Comment from Titan Black

Excellent

A thousand words, put to use in such a short poem. very creative and cleverly put. I would not have known that you could be so subtle in getting your point across.keep up the good writing.

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 14-Aug-2014

Thanks, Titan Black, and it's good to see you back after such a long sabbatical. I appreciate your complimentary review, my friend.~:}

Comment from Eric1

Excellent

Wow Dean my friend, I am not in the least surprised that this was a contest winner, it is as usual just perfect! your wonderful authors notes take it up another level. Excellent!!

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 14-Aug-2014

Thanks so much, Eric. I am really glad that you enjoyed the read, my friend!:}

reply by Eric1 on 14-Aug-2014

you are so welcome my Dean, it was a great read.

Comment from livelylinda

Excellent

Dean: I understand why you won this contest. Original, very modern (twerk, don't know what it means), facts and fun, lovely picture! Congrats, my friend. Linda

 Comment Written 13-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 13-Aug-2014

Thanks, Linda, i really appreciate the read and kind review.

Google "twerking", and you'll soon see what it is all about. I think it is disgusting, myself, but many youngsters are doing it. What is our world becoming?

Comment from BLACKDYKE

Exceptional

Brilliant senryu, brilliant picture
to accompany, brilliant authors
notes sooooo entertaining! Over all
well presented. This obviously did
well in the prompt. It deserves to.
Eric

 Comment Written 13-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 13-Aug-2014

Thanks so much, Eric. I sincerely appreciate you stopping by to review it for me. I also am very thankful for the six star review as well.

Thanks again, my friend. Always a pleasure to hear from you.~Dean

reply by BLACKDYKE on 13-Aug-2014

My pleasure Dean.

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi,

Very creative artwork and formatting, which compliment your poem perfectly. Together they make a great presentation for an entry.

Good luck in the contest.

Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax ... ('-')

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2014

Thanks so much, Jax. I am very happy that you enjoyed my humble offering for the contest, my friend.:}

Comment from costellsgirl33

Excellent

Actually Mystical and The No Limit clan made twerking a household name.................I'm just saying.

Your poem is hilarious and it made me laugh and I loved it.

Good luck in the contest, lol!

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2014

Thanks so much, costellsgirl, and I'm so happy you picked up on the dark humor interwoven into this. Many have not.

Thanks so much for your supportive and encouraging review!:}

reply by costellsgirl33 on 13-Aug-2014

You are very welcome! It was hilarious!

I hope you won!

Arnetta

Comment from pearlecat

Excellent

Loved the Senryu, but I must say that I also enjoyed the author notes. Very interesting. Over all...an enjoyable and well done piece of work.

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2014

Thanks so much, pearlecat. I'm so glad to know that you enjoyed reading the poem, my friend. I truly appreciate your encouraging response.~

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

This senryu, spindly spider twerks, with its seventeen syllables and five-seven-five format, educates the masses with the tie between the twerking craze and natures use of the southern shake.

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2014

Thanks, Bill, I really liked that! A very interesting way of putting it, my friend. Cool!

Thanks for the outstanding review, my friend.:}

Comment from Spitfire

Excellent

Everyone will recognize your signature, my friend. Looks as of your 75 cents will pay off. Fun to make use of a new word in our language. Great alliteration too.

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2014

Thanks so much, Shari, I'm really happy that you liked it. In my humble opinion, you are the queen of this style on FanStory, so your kind comments are all the more encouraging, my friend.

Thank you!

reply by Spitfire on 12-Aug-2014

I entered this contest too!

reply by the author on 12-Aug-2014

I must not have run across your entry yet. i am still reviewing them, however...among many other things, LOL!:} Review, review, review!

Comment from acerisestory

Excellent

Shades of Miley Cyrus :) You've made great use of alliteration with spindly spider and femme fatale's, and your message is quite entertaining. And the art work is "over the top."

This is well done and a strong entry for the competition. Good luck! Alana

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2014

Thanks so much, Alana, I really appreciate that! Your review is very encouraging, and I was also happy to hear that you enjoyed the presentation as well.

Thanks so much again, my friend.~

reply by acerisestory on 12-Aug-2014

You are welcome! Alana