Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 48 "What of this journey"A book of Poetry & Writing
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Comment from MizKat
Hi GW,
This is a very nice poem too. The picture you chose to go with it fits perfectly. Again I enjoyed reading your poem and look forward to reading more. Bravo!
Kat
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Hi GW,
This is a very nice poem too. The picture you chose to go with it fits perfectly. Again I enjoyed reading your poem and look forward to reading more. Bravo!
Kat
Comment Written 13-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2014
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thank you Kat for this
Gary
Comment from gazzagodbod
what a fabulous presentation of a well written stunning piece fabulous read well done my friend had to be a sixer from xxgodbodxx
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what a fabulous presentation of a well written stunning piece fabulous read well done my friend had to be a sixer from xxgodbodxx
Comment Written 13-Aug-2014
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thanks Gazza for the six
Comment from Chrisluca
This casts my mind to Dante Comedies. The language of its emotion is harsh but truthful. The flow and balance of the piece is consistent throughout. Well done.
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This casts my mind to Dante Comedies. The language of its emotion is harsh but truthful. The flow and balance of the piece is consistent throughout. Well done.
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thank you
Comment from TKField
I don't know D, I think you may have flown too close to the sun with this one. This screams, "I am profound!" How do we know it's profound? Because it's a big raft full of angst and anxiety with no context and pretentious quasi religious verbiage that makes little or no sense. For example, lines like "Illusion crust, eternity's hellfire lost in self-pity, provoked, Drained of spiritual sensuality to prevail from this path", sound good, but what exactly do they mean? This was an ambitious poem, but I found it way too self important and self consciously "poetic" for my taste. In summary, I think this suffered from a lack of clarity and context.
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I don't know D, I think you may have flown too close to the sun with this one. This screams, "I am profound!" How do we know it's profound? Because it's a big raft full of angst and anxiety with no context and pretentious quasi religious verbiage that makes little or no sense. For example, lines like "Illusion crust, eternity's hellfire lost in self-pity, provoked, Drained of spiritual sensuality to prevail from this path", sound good, but what exactly do they mean? This was an ambitious poem, but I found it way too self important and self consciously "poetic" for my taste. In summary, I think this suffered from a lack of clarity and context.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2014
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there is no reply to some people
Comment from Glasstruth
Elegantly written with great imagery. Your poem I take as a warning, is superb. Enjoyed the message. As for purgatory, it's more myth, but that's for each to decide on what they believe. Very passionate. Great job! Les
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Elegantly written with great imagery. Your poem I take as a warning, is superb. Enjoyed the message. As for purgatory, it's more myth, but that's for each to decide on what they believe. Very passionate. Great job! Les
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Thank you Les
Comment from evilynne
Delivering a thought provoking message, your work is well written and reads well. The accompanying picture is also quite awe inspiring.
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Delivering a thought provoking message, your work is well written and reads well. The accompanying picture is also quite awe inspiring.
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thank you for this
Comment from Eternal Muse
Our soul has traveled to the halls of purgatory,
Tormented spirits divested, tremendous drain,
Your cold hand of fate wrenched out this heart
Still beating with loss of faith for humanity.
I very much liked your message that karma returns. It does return, always, to haunt those who committed wrong.
Awesome picture. Great artistic presentation.
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Our soul has traveled to the halls of purgatory,
Tormented spirits divested, tremendous drain,
Your cold hand of fate wrenched out this heart
Still beating with loss of faith for humanity.
I very much liked your message that karma returns. It does return, always, to haunt those who committed wrong.
Awesome picture. Great artistic presentation.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2014
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thank you for this
Comment from rosehill (Wendy)
Can we rise? The devil's quote, "Abandon hope all ye who enter here," seems to give rise to your challenge. Yet you allude of purgatory, where redemption is an arduous journey, but achievable. It seems that what you truly addressing is a longing to better your soul in this life in order to be at peace with yourself. A worthy goal, no matter what you think happens at death. A thought provoking read. - Wendy
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Can we rise? The devil's quote, "Abandon hope all ye who enter here," seems to give rise to your challenge. Yet you allude of purgatory, where redemption is an arduous journey, but achievable. It seems that what you truly addressing is a longing to better your soul in this life in order to be at peace with yourself. A worthy goal, no matter what you think happens at death. A thought provoking read. - Wendy
Comment Written 13-Aug-2014
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Thank you Wendy
Comment from tfawcus
A poem of despair offering a faint glimmer of hope in the closing line. I was particularly struck by
"Your cold hand of fate wrenched out this heart
Still beating with loss of faith for humanity"
although I cannot quite make up my mind who "You" is. Is it the devil who has stripped us of our dignity and spiritual sensuality?
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A poem of despair offering a faint glimmer of hope in the closing line. I was particularly struck by
"Your cold hand of fate wrenched out this heart
Still beating with loss of faith for humanity"
although I cannot quite make up my mind who "You" is. Is it the devil who has stripped us of our dignity and spiritual sensuality?
Comment Written 13-Aug-2014
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Thank you for reading Gary
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
Should our soul be our souls? Our is plural but soul is singular. Just something that caught my eye. You did a great job with this and it makes me think of Robin Williams and how some people can rise above depression and others get stuck in it for years. It's no way to live your life but sadly millions struggle with it daily.
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Should our soul be our souls? Our is plural but soul is singular. Just something that caught my eye. You did a great job with this and it makes me think of Robin Williams and how some people can rise above depression and others get stuck in it for years. It's no way to live your life but sadly millions struggle with it daily.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2014
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Thank you for this
Gary
