Bel Air: A Bard's Guide
Viewing comments for Chapter 39 "The Bard VS Kolov & Barry"Sequel to The Bard of Bel Air.
11 total reviews
Comment from GracieAnn
Mikey, this segment has great action and drama for the reader to absorb. The touches of unexpected humor adds to the interest. Well done, my friend. :0 GracieAnn
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Mikey, this segment has great action and drama for the reader to absorb. The touches of unexpected humor adds to the interest. Well done, my friend. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 18-Aug-2014
Comment from Nosha17
But, the thing about one's own writing it is meant to be for your amusement, too. I am in complete agreement. Enjoyable chapter, lots of action, the plot is being drawn together nicely and justice will hopefully be done. Faye
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But, the thing about one's own writing it is meant to be for your amusement, too. I am in complete agreement. Enjoyable chapter, lots of action, the plot is being drawn together nicely and justice will hopefully be done. Faye
Comment Written 16-Aug-2014
Comment from l.raven
I don't know....I'm LMAO...right from the start....OMG Michael...truly the best chapter yet...But you know I loveeeeeeeeeee Bard...LOL...now they have to get those kids out of there...can't wait...still laughing you...I know there was something about him...soooooooooooo very well written...Love ya...Linda xxxooo luff
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I don't know....I'm LMAO...right from the start....OMG Michael...truly the best chapter yet...But you know I loveeeeeeeeeee Bard...LOL...now they have to get those kids out of there...can't wait...still laughing you...I know there was something about him...soooooooooooo very well written...Love ya...Linda xxxooo luff
Comment Written 15-Aug-2014
Comment from seaglass
Well, glad we got through that with no one getting killed since everyone has big weapons. lol. Great comparison of Bard to 'Sling blade" I loved that movie.
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Well, glad we got through that with no one getting killed since everyone has big weapons. lol. Great comparison of Bard to 'Sling blade" I loved that movie.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2014
Comment from nordicgirl
For those of us that get the movie referrences this is a SCREAM!!!! Hahaha. This chapter has it all. Yet, the story remains plausible and everything is realistic even the outlandish Bard. Now, to get all those kids out though a camp full of metcenaries without a hitch. Whew!!
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For those of us that get the movie referrences this is a SCREAM!!!! Hahaha. This chapter has it all. Yet, the story remains plausible and everything is realistic even the outlandish Bard. Now, to get all those kids out though a camp full of metcenaries without a hitch. Whew!!
Comment Written 15-Aug-2014
Comment from CR Delport
Nobody takes on the Bard and walk away from it :) Barry thought he was so clever, but he's no much for the Bard, Lucy, and the others. Another well crafted chapter filled with good humor. Great stuff.
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Nobody takes on the Bard and walk away from it :) Barry thought he was so clever, but he's no much for the Bard, Lucy, and the others. Another well crafted chapter filled with good humor. Great stuff.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2014
Comment from ProjectBluebook
Your getting fancy with your slang. Is that Billy Bob Thorton I see? Slingblade. He mauled Dwight Yokum, before he escaped in his Cadillac with his guitar. He told John Ritter, "You may be queer--but you been alright with me... He's gonna kill that boy!" UUUMMMM---"They told me--hummm--to call an ambulance---and a hurst...hummm---I think he's dead---that second chop nearly took his head off---hhuumm." "Fellow---don't you ever talk to me again---humm---sick of listening to you---humm." Lot of live action in this unit. Like the wrestling photos. Guess the three school buses will be arriving soon--humm--to pick up them brats. Why do you talk funny? This is too easy. I see the silver bullet coming from the green knoll. The Bard is a hero. Loonier than a loon. He talks funny--like Billy Bob. "Why do you have that hammer in your hand? Huuuummm--Better not hurt that boy!HUUMM. You set yourself up for this, Mikey. LOL! A sense of humor goes a long ways---huummm...They taking me back to the crazy house---hummm...
