Mama Tries to Pin the Blame
two wildly wildly modified triolets125 total reviews
Comment from Patti R.
Excellent wildly modified triolet, Brooke! You are allowed to mess it all up as you see fitting, because you're you!
Poor Sawyer. Gosh he's growing so fast. My kids have a number of photos I took of them in the tub that are not permitted to leave my office! Ever! Too bad, 'cause they're some of the best.
Second last line of first verse, capitalize Mama, no?
Patti
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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Excellent wildly modified triolet, Brooke! You are allowed to mess it all up as you see fitting, because you're you!
Poor Sawyer. Gosh he's growing so fast. My kids have a number of photos I took of them in the tub that are not permitted to leave my office! Ever! Too bad, 'cause they're some of the best.
Second last line of first verse, capitalize Mama, no?
Patti
Comment Written 11-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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Patti, thank you for your great review and for picking up that mistake, which I've now edited :-) Brooke
Comment from RGstar
Ha,ha,ha.
I guess Sawyer won't be needing any hair gel soon.
A happy little write, Brooke. I smiled all the way through.
This little guy will have plenty of love to grow up on.
Bravo.
RGstar
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2014
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Ha,ha,ha.
I guess Sawyer won't be needing any hair gel soon.
A happy little write, Brooke. I smiled all the way through.
This little guy will have plenty of love to grow up on.
Bravo.
RGstar
Comment Written 11-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2014
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RG, thank you so much. :-) Brooke
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi Brooke,
This is fantastic! I live the look on Sawyer's face. It's priceless. Your poem is just so spot on with what he could be thinking.
Fun read!
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax ('^')
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2014
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Hi Brooke,
This is fantastic! I live the look on Sawyer's face. It's priceless. Your poem is just so spot on with what he could be thinking.
Fun read!
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax ('^')
Comment Written 11-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2014
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Jax, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from rod007
You hit it on the head. Kids can't stand things done to their appearance that they don't like. When my son was a little boy, my then wife bought him a suit. He just kept staring at it and would only wear the shirt at a wedding we were invited to. The rest of the clothes gathered dust! Well done, Brooke.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2014
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You hit it on the head. Kids can't stand things done to their appearance that they don't like. When my son was a little boy, my then wife bought him a suit. He just kept staring at it and would only wear the shirt at a wedding we were invited to. The rest of the clothes gathered dust! Well done, Brooke.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2014
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Rod, thanks so much :-) Sawyer has definite clothing preferences - he doesn't like button-down shirts but does love pockets in his pants, for instance. LOL And he always has opinions about which shoes to wear on any given day. Who says only girls care about such things? :-) Brooke
Comment from Aussie
Glad she didn't put gel on pee-wee! Great photo, Miranda is quite the photographer. Wildly modified violets is right! I enjoyed your splash and dash poem about the naked dude being rude. Well done Mrs Bubble.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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Glad she didn't put gel on pee-wee! Great photo, Miranda is quite the photographer. Wildly modified violets is right! I enjoyed your splash and dash poem about the naked dude being rude. Well done Mrs Bubble.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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Thanks so much, Kay :-) So glad you enjoyed :-) Brooke
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
So very clever, Brooke. Yes, they are wildly modified but I love them. What a picture of Sawyer. This made me smile which I truly needed today. Thank you, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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So very clever, Brooke. Yes, they are wildly modified but I love them. What a picture of Sawyer. This made me smile which I truly needed today. Thank you, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 11-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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Thank you so much, Debbie - I'm thrilled this got a smile out of you :-) Brooke
Comment from ProSongwriter
Hi! I'm back again this evening! I couldn't resist this one ... totally loved it!
If only parents could read what their kids are really thinking at times like these! Fabulous and funny story that's well-written. Thanks for the smile! Best to you ...
Alan
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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Hi! I'm back again this evening! I couldn't resist this one ... totally loved it!
If only parents could read what their kids are really thinking at times like these! Fabulous and funny story that's well-written. Thanks for the smile! Best to you ...
Alan
Comment Written 11-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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Alan, it's good to have you visit again. Thank you :-) Brooke
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My pleasure. Good writing is hard to ignore!
Comment from LIJ Red
ABAAABAB. Has a really nice beat to it. And the content fits right into the lad's expression. Slightly unusual but quite pleasing. Excelllent.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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ABAAABAB. Has a really nice beat to it. And the content fits right into the lad's expression. Slightly unusual but quite pleasing. Excelllent.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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LIJ, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Tatarka2
Another delightful poem about Sawyer. As far as my limited ability to discern goes, you have followed this difficult form and again created such a whimsical, lyrical poem which would be so appealing to little ones (and their parents).
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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Another delightful poem about Sawyer. As far as my limited ability to discern goes, you have followed this difficult form and again created such a whimsical, lyrical poem which would be so appealing to little ones (and their parents).
Comment Written 11-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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Thank you so much, my friend :-) Brooke
Comment from tedanytime
Nice little ditty and the photo is a fine one!
Especially liked
though mama tries to pin the blame,
the fault is hers, it's clear to see.
There are others that point the blame also, but are not as innocent as the subject of this verse!
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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Nice little ditty and the photo is a fine one!
Especially liked
though mama tries to pin the blame,
the fault is hers, it's clear to see.
There are others that point the blame also, but are not as innocent as the subject of this verse!
Comment Written 11-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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Ted, thank you so much :-) Brooke
