Brave Robert
A Cautionary Tale56 total reviews
Comment from ravenblack
Such a great statement on the bullshit John Wayne mentality that real men don't cry. Try to quash a child's empathy, stick toy army men in his hand, and what do you get? Many Robert's .excellent work. The rhythm, it reads like a lullaby. Was that intentional? If so, great choice.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2014
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Such a great statement on the bullshit John Wayne mentality that real men don't cry. Try to quash a child's empathy, stick toy army men in his hand, and what do you get? Many Robert's .excellent work. The rhythm, it reads like a lullaby. Was that intentional? If so, great choice.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2014
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Thanks for another kind review, Ravenblack. I was imitating the form of some of those Cautionary Tales for Children that were so popular in Victorian and Edwardian times - good bedtime reading to induce a few nightmares! I loved them! The Strewwelpeter poems were a great favourite! ...see below:
http://www.gutenberg.org/files/12116/12116-h/12116-h.htm
Comment from daeneam
The real measure of a brave person is not in the capacity to keep his eyes dry and not cry, but his capacity to dry his own eyes after crying. To be able to stand up after a storm brought him down.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2014
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The real measure of a brave person is not in the capacity to keep his eyes dry and not cry, but his capacity to dry his own eyes after crying. To be able to stand up after a storm brought him down.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2014
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Absolutely true, Daeneam! Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from sunnilicious
Nice commemorative poem to St Julien Memorial. Well thought out as it is informative. Clearly visual imagery. Great flow of rhythm and rhymes. Great!
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2014
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Nice commemorative poem to St Julien Memorial. Well thought out as it is informative. Clearly visual imagery. Great flow of rhythm and rhymes. Great!
Comment Written 18-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2014
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Many thanks for reading this, Sunilicious, and for another most encouraging review.
Comment from mikemagine
Sharing our griefs and pains with others is so important. But listen to me...I KNOW this but I, a multi-addict with bipolar illness, don't practice it. Why do I isolate and keep inside the hurts and fears??? Right about now, I don't really have a clear answer.
Thanks,
Mike
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2014
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Sharing our griefs and pains with others is so important. But listen to me...I KNOW this but I, a multi-addict with bipolar illness, don't practice it. Why do I isolate and keep inside the hurts and fears??? Right about now, I don't really have a clear answer.
Thanks,
Mike
Comment Written 18-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2014
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I know what you mean, Mike. I certainly share more on this relatively impersonal website than I ever would up close and personal with family and friends.
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Us writers need to stick together!
Mike
Comment from TAB_that's me
A lot of men have grown up that way - being told not to cry. Your poem is perfectly worded with great rhymes and proximate rhymes.
Teresa
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2014
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A lot of men have grown up that way - being told not to cry. Your poem is perfectly worded with great rhymes and proximate rhymes.
Teresa
Comment Written 18-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2014
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Many thanks for reading this, Teresa, and for another most encouraging review.
Comment from LIJ Red
Since short reviews are not acceptable, and I see no changes I would make to this poem, nor have I questions or need to repeat any of it-excellent.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2014
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Since short reviews are not acceptable, and I see no changes I would make to this poem, nor have I questions or need to repeat any of it-excellent.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2014
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Thanks LIJR
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
'Brave Robert' is an extremely well-written and deftly descriptive piece. It was a pleasure to both read and review this talented poet's work. Nothing good has ever come from war.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2014
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'Brave Robert' is an extremely well-written and deftly descriptive piece. It was a pleasure to both read and review this talented poet's work. Nothing good has ever come from war.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2014
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Many thanks, Duchess. You are right.
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Thank you tfawcus. Sadly it's not often that I'm right.
Best wishes, the Duchess
Comment from royowen
My father served in Northern France, he, like your father never spoke of his war time experiences, I loved your even metered, beautifully written tribute to the soldier who forgot he was allowed to weep, brave tortured souls! aabb rhyming was great, descriptively expressed! I loved this purpose filled work, Tony, Well done.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2014
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My father served in Northern France, he, like your father never spoke of his war time experiences, I loved your even metered, beautifully written tribute to the soldier who forgot he was allowed to weep, brave tortured souls! aabb rhyming was great, descriptively expressed! I loved this purpose filled work, Tony, Well done.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2014
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Thanks, Roy, for your empathetic response and kind words. Much appreciated. Best wishes, Tony.
Comment from krys123
Tony;
After reading your author's notes it is easier to assimilate your poems meaning and I thank you for that. Also I enjoyed reading your poem immensely for reminded me of my father in World War II was taught at a young age that crying was for sissies. He ended up in the artillery.
Technically speaking, your rhythmic temple in metering was done very well where your rhythm flowed smoothly throughout your poem. The rhyming was neither forced nor labored and helped with the rhythmic flow.
I also find your poem very touching which was very descriptive throughout your writing in you expressed your fathers up bringing very well: "When nightmares breached his inter fears/His parents wiped away his tears; They saved him from emotion's wave...".
Thank you for sharing and posting this Tony and may your future endeavors be good ones.
Alex
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2014
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Tony;
After reading your author's notes it is easier to assimilate your poems meaning and I thank you for that. Also I enjoyed reading your poem immensely for reminded me of my father in World War II was taught at a young age that crying was for sissies. He ended up in the artillery.
Technically speaking, your rhythmic temple in metering was done very well where your rhythm flowed smoothly throughout your poem. The rhyming was neither forced nor labored and helped with the rhythmic flow.
I also find your poem very touching which was very descriptive throughout your writing in you expressed your fathers up bringing very well: "When nightmares breached his inter fears/His parents wiped away his tears; They saved him from emotion's wave...".
Thank you for sharing and posting this Tony and may your future endeavors be good ones.
Alex
Comment Written 18-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2014
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Thanks, Alex, for your empathetic response and kind words. Much appreciated. Best wishes, Tony.
Comment from granny goes viral
Yes, war is hell. Who said that? Actually who hasn't?
Yet we never learn. Even now, when we can see actual death, murder, blood as we eat our dinner, every night. I think we need smellovision. Good Job.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2014
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Yes, war is hell. Who said that? Actually who hasn't?
Yet we never learn. Even now, when we can see actual death, murder, blood as we eat our dinner, every night. I think we need smellovision. Good Job.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2014
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You are right about us never seeming to learn. History repeats itself. Television drives me crazy. With smellovision, I should be positively suicidal.
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I am having the feeling, we are all becoming suicidal. I know, too early in the day for such doom and gloom.
