Shadow Dance
rhyming quatrains in 8/6/8/6167 total reviews
Comment from MizKat
Hi Brooke,
I love your poem. You always write such nice ones. Your mind must be whirling with ideas because your poems are always great and interesting . My brain is in the sleeping mode at my age. LOL The picture of Sawyer is really cute too.
Kat
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2014
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Hi Brooke,
I love your poem. You always write such nice ones. Your mind must be whirling with ideas because your poems are always great and interesting . My brain is in the sleeping mode at my age. LOL The picture of Sawyer is really cute too.
Kat
Comment Written 15-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2014
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Kat, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from humpwhistle
I remember Fred Astaire singing and dancing to Me and My Shadow.
Brooke, you have this uncanny affinity for thinking like a child, but articulating their simpler thoughts in more creative and unusual ways. You are a teacher, my friend.
Publish this stuff. You'll make a difference, Brooke.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2014
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I remember Fred Astaire singing and dancing to Me and My Shadow.
Brooke, you have this uncanny affinity for thinking like a child, but articulating their simpler thoughts in more creative and unusual ways. You are a teacher, my friend.
Publish this stuff. You'll make a difference, Brooke.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 15-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2014
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Lee, I love all the things you remember and appreciate :-) On Facebook I just saw the best photo of Lauren Bacall and Humphrey Bogart leading a march against the McCarthy witch hunt - she is in high heels and a pencil skirt, looking both gorgeous and empowered. I bet she could have been a great dance partner for Astaire :-) I appreciate your support, my friend :-) Brooke
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Lauren Bacall will always be on my list of dream girls. I've always gone for the sultry types with the husky voices. Like Ann Bancroft and Chill Wills. L
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lol
Comment from Sasha
As a child, I was fascinated with my shadow. I could spend hours trying to chase it but I could never catch it; then, poof, it would disappear. Great work with this one. I really enjoyed the smooth flow and delightful rhyme.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2014
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As a child, I was fascinated with my shadow. I could spend hours trying to chase it but I could never catch it; then, poof, it would disappear. Great work with this one. I really enjoyed the smooth flow and delightful rhyme.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2014
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Valerie, thank you so much :-) I could have guessed you would have that kind of relationship with your shadow :-) Brooke
Comment from Just2Write
I absolutely love re-discovering life through the eyes of Miranda's lens, and the discoveries of Sawyer. Another terrific piece of writing. Flawless, of course.
So nice to read something positively positive.
Rose.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2014
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I absolutely love re-discovering life through the eyes of Miranda's lens, and the discoveries of Sawyer. Another terrific piece of writing. Flawless, of course.
So nice to read something positively positive.
Rose.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2014
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Thank you so much, Rose, for your generous response to this poem. I am so sick and tired of bad news and worse news that follows - I have to create my own positivity. :-) Brooke
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Thank goodness for those of you who look on the bright side. Too much crap in the waters these days. R.
Comment from Domino 2
Sawyer's shadowed hands look that that old Dracula black and white movie, where the monster is creeping down the stairs, Brooke. :-)
Excellent enjambment and alliteration, plus your usual top rhymes and meter.
I love the original idea of having a shadow who's a permanent friend. I miss mine, as I don't go out much. :-)
Excellent read!
Cheers, Ray xx
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2014
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Sawyer's shadowed hands look that that old Dracula black and white movie, where the monster is creeping down the stairs, Brooke. :-)
Excellent enjambment and alliteration, plus your usual top rhymes and meter.
I love the original idea of having a shadow who's a permanent friend. I miss mine, as I don't go out much. :-)
Excellent read!
Cheers, Ray xx
Comment Written 15-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2014
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Ray, thank you, my friend :-) I have a suggestion for you - go out more! :-) Brooke
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:-) xx
Comment from evilynne
You always seem to point out the perceptions of simple things, like shadows, in a child's mind. Grown-ups enjoy treasures along the way, too!
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2014
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You always seem to point out the perceptions of simple things, like shadows, in a child's mind. Grown-ups enjoy treasures along the way, too!
Comment Written 15-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2014
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Evi, thank you so much for your gracious and generous response to my poetry :-) Brooke
Comment from Lulube
An uplifting poem and not just for kids. Great picture of Sawyer and his shadow. He can go everyday to this spot to visit. lol Really easy flowing beat to these rhyming verses, they just roll along.
'sgood imagery for all that is the shadow's personality reflected in this poem.
loved it Brooke
lulube
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2014
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An uplifting poem and not just for kids. Great picture of Sawyer and his shadow. He can go everyday to this spot to visit. lol Really easy flowing beat to these rhyming verses, they just roll along.
'sgood imagery for all that is the shadow's personality reflected in this poem.
loved it Brooke
lulube
Comment Written 15-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2014
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Thank you again, Lulube - you've made my afternoon :-) Brooke
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welcome Brooke, a little under the weather?
lulube
Comment from James Dooney
Once again Brooke you have given us a nice little ditty here to review and peer over. You do well with the 8-6-8-6 format !! keep it up !
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
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Once again Brooke you have given us a nice little ditty here to review and peer over. You do well with the 8-6-8-6 format !! keep it up !
Comment Written 15-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
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James, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from tedanytime
We should know that shadows hide under our feet. They tend to be more visible after walking around barefoot for a while. HA.
I like the flow and rhythm of your lines.
Nice idea of a shadow friend...
He never tells me where he's been --
he's more the silent kind,
but if he has a secret life,
I guess I shouldn't mind
because he always reappears
with regularity,
so we can share another day,
my shadow friend and me.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2014
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We should know that shadows hide under our feet. They tend to be more visible after walking around barefoot for a while. HA.
I like the flow and rhythm of your lines.
Nice idea of a shadow friend...
He never tells me where he's been --
he's more the silent kind,
but if he has a secret life,
I guess I shouldn't mind
because he always reappears
with regularity,
so we can share another day,
my shadow friend and me.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2014
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Ted, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Janet Foor
What a delightful poem Brooke. I loved seeing the picture of Sawyer with his shadow and the thoughts you voiced through out this sweet poem. The innocence and fun is well conveyed.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2014
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What a delightful poem Brooke. I loved seeing the picture of Sawyer with his shadow and the thoughts you voiced through out this sweet poem. The innocence and fun is well conveyed.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 15-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2014
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Janet, thank you so much :-) Brooke
