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Pantoum Sonnet32 total reviews
Comment from Ridley Williams
Hi Debi,
Wow! What a way to lose a child. It's funny how many of our childhood stories had such a dark subject matter. As a child I thought those fairy's were so clever, but as a parent, the thought of losing a child now, has new meaning.
You did a wonderful job putting this story to rhyme, and I appreciated the solid meter used to enhance the feel of the poem, well done.
Best wishes, Bill
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2014
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Hi Debi,
Wow! What a way to lose a child. It's funny how many of our childhood stories had such a dark subject matter. As a child I thought those fairy's were so clever, but as a parent, the thought of losing a child now, has new meaning.
You did a wonderful job putting this story to rhyme, and I appreciated the solid meter used to enhance the feel of the poem, well done.
Best wishes, Bill
Comment Written 07-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2014
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Thank you so much for the encouraging words about the writing, Bill. I appreciate it.
Yes, we have an older book of fairy tales which is much scarier that the modern versions. Both grandma and Red Riding Hood get eaten by the wolf and the woodcutter has to cut him open to get them out. Two of the three pigs get eaten by the wolf and the third pig eats the wolf. Oh, my what a scary world. Amazing that kids like the darker stuff. It's the adults who think its cruel.
Watch out for fairies. Debi
Comment from Bobby Jo
This is beautiful said and beauty beholds in the precious child's picture. Thanks for the fun and for the great poem. God Bless.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2014
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This is beautiful said and beauty beholds in the precious child's picture. Thanks for the fun and for the great poem. God Bless.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2014
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Thank you for the great review and encouragement, Bobby Jo. I appreciate it. Debi
Comment from Selina Stambi
There is something so appealing about the pantoum. You've placed a greater challenge on yourself by using it a sonnet for.
A delightful little bit of faerie fancy, debi. Your lines scanned perfectly for rhyme and metre.
Love the phrase 'frantic glee' - it says so much!
Until next time,
Sonali
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2014
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There is something so appealing about the pantoum. You've placed a greater challenge on yourself by using it a sonnet for.
A delightful little bit of faerie fancy, debi. Your lines scanned perfectly for rhyme and metre.
Love the phrase 'frantic glee' - it says so much!
Until next time,
Sonali
Comment Written 06-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2014
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Thank you for the gracious review and kind words about the writing, Sonali. I appreciate you pointing out the phrase you liked. "Frantic glee" was one of my favorites too! Watch out for fairies. Debi
Comment from rrabinow
Wonderful poem. Children are such wonderful gifts, and they should be cherished. I like the description that you use. Great picture as well.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2014
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Wonderful poem. Children are such wonderful gifts, and they should be cherished. I like the description that you use. Great picture as well.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2014
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Thank you for th gracious remarks about the descriptions. I am happy you liked it. Thank you for the encouragement. Debi
Comment from BLACKDYKE
A very pleasant enlightenment of being
a new parent and all the excitement that
goes with it. The Pantoum is far too
complicated for my level, but how I enjoyed
the read. Eric
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2014
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A very pleasant enlightenment of being
a new parent and all the excitement that
goes with it. The Pantoum is far too
complicated for my level, but how I enjoyed
the read. Eric
Comment Written 06-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2014
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Thank you for the lovely review, Eric. I am pleased you enjoyed reading this poem. Thank you. Debi
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My pleasure
Comment from Kausar_Javeria
Hello there~!
i was just thinking about the first pantoum sonnet of the fairies, when this popped up! I love it!
So the fairies succeeded. Evil little things!
BTW, I didn't know about the 'fetch'. THanks for the info!
Great Job!
JazakAllah Khair~!
(God Bless~!)
(^_^)-<~~KAUSAR~~>-(^_^)
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2014
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Hello there~!
i was just thinking about the first pantoum sonnet of the fairies, when this popped up! I love it!
So the fairies succeeded. Evil little things!
BTW, I didn't know about the 'fetch'. THanks for the info!
Great Job!
JazakAllah Khair~!
(God Bless~!)
(^_^)-<~~KAUSAR~~>-(^_^)
Comment Written 06-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2014
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What a great compliment--that you were thinking about the other poem. I am honored.
Yes, those evil fairies succeed and are absolutely thrilled about it.
Just a little more about the fetch-- it was a way for people in medieval Europe and Scandinavia to explain how a healthy child suddenly grew sick and died. They didn't know about germs so I guess they had to blame something. I wonder if it gave them some hope that their child was alive somewhere else?
Thank you so much for the wonderful review. I appreciate it. Debi
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Wow! I didn't know that! Thanks for the info!
Comment from c_lucas
Just a wee bit of parental pride in this well written poem. It has a smooth flow of words, making for a very enchanting read. There is good imagery.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2014
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Just a wee bit of parental pride in this well written poem. It has a smooth flow of words, making for a very enchanting read. There is good imagery.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2014
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Thank you for the gracious review. I am pleased you found it enchanting and enjoyed the imagery. I appreciate the encouragement. Debi
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You're welcome, Debi. Charlie
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Very well written Sonnet Pantoum Debi. Fairies celebrating because they have taken a human child. Tragic for parents of the child. I had never heard this fable before. I thought a changeling was an abandoned child in the wilderness. LOL It seems we are never too old to learn. Nancy
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2014
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Very well written Sonnet Pantoum Debi. Fairies celebrating because they have taken a human child. Tragic for parents of the child. I had never heard this fable before. I thought a changeling was an abandoned child in the wilderness. LOL It seems we are never too old to learn. Nancy
Comment Written 06-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2014
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Thank you for the kind comments, Nancy. I took this from medieval legends about fairies and their fascination with human children. So much more mischievous than the fairies we think of nowadays. I appreciate you stopping by. Debi
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi again debi - I'm glad I have a 6 left - this is really for both of your Pantoum/Sonnet. This is a lovely follow up to your previous one. Just as well written and enjoyed - well done. Kind regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2014
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Hi again debi - I'm glad I have a 6 left - this is really for both of your Pantoum/Sonnet. This is a lovely follow up to your previous one. Just as well written and enjoyed - well done. Kind regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 06-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2014
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Thank you so much for the six stars, Dorothy! I am so pleased that you enjoyed both pantoum sonnets about those mean fairies. Thank you for stopping by again. Debi
Comment from N.K. Wagner
A lovely pantoum sonnet celebrating the stealing of a human child by fairies from the fairies' point of view. And yet the fairies would view it as a trade, since they've left a fetch in it's place. A fine presentation of a piece of magical lore. :) nancy
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2014
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A lovely pantoum sonnet celebrating the stealing of a human child by fairies from the fairies' point of view. And yet the fairies would view it as a trade, since they've left a fetch in it's place. A fine presentation of a piece of magical lore. :) nancy
Comment Written 06-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2014
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Thank you for lovely review, Nancy. I appreciate the kind comments about the writing and am so pleased you enjoyed this dark fairy tale. Debi
