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Finding Daisy

Viewing comments for Chapter 29 "Early Morning Phone Calls"
Another Ess and Oz comic fantasy

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Comment from Adri7enne
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It's been a while and the characters have become fuzzy. But Shades didn't tell Ess about the new job. Is our hero cooling on Ess? Darn! I'd get drunk too.

Well done, snod. No spags, no hesitations. Just good flow with realistic dialogue. Nice easy read.

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2014

reply by the author on 14-Aug-2014
    cooling? The night before was pretty hot what with the argument and the storming out, but we shall see. The Course of True Love Ne'er Did Run Smooth. Glad you liked it. Thanks for the review
Comment from CHIGYSISKI
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THIS IS A NICE STORY WHICH MAKES ME WANT TO LOOK FOR PREVIOUS BOOK CHAPTERS AND WATCH OUT FOR THE REST OF THE BOOK.THERE IS A TYPO IN THE SECOND SENTENCE UNDER BACKGROUND: WITH NOT IWTH.I THINK THERE SHOULD BE A HYPHEN JOINING UBER & CAUTIOUS IN THE SECOND TO LAST PARAGRAPH.GOOD JOB!

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2014

reply by the author on 14-Aug-2014
    You're very kind, thanks
Comment from CR Delport
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Yeah, I hate those early morning phone calls too, especially when you have a hangover. Luckily, in this case, it was worth it. Another very well written chapter. I saw no obvious errors.

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2014

reply by the author on 14-Aug-2014
    You're very kind, thank you. Yes, I try and make all my errors subtle and hidden