Shadow Dance
rhyming quatrains in 8/6/8/6167 total reviews
Comment from nancyjam
children are always fascinated by their shadows which
you convey so charmingly in this well crafted poem with
strong meter and excellent rhyme and imagery.
Nancy
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2014
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children are always fascinated by their shadows which
you convey so charmingly in this well crafted poem with
strong meter and excellent rhyme and imagery.
Nancy
Comment Written 15-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2014
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Nancy, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Trybuck
I think she's done it again
Got inspired by the boy
But tonight I'm way too tired
To offer another verse
So I'll just say well done as always, Buck
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2014
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I think she's done it again
Got inspired by the boy
But tonight I'm way too tired
To offer another verse
So I'll just say well done as always, Buck
Comment Written 15-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2014
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Buck, thank you so much, my friend :-) Brooke
Comment from l.raven
HI Brooke, I love this poem...Sawyers shadow goes away when the sun goes down...and back on the next sunny day....you know I love this picture...this little guy could find a friend anywhere...LOL...so very well written you...Luff Linda xxoo
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HI Brooke, I love this poem...Sawyers shadow goes away when the sun goes down...and back on the next sunny day....you know I love this picture...this little guy could find a friend anywhere...LOL...so very well written you...Luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 15-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2014
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Linda, thanks so much :-) Brooke
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you are always so welcome Brooke...xxoo
Comment from Bina1
You create the most amazing verses about the simple things in life and they become little wonders! Thank you for sharing, a delight to read.
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You create the most amazing verses about the simple things in life and they become little wonders! Thank you for sharing, a delight to read.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2014
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Bina, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from giovannimariatommaso
Adewpearl, another gem; a joy to read and a live giving pearl for sure. The rhythm and the rhyme are great, the poem flows well. I didn't see any grammatical or spelling errors.
The interplay between Sawyer and the personified shadow is exactly what little children do. I bet he had a ball of laughs.
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Adewpearl, another gem; a joy to read and a live giving pearl for sure. The rhythm and the rhyme are great, the poem flows well. I didn't see any grammatical or spelling errors.
The interplay between Sawyer and the personified shadow is exactly what little children do. I bet he had a ball of laughs.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2014
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giovanni, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from kiwisteveh
I have to say that I like to see a good strong shadow friend appear as well - it brings out the inner child (not that that's hard!) Haven't seen him for a while, though - the late winter weather is being unreasonably wintry! Hanging on a promise of some sun this afternoon!
Fun poem.
Steve
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I have to say that I like to see a good strong shadow friend appear as well - it brings out the inner child (not that that's hard!) Haven't seen him for a while, though - the late winter weather is being unreasonably wintry! Hanging on a promise of some sun this afternoon!
Fun poem.
Steve
Comment Written 15-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2014
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Steve, thank you so very much :-) This past year we had a MOST unreasonable winter, so my sympathies are all yours :-) Brooke
Comment from Dean Kuch
A-w-w-w-w, I liked this poem told with the point of view from a child who has discovered his own shadow. So cute, Brooke!
Good enjambment, carrying thoughts from one stanza to the next.
Good rhyming and approximate rhyming, such as regularity/me.
Excellent work!~:}
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A-w-w-w-w, I liked this poem told with the point of view from a child who has discovered his own shadow. So cute, Brooke!
Good enjambment, carrying thoughts from one stanza to the next.
Good rhyming and approximate rhyming, such as regularity/me.
Excellent work!~:}
Comment Written 15-Aug-2014
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Thank you so much, Dean :-) Brooke
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No sweat...
Comment from madhatter1977
Light and shadow, not necessarily opposed but interacting is the message I took from this and I find it very interesting and a great sentiment! Best wishes, Brooke, Pete :)
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Light and shadow, not necessarily opposed but interacting is the message I took from this and I find it very interesting and a great sentiment! Best wishes, Brooke, Pete :)
Comment Written 15-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2014
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Pete, thanks so much for your generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from royowen
This reminds me Peter Pan who lost his shadow even on the day shadows normally appear! Another great inspiration, drawn from the the every day life you much loved grandson! Beautifully crafted work in one of my favourite rhyming forms, abcb nice even meterM well done, blessings, Roy
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This reminds me Peter Pan who lost his shadow even on the day shadows normally appear! Another great inspiration, drawn from the the every day life you much loved grandson! Beautifully crafted work in one of my favourite rhyming forms, abcb nice even meterM well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 15-Aug-2014
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Roy, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from TAB_that's me
As a child I remember "playing" with my shadow as Sawyer is here in the picture. Wonderful poem, rhyme and meter.
Teresa
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As a child I remember "playing" with my shadow as Sawyer is here in the picture. Wonderful poem, rhyme and meter.
Teresa
Comment Written 15-Aug-2014
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Teresa, thanks so much :-) Brooke