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2014
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Your getting fancy with your slang. Is that Billy Bob Thorton I see? Slingblade. He mauled Dwight Yokum, before he escaped in his Cadillac with his guitar. He told John Ritter, "You may be queer--but you been alright with me... He's gonna kill that boy!" UUUMMMM---"They told me--hummm--to call an ambulance---and a hurst...hummm---I think he's dead---that second chop nearly took his head off---hhuumm." "Fellow---don't you ever talk to me again---humm---sick of listening to you---humm." Lot of live action in this unit. Like the wrestling photos. Guess the three school buses will be arriving soon--humm--to pick up them brats. Why do you talk funny? This is too easy. I see the silver bullet coming from the green knoll. The Bard is a hero. Loonier than a loon. He talks funny--like Billy Bob. "Why do you have that hammer in your hand? Huuuummm--Better not hurt that boy!HUUMM. You set yourself up for this, Mikey. LOL! A sense of humor goes a long ways---huummm...They taking me back to the crazy house---hummm...
Comment Written 14-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2014
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Sling Blade is more popular than I thought!! No one has mentioned "The Silence of the Lambs" reference. HUMM MMMM. I do a spot on Sling Blade. Hahaha. Always break off in to that. I do it at McDonalds... How much ya want fer that Big Mac reckon? HUMM mMM. I actually just started throwing things in to amuse myself!! I guess I should do more of that!! Check your mail. HMM MMMM.
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Give me some more of them french fires. UUUMMM--HUUUHH. I like taters.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Lucy walked back to the children's cells to the sounds of silence. She looked at Lucy << Names are the same...OOPS!
Love the reference to Slingblade...one of my all-time favorite movies. :)
Great chapter!
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2014
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Lucy walked back to the children's cells to the sounds of silence. She looked at Lucy << Names are the same...OOPS!
Love the reference to Slingblade...one of my all-time favorite movies. :)
Great chapter!
Comment Written 14-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2014
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I should have named everybody Lucy for a paragraph just to see if anyone noticed!! Glad you caught that. Duh, Slingblade is also one of my favorites and I do a spot on impersonation!! I do the creep from Silence of the Lambs too. A shame I don't do more conventional ones that might get me a stand up career. Remeber Anthony Newley? Hahaha. Nobody else does!!! mikey
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Of course I remember Anthony Newley! Doesn't everyone?
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No!! I do a perfect impersonation of him and no one knows who he is. Hahaha. Paul Williams too!
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You've gotta find cooler friends. LOL!
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That's why I hang out here!
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Me too! :)
Comment from drivenbackward
Great chapter and notes. Amusing yourself while writing usually works out well. This chapter is a good example.
He started prancing in front of the cells housing the children. -- 'He pranced' might read stronger. Your call.
You're a funny dude.
You're letting us out too, right?" A voice from another cell called out. -- lowercase 'a' following question mark. I know it's weird, and I still haven't figured out the rule. You might want to double check it, but if I remember correctly, it's lowercase.
Funny end. Sounds just like him.
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Great chapter and notes. Amusing yourself while writing usually works out well. This chapter is a good example.
He started prancing in front of the cells housing the children. -- 'He pranced' might read stronger. Your call.
You're a funny dude.
You're letting us out too, right?" A voice from another cell called out. -- lowercase 'a' following question mark. I know it's weird, and I still haven't figured out the rule. You might want to double check it, but if I remember correctly, it's lowercase.
Funny end. Sounds just like him.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2014
Comment from Sankey
He He Good work. Full of a lot of "Bardness' Thanks for a great ride mate. I am sure you still have some more tricks up your sleeve hmm? Not sure about the following?
They said he ate tooooooo many bu(r?)gers! Or is it bugers as in snot or wogs or something out of his nose? Arrgghh!! Gross!
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He He Good work. Full of a lot of "Bardness' Thanks for a great ride mate. I am sure you still have some more tricks up your sleeve hmm? Not sure about the following?
They said he ate tooooooo many bu(r?)gers! Or is it bugers as in snot or wogs or something out of his nose? Arrgghh!! Gross!
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Comment Written 14-Aug-2014
