Comment from Ekim777

Exceptional

In such situations, we cannot plead innocence. The downward spiral begins with s desire to make ourselves vulnerable to others and to the world. Is that not what life is all about? But to be vulnerable and open is to risk self-destruction and oblivion. We can be onlookers in life but never innocent. Detachment might be our buoy in the storm.
We are presented with a profound piece.-Ekim777

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 14-Aug-2014

Thanks, Ekim777, I really appreciate the exceptional rating and review. I thought it would be doing much better in the contest than it is now, but there's still time.

Thanks again for you encouraging review.

Comment from nancy_e_davis

Excellent

This is a very well written entry for the Ghosts contest. A gaunt corpse being carried to his grave and purgatory because of an addiction to drugs. Very sad and scary if you happen to be addicted. Well done. Good luck. Nancy

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 14-Aug-2014

Well, I am not addicted nor have I ever been. however, I have known some throughout my lifetime that have been, and it literally destroys their lives. I think it would be scary for anyone who has a loved one, such as a son or daughter, or spouse, that is addicted as well. It affects far more than just the one with the addiction. Or haven't you heard.

Thanks for the review.

reply by nancy_e_davis on 14-Aug-2014

uyyes, I am well aware of that!

reply by the author on 14-Aug-2014

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Me too...

reply by nancy_e_davis on 14-Aug-2014

Yes, I am well aware of that! I should have said scary thought for someone who is addicted.

reply by the author on 14-Aug-2014

I got 'cha, Nancy. I lost a dear uncle to heroin addiction. He was always so good to me. I hate...no, I loathe!... drugs, and everything they represent. So, this topic was very near and dear to my heart, if you will.

Comment from Victoria K

Excellent

You manage to express a very powerful message in 8 short lines. You have easily met the criteria for the ghost poem contest.

Your words choices are authentic, while adhering to a structured rhyme scheme of AABB. Often in poems, words can feel forced just to fit, but not here.

Very well done; good luck in the contest :)

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 14-Aug-2014

Thanks so much for your kind and encouraging review, Victoria. I thought it would be doing much better in the voting booth than it is now, but you can never judge these things on how people will receive them.

I do appreciate your review, at least it is some encouragement.

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

This is a very strong contest entry. The rhyming scheme is good and the flow is excellent. The subject matter is very relevant for today. Good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 14-Aug-2014

Thank so much, Barbara, and I really appreciate your comments. I thought it would be doing much better in the voting booths than it is, but you can never judge how these things will turn out. There is still time, and where there's time, there's hope.

Thanks again!

Comment from amada

Excellent

A short and poignant rhyming work dedicated to the memory of that great comedian who took life so seriously. It doesn't make sense!... but who I am to ask?

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 14-Aug-2014

No, Amada, I can't make any sense of it either. It's so very sad...

I truly appreciate your kind comments and review.

Comment from TAB_that's me

Excellent

such a tragedy. Everyone else believed in him except himself. Great poem about his ghosts and what he would say. Good luck.
Teresa

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 14-Aug-2014

Thanks, Teresa, and based on the way it is performing in the voting booths, I will need all of the luck that I can get...and then some! LOL...

Comment from Kingsland

Excellent

This poem is written on a very serious tone. It has thoughts on an abusive life style that ends in a tragic event. The poem flows well and is written with high emotions... John

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 14-Aug-2014

I thank you for sharing your thoughts with me on this topic, John. I wish you all the best, my friend!

Comment from costellsgirl33

Excellent

I am incredibly heartbroken by the passing of Robin Williams! It's like someone close to me has died. So very sad.

That image you used goes perfectly with the last line and tone of your poem.

It's a great entry for the short poem-ghost writing prompt. I wish you much luck

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 14-Aug-2014

Thanks so much, costellsgirl, and I am heartbroken as well. I could not believe it when I heard the news.

As for the contest, I'm not doing all that well, but there is still time. Miracles can happen!

Thank you for your encouraging review.

reply by costellsgirl33 on 14-Aug-2014

You are very welcome and yes miracles can happen :)

CG

reply by the author on 14-Aug-2014

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Comment from Rose Hearth

Excellent

This is a great little poem. Haunting and effective. Is it dedicated to Robin Williams because of his struggle with addiction? His suicide by strangulation is a tragedy, and a great loss to us all.

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 14-Aug-2014

Yes, Rose. He struggled so hard battling his ghosts of addiction, and he even dabbled in heroin use at one time. So sad to lose such a wonderfully talented, comedic mind like Robin. I for one will dearly miss him.

Thanks so much for your kind review.

Comment from joann r romei

Excellent

What a shocker to hear that he is gone and by his own will, It must be a torment to live day in and day out so miserable, and we thought fame can cure any unhappiness. God rest him.

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 14-Aug-2014

Yes, he will surely be missed by young and old alike, Joann.

Thanks for your very kind review.