If Love Should Saunter Up My Walk
rhyming quatrains129 total reviews
Comment from MissMerri
I love the picture, and I love the philosophy expressed in these twelve lines! The meter and rhymes are delightful and the thoughts are profound. I was only bothered by this one phrase: "its very possibility/ to serve as my incentive," It seemed like the "to" should be "will serve..." or could or might or something besides "to." I'm not sure, but maybe I'm misreading something. Anyway, I love the poem and especially the sentiment. The picture is priceless. MM
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I love the picture, and I love the philosophy expressed in these twelve lines! The meter and rhymes are delightful and the thoughts are profound. I was only bothered by this one phrase: "its very possibility/ to serve as my incentive," It seemed like the "to" should be "will serve..." or could or might or something besides "to." I'm not sure, but maybe I'm misreading something. Anyway, I love the poem and especially the sentiment. The picture is priceless. MM
Comment Written 09-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2014
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Adonna, thank you so much :-) I had a word like might there and then revised while composing. I'll think it over again :-) Brooke
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Unusual 8/7/8/7 rhyme Brooke. Just as smooth as your 8/6/8/6/rhyme. The message can apply to anyone really. What a nice picture of Sawyer waiting for his friend. A very enjoyable read. xsx Nancy
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Unusual 8/7/8/7 rhyme Brooke. Just as smooth as your 8/6/8/6/rhyme. The message can apply to anyone really. What a nice picture of Sawyer waiting for his friend. A very enjoyable read. xsx Nancy
Comment Written 09-Aug-2014
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Nancy, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from livelylinda
Brooke: those two little ones, watching each other intently as she approaches him, has the likings to a great romance novel. I can see that picture gracing the front cover. Fascinating picture and words. Linda
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Brooke: those two little ones, watching each other intently as she approaches him, has the likings to a great romance novel. I can see that picture gracing the front cover. Fascinating picture and words. Linda
Comment Written 09-Aug-2014
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Linda, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Taffspride
Three quatrains interlocked so well with such a great message within.
The last stanza certainly makes the reader sit up and realize not to waste the precious time we have on this earth.
Thank you for sharing Brooke.
Iechyd da
Ann
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Three quatrains interlocked so well with such a great message within.
The last stanza certainly makes the reader sit up and realize not to waste the precious time we have on this earth.
Thank you for sharing Brooke.
Iechyd da
Ann
Comment Written 09-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2014
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Ann, thank you so very much :-) I so appreciate your generous response to this poem. Brooke
Comment from kiwijenny
What a beautiful picture and poem from it......
Sawyer and Chloe......are so cute...................
If love should saunter up my walk.....adorable...
Well done
God bless
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What a beautiful picture and poem from it......
Sawyer and Chloe......are so cute...................
If love should saunter up my walk.....adorable...
Well done
God bless
Comment Written 09-Aug-2014
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Jenny, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Robin Gilmor
A delightful verse on any level. A profound observation of life
and relationships. Inattention brings on apathy and that can serve as the
ruin of many couples. Sawyer is such a delight to see. He is changing into the little boy and not the baby any more. Smiles, Robin :)
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A delightful verse on any level. A profound observation of life
and relationships. Inattention brings on apathy and that can serve as the
ruin of many couples. Sawyer is such a delight to see. He is changing into the little boy and not the baby any more. Smiles, Robin :)
Comment Written 09-Aug-2014
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Thank you so much, Robin - yep, he is growing up way way too fast :-) Brooke
Comment from tfawcus
Although inspired by the photograph, this poem holds a global truth. One must seize one's chances in this life. The race is not to the faint-hearted! One has to 'do the asking'. I enjoy these poems of yours with the alternating rhythm of seven and eight syllables; they roll along so smoothly!
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Although inspired by the photograph, this poem holds a global truth. One must seize one's chances in this life. The race is not to the faint-hearted! One has to 'do the asking'. I enjoy these poems of yours with the alternating rhythm of seven and eight syllables; they roll along so smoothly!
Comment Written 09-Aug-2014
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tfawcus, thank you so much for your thoughtful reading of this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from royowen
I loved the last one I saw with Sawyers tittle girlfriend Chloe, it's a lovely picture, it's also true that love is the overcomer of sorrow, nice simple, yet it has depth to it, Brooke, great inventive abcb rhyming, even meter, well done, blessings, Roy.
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I loved the last one I saw with Sawyers tittle girlfriend Chloe, it's a lovely picture, it's also true that love is the overcomer of sorrow, nice simple, yet it has depth to it, Brooke, great inventive abcb rhyming, even meter, well done, blessings, Roy.
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Comment Written 09-Aug-2014
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Thank you so much, Roy - they are truly adorable together :-) Brooke
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Aww, that is so cute, Brooke. Isn't young love sweet. I take it Chloe doesn't live too far away from Sawyer, I can see the outline of a smile on his face, even though he has his back to us, the cheek is raised in a smile. :) I love your poem too, it is wise advice for any age. Really lovely! Sandra :)
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Aww, that is so cute, Brooke. Isn't young love sweet. I take it Chloe doesn't live too far away from Sawyer, I can see the outline of a smile on his face, even though he has his back to us, the cheek is raised in a smile. :) I love your poem too, it is wise advice for any age. Really lovely! Sandra :)
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Comment Written 09-Aug-2014
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Thanks so much, Sandra. She lives only a couple blocks away. They met through play dates arranged by Chloe's nanny and Sawyer's nanny, and then when Sawyer's nanny graduated from college and got a full time job, Chloe's mom and Sawyer's mom made a nanny-share agreement, so they get to see each other every weekday. Brooke :-)
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What a good way to do it. Everyone is happy, the children are, and get to see more of each other, and the mums know their child is safe. Perfect. :)
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Myra is also a wonderful nanny - she is teaching Sawyer lots of Spanish, and she obviously loves both children.
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Does Chloe speak Spanish? My Chloe is taking Spanish and German in school, but she had a head start on her Spanish. When I lived in Spain she would try simple phrases and learnt quite a bit. It's always easier for children, especially if they want to learn another language. You must let me know how Sawyer gets on.
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The only Spanish Chloe speaks is also what she's learned from Myra, who speaks English pretty well, too. Yes, the little ones pick up a new language with amazing ease.
