Shadow Dance
rhyming quatrains in 8/6/8/6167 total reviews
Comment from Ridley Williams
Hello Brooke,
I appreciated the thought of someone you can always trust to appear...and it turns out to be your shadow. What a great idea! Loved the story you developed and the excellent delivery. Wonderful enjambments enhanced the flow and made for an enjoyable read.
I always appreciate your ability to see those simple things in life and bring them to the page. This was another beautiful example, well done.
Best wishes, Bill
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
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Hello Brooke,
I appreciated the thought of someone you can always trust to appear...and it turns out to be your shadow. What a great idea! Loved the story you developed and the excellent delivery. Wonderful enjambments enhanced the flow and made for an enjoyable read.
I always appreciate your ability to see those simple things in life and bring them to the page. This was another beautiful example, well done.
Best wishes, Bill
Comment Written 16-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
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Thanks so much, Bill, for your thoughtful reading of my poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Cumbrianlass
Magical. Peter Pan comes to mind, of course. I love the image of noses pressed up against the window pane, the personification of the shadow, and questioning where the shadows go at night.
A true pleasure to read, Brooke, and a lovely photo besides.
Av
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2014
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Magical. Peter Pan comes to mind, of course. I love the image of noses pressed up against the window pane, the personification of the shadow, and questioning where the shadows go at night.
A true pleasure to read, Brooke, and a lovely photo besides.
Av
Comment Written 16-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2014
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Av, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Dawn Munro
Here we go with the "aww" factor again - what a sweet poem Brooke, and I'm guessing this picture is what prompted it because it's about as cute as it gets. Miranda's photo-processing bill must be enormous, even if she does her own developing. LOL
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
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Here we go with the "aww" factor again - what a sweet poem Brooke, and I'm guessing this picture is what prompted it because it's about as cute as it gets. Miranda's photo-processing bill must be enormous, even if she does her own developing. LOL
Comment Written 16-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
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Dawn, thank you so much :-) Yes, the poems paired with Sawyer photos are just about always inspired by the photo :-) Brooke
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:) My pleasure.
Comment from Sandisan
This is perfect - matching that photo with the poem just perfect. Your sense of flow is really good and each paragraph flows easily into the net. Also good rhyming & rhythm too. Nothing I would change here.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
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This is perfect - matching that photo with the poem just perfect. Your sense of flow is really good and each paragraph flows easily into the net. Also good rhyming & rhythm too. Nothing I would change here.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
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Sandisan, thank you so much for your generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Brooke,
there's something so special the first time you realize you're not alone... and yes, it's the sun that allows such possibilities.
Not only did the photo of Sawyer doing his happy dance put a smile on my face... this entire exceptional write lifted my spirits... and just like magic I was sitting here in dreary cloud and rain... and as soon as I read this, the sun shined through and cast a magic dancing shadow on my key-board... you my sweet lady are a special talent... it was a true pleasure to share the emotion of this poem.
With our thoughts we create,
a knowing of togetherness,
James xx
******Stars!!!!!!
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
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Hi Brooke,
there's something so special the first time you realize you're not alone... and yes, it's the sun that allows such possibilities.
Not only did the photo of Sawyer doing his happy dance put a smile on my face... this entire exceptional write lifted my spirits... and just like magic I was sitting here in dreary cloud and rain... and as soon as I read this, the sun shined through and cast a magic dancing shadow on my key-board... you my sweet lady are a special talent... it was a true pleasure to share the emotion of this poem.
With our thoughts we create,
a knowing of togetherness,
James xx
******Stars!!!!!!
Comment Written 16-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
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Jumbo, thank you so much for your thoughtful comments and kind virtual stars :-) Brooke
Comment from INtity
Shadows in the dark or shadows in the sun.... either way the enigma of character and emotions is a forever pondering landscape
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
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Shadows in the dark or shadows in the sun.... either way the enigma of character and emotions is a forever pondering landscape
Comment Written 16-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
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INtity, thank you for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from donnadiann
Nice original twist on the shadow friend. Good rhyming lines. Interesting line and contrast...whose plans are spoiled by rain. Adorable photo and very spontaneous mom, Miranda. Great job putting words that are amusing, to a photo:)
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
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Nice original twist on the shadow friend. Good rhyming lines. Interesting line and contrast...whose plans are spoiled by rain. Adorable photo and very spontaneous mom, Miranda. Great job putting words that are amusing, to a photo:)
Comment Written 16-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
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donnadiann, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from lindalcreel
I can remember my children seeing their shadows for the first time. It was an awesome experience, but difficult to explain to a two year old. Loved the picture and the sentimentality that went along with it. It's these simple things in life that make us appreciate who we are.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
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I can remember my children seeing their shadows for the first time. It was an awesome experience, but difficult to explain to a two year old. Loved the picture and the sentimentality that went along with it. It's these simple things in life that make us appreciate who we are.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
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linda, thank you so much :-) I'm so glad you can connect to this through your own warm memories. Brooke
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My pleasure:)
Comment from Jean Lutz
Children love shadows and so do old ladies. Together we capture the simple joy of living. Thank you for sharing Sawyer's dance in poetic form. When it comes to children, I always have a story or two myself. This week a three year old girl and I were water painting. She was doing a lovely job with some greens and blues. I mentioned it looked like a Peacock. She knows birds very well and replied "It is not a pea-hawk". I left it at that. But a moment later I decided that I saw an alligator. She replied, "No, not a bird or animal. It really isn't anything." She turned out a beautiful abstract -- and won the discussion.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
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Children love shadows and so do old ladies. Together we capture the simple joy of living. Thank you for sharing Sawyer's dance in poetic form. When it comes to children, I always have a story or two myself. This week a three year old girl and I were water painting. She was doing a lovely job with some greens and blues. I mentioned it looked like a Peacock. She knows birds very well and replied "It is not a pea-hawk". I left it at that. But a moment later I decided that I saw an alligator. She replied, "No, not a bird or animal. It really isn't anything." She turned out a beautiful abstract -- and won the discussion.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
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Thank you for sharing that story -I'm laughing my head off, and thanks also for your gracious review :-) Brooke
Comment from ravenblack
The sun does let you see your shadow, examine it, know it for what it is and send it on its way...without fear. The sun or light allows for an examined life, to know yourself. Good psychological insight!
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2014
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The sun does let you see your shadow, examine it, know it for what it is and send it on its way...without fear. The sun or light allows for an examined life, to know yourself. Good psychological insight!
Comment Written 16-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2014
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ravenblack, thanks so much :-) Brooke
