Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 48 "What of this journey"A book of Poetry & Writing
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Comment from acerisestory
What beautiful imagery you've created, Gary, in this free verse poem! I am particularly moved by the last two lines:
What of this journey, cast in the pits of anguish,
Can we rise as the phoenix?
Well done. Thank you for sharing. Alana
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2014
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What beautiful imagery you've created, Gary, in this free verse poem! I am particularly moved by the last two lines:
What of this journey, cast in the pits of anguish,
Can we rise as the phoenix?
Well done. Thank you for sharing. Alana
Comment Written 12-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2014
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thank you Alana
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You are welcome, Gary. Alana
Comment from theonewholoves
awesome imagery
very impressive metaphors and well penned with lots of emotion
deep emotion fosr morality lost by treachery--loved this
awesome presentation
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awesome imagery
very impressive metaphors and well penned with lots of emotion
deep emotion fosr morality lost by treachery--loved this
awesome presentation
Comment Written 12-Aug-2014
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Thank you for the review
Comment from LayneCat
Awesome Imagery! You are surely talented. I really liked the first and last line because it keeps your attention the whole time. Keep up the work because you are an amazing writer.
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Awesome Imagery! You are surely talented. I really liked the first and last line because it keeps your attention the whole time. Keep up the work because you are an amazing writer.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2014
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Thank you again
Comment from robina1978
Beautiful artwork that complements your poem extremely well.
Quite a bit of rhyme in it and a good flow. You talk about many I think that are not right and will soon die.
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Beautiful artwork that complements your poem extremely well.
Quite a bit of rhyme in it and a good flow. You talk about many I think that are not right and will soon die.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2014
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Thank you
Comment from Artist Dilemma
Can any of us understand the meaning of life? So vividly portrayed with strong words and vivid imagination in this, somehow unsettling piece of work. Of which I have enjoyed immensely.
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Can any of us understand the meaning of life? So vividly portrayed with strong words and vivid imagination in this, somehow unsettling piece of work. Of which I have enjoyed immensely.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2014
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Thank you for your review Artist
Comment from arnie47
This is such a powerful piece. You really didn't need the picture to portray the power of your words, but the picture you chose was absolutely perfect. Illusion crust, I love that, then ending it with a question was a nice touch.
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This is such a powerful piece. You really didn't need the picture to portray the power of your words, but the picture you chose was absolutely perfect. Illusion crust, I love that, then ending it with a question was a nice touch.
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Thank you Arnie for this
Comment from dragonpoet
Well written. Full of emotion and hope. I like all the use of all the 'ity' words.
This fairy has the ability to rise like a phoenix more than the rest of us because she has wings. We do seem to forgive easier at the end of life than during life when it is most needed and helpful.
Will her black wings and dark dress turn white after her grieving is over. I have always thought all fairies should have white wings.
Keep writing
Joan
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Well written. Full of emotion and hope. I like all the use of all the 'ity' words.
This fairy has the ability to rise like a phoenix more than the rest of us because she has wings. We do seem to forgive easier at the end of life than during life when it is most needed and helpful.
Will her black wings and dark dress turn white after her grieving is over. I have always thought all fairies should have white wings.
Keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 12-Aug-2014
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Thanks Joan
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No problem, Gary.
Joan
Comment from DR DIP
beautifully written with some beautiful phrases impressive metaphors. Forgive me if I offend you with this next comment but with the greatest respect for you as an amazing wordsmith but I found this piece very labour intensive a collection of beautiful collective phrases that could stand proud as individual lines in their own right.
hey its just my opinion as my style is of simple 4 line rhyme with no flowery descriptive terms but I so love to read wordsmiths with the calibre of your work but find them mind intensive to decipher until several reads.
respectfully dip
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beautifully written with some beautiful phrases impressive metaphors. Forgive me if I offend you with this next comment but with the greatest respect for you as an amazing wordsmith but I found this piece very labour intensive a collection of beautiful collective phrases that could stand proud as individual lines in their own right.
hey its just my opinion as my style is of simple 4 line rhyme with no flowery descriptive terms but I so love to read wordsmiths with the calibre of your work but find them mind intensive to decipher until several reads.
respectfully dip
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Thank you for this review DR
Comment from Andrewajgblue
With the picture and your wording it felt quite mystical whilst being pertinent to today's state of the world, truly great work I really enjoyed it, well done on great poetic writing,
Andrew
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With the picture and your wording it felt quite mystical whilst being pertinent to today's state of the world, truly great work I really enjoyed it, well done on great poetic writing,
Andrew
Comment Written 12-Aug-2014
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Thanks for this Andrew
Comment from playinaround
Very nicely written. Loved the presentation, the font and the pic. But the writing is amazing. Thank you for sharing this wonderful poem!
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Very nicely written. Loved the presentation, the font and the pic. But the writing is amazing. Thank you for sharing this wonderful poem!
Comment Written 12-Aug-2014
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Thank you again for this six
Gary
