You Never Know
rhyming quatrains in 8/6/8/6146 total reviews
Comment from kiwijenny
Brooke you write the best most uplifting poems ever..........and this photo is awesome......Sawyer is adorable.........what inspiration
God bless
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2014
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Brooke you write the best most uplifting poems ever..........and this photo is awesome......Sawyer is adorable.........what inspiration
God bless
Comment Written 12-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2014
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Jenny, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from DSMalott
Another good one.
The joy of sweet surprise. Expressed well in the choice of subjects: the dance; fireflies; falling rocks.
The contrast development is good as the negative becomes potential for the positive.
Very good.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2014
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Another good one.
The joy of sweet surprise. Expressed well in the choice of subjects: the dance; fireflies; falling rocks.
The contrast development is good as the negative becomes potential for the positive.
Very good.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2014
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Doug, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from ProSongwriter
Hi there!
I'm new here, just my second day. Your title caught me and compelled me to read this piece. I am delighted it did. This is an excellent write! Technically, I cannot find a fault.
And the message is spot on. No matter how low one gets, there is always hope. If you give up hope, you sell your life short and deny yourself the chance for things better. You have said that so nicely in this poem. Loved it! Good luck ...
Alan
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2014
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Hi there!
I'm new here, just my second day. Your title caught me and compelled me to read this piece. I am delighted it did. This is an excellent write! Technically, I cannot find a fault.
And the message is spot on. No matter how low one gets, there is always hope. If you give up hope, you sell your life short and deny yourself the chance for things better. You have said that so nicely in this poem. Loved it! Good luck ...
Alan
Comment Written 12-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2014
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thanks so much, Alan - it is good to hear from you again :-) Brooke
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You're welcome. My pleasure!
Comment from Connie C
Darn--I just wrote you a nice review and FS just erased it before I could send it. So, let me say again that I really loved this poem with its perfect rhyme that just floats right along and with the message that you deliver in the last stanza. I also like your author's notes with happiness being personified as it (he) pops out of the bag. Sawyer is becoming quite the little blondie--so cute!
Connie
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2014
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Darn--I just wrote you a nice review and FS just erased it before I could send it. So, let me say again that I really loved this poem with its perfect rhyme that just floats right along and with the message that you deliver in the last stanza. I also like your author's notes with happiness being personified as it (he) pops out of the bag. Sawyer is becoming quite the little blondie--so cute!
Connie
Comment Written 12-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2014
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Connie, I hate when that happens, and with me, it inevitably happens after I've read a long prose piece and have left a long list of spag comments. LOL Brooke
Comment from words
Such a lovely, happy, eternally optimistic poem. You are so gifted with rhyme and meter. You make it look effortless and your work sings.
Yours is my first read of the day and one I really needed to read.
Feel that a bit of air has gone out of my balloon and my feet are a bit weighted down today. Robin Williams death has left me a tad flat.
I was surprised the effect that his death has had on the gerneral population ... friends and neighbors who are not normally concerned with Hollywood .. people who have never been to a comedy club or who can't connect names to the faces in the tabloids ... just ordinary folks ... but, somehow his comedy reached and touched them personally and his death matters to them.
I am sure that he had no idea of his impact.
Hugs,d
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2014
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Such a lovely, happy, eternally optimistic poem. You are so gifted with rhyme and meter. You make it look effortless and your work sings.
Yours is my first read of the day and one I really needed to read.
Feel that a bit of air has gone out of my balloon and my feet are a bit weighted down today. Robin Williams death has left me a tad flat.
I was surprised the effect that his death has had on the gerneral population ... friends and neighbors who are not normally concerned with Hollywood .. people who have never been to a comedy club or who can't connect names to the faces in the tabloids ... just ordinary folks ... but, somehow his comedy reached and touched them personally and his death matters to them.
I am sure that he had no idea of his impact.
Hugs,d
Comment Written 12-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2014
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I have noticed that too - everyone feels as if they've lost a personal friend. He made that kind of connection with millions of people. What a gift. How tragic that he could not feel embraced by that love enough to lift him up. I was actually thinking about him when the picture inspired me to write this. If one just lives to the next day, so often things change, or at least show the promise of change... Thank you so much, my friend. Brooke
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I agree, Brooke, if one could just live until the next day ....
Comment from RYME4U
This is delightful to read and thye flow of words is perfect. Your philosophy is so true. I lo0ve the picture of your little "muse" in the shopping bag
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2014
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This is delightful to read and thye flow of words is perfect. Your philosophy is so true. I lo0ve the picture of your little "muse" in the shopping bag
Comment Written 12-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2014
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RYME4U, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from royowen
The frequency of your posts are truly amazing, Brooke, the variety of rhyming, rhythmic are an encouragement, the trouble is I've tried free verse but my mind breaks into rhyme and rhythm, this is a wonderful rendition of you ability! Nice abab rhyming, even meter, some thoughtful images, I loved it! Blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2014
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The frequency of your posts are truly amazing, Brooke, the variety of rhyming, rhythmic are an encouragement, the trouble is I've tried free verse but my mind breaks into rhyme and rhythm, this is a wonderful rendition of you ability! Nice abab rhyming, even meter, some thoughtful images, I loved it! Blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2014
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Roy, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from prefabmouse
A very powerful and uplifting poem. I feel down a lot because of my illness and I love it when I read something that lifts me up. Thank you.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2014
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A very powerful and uplifting poem. I feel down a lot because of my illness and I love it when I read something that lifts me up. Thank you.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2014
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prefabmouse, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Drew Delaney
This is such a sweet photo of your little grandson popping out of a grocery bag. Kids have more fun with the odd things around then they do with real toys. Anyway, your poetry is always on top. Enjoy your writing very much. The rhyming is the best.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2014
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This is such a sweet photo of your little grandson popping out of a grocery bag. Kids have more fun with the odd things around then they do with real toys. Anyway, your poetry is always on top. Enjoy your writing very much. The rhyming is the best.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2014
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Drew, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Selina Stambi
You never know, and never will
if you should close your eyes
to all the possibilities
that dwell in sweet surprise. ... ah, my dear Brooke. What a breath of fresh air you are!
You know your rhyming quatrains are perfect, as is the metre - so why comment on them? :)
xxx
Sonali
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2014
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You never know, and never will
if you should close your eyes
to all the possibilities
that dwell in sweet surprise. ... ah, my dear Brooke. What a breath of fresh air you are!
You know your rhyming quatrains are perfect, as is the metre - so why comment on them? :)
xxx
Sonali
Comment Written 12-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2014
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Sonali, thank you for your supportive review :-) Brooke
