A Funny Face
rhyming quatrains in 8/6/8/6158 total reviews
Comment from rama devi
Super charming and superb deep POV of a toddler, with lots of details on what can ruin a day for a kid...cleverly conveyed in well timed and creatively rhymed lines. Fun to read aloud! Referencing go carts makes me think of kids of my parent's generation. Don;t know if kids these days still build their own, like the Little Rascals used to.
Unique imagery:
when puddles dry and hornets fly
and thistles coat the ground.
Especially enjoyed this section...all lines!:
When cakes fall flat and treats go splat
and kites are caught by trees,
when bubbles pop and stones go plop
and will not skip with ease,
when bug bites irk and monsters lurk
and peas are on the plate,
Fun! Nice smattering of alliteration on F, K-C, P, B :)
Love,
rd
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2014
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Super charming and superb deep POV of a toddler, with lots of details on what can ruin a day for a kid...cleverly conveyed in well timed and creatively rhymed lines. Fun to read aloud! Referencing go carts makes me think of kids of my parent's generation. Don;t know if kids these days still build their own, like the Little Rascals used to.
Unique imagery:
when puddles dry and hornets fly
and thistles coat the ground.
Especially enjoyed this section...all lines!:
When cakes fall flat and treats go splat
and kites are caught by trees,
when bubbles pop and stones go plop
and will not skip with ease,
when bug bites irk and monsters lurk
and peas are on the plate,
Fun! Nice smattering of alliteration on F, K-C, P, B :)
Love,
rd
Comment Written 08-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2014
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thanks so much, rama devi - they still hold a soap box derby in my neck of the woods, but yes, sadly those things are less and less popular nowadays
so glad you enjoyed :-) Brooke
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:-)))
Comment from Gargantuan2
I like this one a lot! I have always been fond of kids in general, but I have none of my own. Seeing words like this attached to photos of Sawyer having such fun, just makes my day!
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I like this one a lot! I have always been fond of kids in general, but I have none of my own. Seeing words like this attached to photos of Sawyer having such fun, just makes my day!
Comment Written 08-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2014
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Gargantuan, thank you so very much for your generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Sonaleeka
Really a funny face turn a day around.I like the concept and the image.Very much enjoyable. Worth reading my friend.
God bless!
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2014
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Really a funny face turn a day around.I like the concept and the image.Very much enjoyable. Worth reading my friend.
God bless!
Comment Written 08-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2014
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Sonaleeka, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Pyrrho
It, a funny face, also quells depression if a face faces a mirror and forces a smile. The smile farces stimulation of that portion of the brain that harbors happiness. So, your poem has basis in fact. Nice thought.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2014
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It, a funny face, also quells depression if a face faces a mirror and forces a smile. The smile farces stimulation of that portion of the brain that harbors happiness. So, your poem has basis in fact. Nice thought.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2014
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Thanks so much, Pyrrho - I had heard of that phenomenon. Glad you're familiar with it too :-) Brooke
Comment from Cajungirl
Very delightful poem, Brooke. Isn't it funny that no matter how bad a day is a silly face can turn a frown upside down. Great pictures of Sawyer and Miranda. Bless you for sharing.
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Very delightful poem, Brooke. Isn't it funny that no matter how bad a day is a silly face can turn a frown upside down. Great pictures of Sawyer and Miranda. Bless you for sharing.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2014
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Cajungirl, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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You are most welcome.
Comment from l.raven
OMG Brooke, this is too funny, In the first picture Sawyer looks like he is saying...are we really doing this mommy...LOL...I love your poem...and the picture is a treasure..very well written...Luff Linda xxoo
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OMG Brooke, this is too funny, In the first picture Sawyer looks like he is saying...are we really doing this mommy...LOL...I love your poem...and the picture is a treasure..very well written...Luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 08-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2014
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Thanks so much, Linda. The two of them are just a hoot when they're together :-) Brooke
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your so welcome Brooke...yes they are...LOL...xxoo
Comment from CR Delport
That is sure one happy family you have :) The Cute Little One and his mom sure had fun with these pictures. It is well written and thanks for sharing. It brightened up my Friday morning :)
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That is sure one happy family you have :) The Cute Little One and his mom sure had fun with these pictures. It is well written and thanks for sharing. It brightened up my Friday morning :)
Comment Written 08-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2014
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CR, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
'A Funny Face' is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. The simple things in life are still the best. It was a pleasure to review this talented poet's work.
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'A Funny Face' is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. The simple things in life are still the best. It was a pleasure to review this talented poet's work.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2014
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duchess, thank you so much, my friend :-) Brooke
Brooke, as always you're very welcome
:- the Duchess
Comment from anthony shacknofsky
A really well written poem with excellent use of rhyme rhythm and imagery. I especially liked the inner rhymes that appear throughout each stanza, that makes the task that much more difficult, but ultimately makes for a more pleasant read. Good use of alliteration.
Well done
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2014
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A really well written poem with excellent use of rhyme rhythm and imagery. I especially liked the inner rhymes that appear throughout each stanza, that makes the task that much more difficult, but ultimately makes for a more pleasant read. Good use of alliteration.
Well done
Comment Written 07-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2014
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Anthony, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from joysong
I just love kid's poetry. You've done a great job here and love the images you chose to compliment your piece. Gave me a chuckle and made me smile.Thanks and keep writing.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2014
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I just love kid's poetry. You've done a great job here and love the images you chose to compliment your piece. Gave me a chuckle and made me smile.Thanks and keep writing.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2014
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Joysong, thank you so much :-) I appreciate your generosity and encouragement. Brooke
