Jealous of Robert Faraday
Short Story30 total reviews
Comment from Darkhorse555
i could just picture these words in my mind mikey It may as well have been a seductive dance beautifully written piece delightful read really enjoyed
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i could just picture these words in my mind mikey It may as well have been a seductive dance beautifully written piece delightful read really enjoyed
Comment Written 18-Aug-2014
Comment from ravenblack
As you know, I've been off the bard- waaaay behind after vacation and Don't want to read anything out of order. All I can say is I think this story shows the growth of you as a writer. The relatively innocent sneaking lulls us into safety, the suicide of Emily truly shocking. And then you throw in another curve ball, not just for the sake of doing it, but to illustrate the quirkiness if human nature. Amidst the tragedy, jealousy of Robert Faraday. Excellent work and one of your best.
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As you know, I've been off the bard- waaaay behind after vacation and Don't want to read anything out of order. All I can say is I think this story shows the growth of you as a writer. The relatively innocent sneaking lulls us into safety, the suicide of Emily truly shocking. And then you throw in another curve ball, not just for the sake of doing it, but to illustrate the quirkiness if human nature. Amidst the tragedy, jealousy of Robert Faraday. Excellent work and one of your best.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2014
Comment from 1954speed
Very good story. The description of the guilt and emotion pulled the reader into the story and the way the author includes the reader in his "dirty little secret" is perfect! Well done, Michael.
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Very good story. The description of the guilt and emotion pulled the reader into the story and the way the author includes the reader in his "dirty little secret" is perfect! Well done, Michael.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2014
Comment from TamzinWhite
Great twist. Lines that draw me (the reader) in. A matter of fact way of speaking with lyrical ability within lines. I have to keep speaking or fanstory won't accept my comments but all I have to say really is above. Great twist and the other stuff I said too.
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Great twist. Lines that draw me (the reader) in. A matter of fact way of speaking with lyrical ability within lines. I have to keep speaking or fanstory won't accept my comments but all I have to say really is above. Great twist and the other stuff I said too.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2014
Comment from GracieAnn
Mikey, this is an original with an interesting and unexpected spin at the end. The possible code language used in the note has a gripping twist of irony. Well done. :0 GracieAnn
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Mikey, this is an original with an interesting and unexpected spin at the end. The possible code language used in the note has a gripping twist of irony. Well done. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 18-Aug-2014
Comment from CR Delport
Any form of suicide is always so sad. Life is so precious and so many people take it for granted. Mike, as always, this is a very well written story. I spotted no obvious errors.
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Any form of suicide is always so sad. Life is so precious and so many people take it for granted. Mike, as always, this is a very well written story. I spotted no obvious errors.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2014
Comment from robina1978
Pity you missed the prompt as this is an excellent short story about love. So, she had an affair with Robert Faraday and still felt so guilty, she shot herself.
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Pity you missed the prompt as this is an excellent short story about love. So, she had an affair with Robert Faraday and still felt so guilty, she shot herself.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2014
Comment from Spitfire
Wow! Good story. I never expected the ending. My guess is that Robert Faraday didn't exist, except as the guilty narrator. What a gesture to get him off the hook.
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Wow! Good story. I never expected the ending. My guess is that Robert Faraday didn't exist, except as the guilty narrator. What a gesture to get him off the hook.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2014
Comment from GeraldS
This was a well-written entry for the "She didn't lock her door" contest. When one is precluded from a contest because he has entered too many, it begins to sound like an addiction ... and there was a prompt for that too. In any event, you did a nice job with this story.
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This was a well-written entry for the "She didn't lock her door" contest. When one is precluded from a contest because he has entered too many, it begins to sound like an addiction ... and there was a prompt for that too. In any event, you did a nice job with this story.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2014
Comment from ProjectBluebook
Awe---mate. Was you that Robert Faraday. Had to laugh on this one. I'm sure this activity happens as we speak. Better watch them dames? They may have a customer sneaking through a cracked window. How dd you think up this story? I know Mikey never was caught. LOL! Just a practical joke. hey, this sounds pretty good. I'm still eyeballing a prompt. I require doubloon. Go ahead, fanstory contest bandit. LOL! You got the contest fever! This was a contender, most of yours are. Good day, gallinipper... do loco
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Awe---mate. Was you that Robert Faraday. Had to laugh on this one. I'm sure this activity happens as we speak. Better watch them dames? They may have a customer sneaking through a cracked window. How dd you think up this story? I know Mikey never was caught. LOL! Just a practical joke. hey, this sounds pretty good. I'm still eyeballing a prompt. I require doubloon. Go ahead, fanstory contest bandit. LOL! You got the contest fever! This was a contender, most of yours are. Good day, gallinipper... do loco
Comment Written 16-Aug-2014
