors that I found in a gentle way.
you are a very good author.
Love you,
Camille
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Thank you :-)
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RJ,
Anytime.
Love you,
Camille
