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Pantoum Sonnet32 total reviews
Comment from Eric1
Hi again Debi, what a fantastic follow up to the original Pantoum sonnet, great imagery again, and the wording and rhyming are delightful, it has a great rhythm and flow to it, though I am still chilled with the description of 'Fetch', wonderful writing.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2014
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Hi again Debi, what a fantastic follow up to the original Pantoum sonnet, great imagery again, and the wording and rhyming are delightful, it has a great rhythm and flow to it, though I am still chilled with the description of 'Fetch', wonderful writing.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2014
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Hi Eric. I am so honored by the six stars. I am pleased you enjoyed these two poems. I appreciate the gracious comments about the writing, too.
If it helps at all--These two poems are based on medieval fairy tales. People in those days had no concept of germs or bacteria to cause disease. In an attempt to explain why their healthy child would suddenly sicken and die they believed that the fairies took their child and left the fetch in its place. I wonder if that gave them the hope that their "real" child was still alive and thriving somewhere.
I agree with you though, the concept of "fetch" is pretty creepy.
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Thank you so much for the brilliant reply Debi, I really didn't know about those medieval tales. You really did earn this six!
Comment from krys123
W.j.debi;
A beautiful picture to enhance and complement a beautifully written poem. Your pantoum sonnet is written perfectly in just the right requirements for this type of poem.
This is an excellent follow-up to your other poem which was also very well written and this one shows a very caressing, warmhearted touching and feeling expressionistic
imagery.
Your writing and rhythm especially tempo and meter were done very well also were your rhythm flowed smoothly throughout your poem. Your writing also was neither forced nor labored and helped with the flow of the rhythm.
Thank you so much for sharing and posting this for everyone to read and may the Lord be with you always.
Alex
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2014
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W.j.debi;
A beautiful picture to enhance and complement a beautifully written poem. Your pantoum sonnet is written perfectly in just the right requirements for this type of poem.
This is an excellent follow-up to your other poem which was also very well written and this one shows a very caressing, warmhearted touching and feeling expressionistic
imagery.
Your writing and rhythm especially tempo and meter were done very well also were your rhythm flowed smoothly throughout your poem. Your writing also was neither forced nor labored and helped with the flow of the rhythm.
Thank you so much for sharing and posting this for everyone to read and may the Lord be with you always.
Alex
Comment Written 06-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2014
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Thank you for such a lovely review, Alex. I appreciate the detailed analysis about the writing. I am pleased that you enjoyed this follow up about those bad fairies snatching a child. I appreciate the blessing too. Debi
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You are so so so we welcome my friend.
Alex
Comment from kiwijenny
Snuck is perfect....as you know my fairies English is never very proper..lol
I love this and the picture is perfect.........well done.....I like this series
God bless..........................................
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2014
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Snuck is perfect....as you know my fairies English is never very proper..lol
I love this and the picture is perfect.........well done.....I like this series
God bless..........................................
Comment Written 05-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2014
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Thank you so much for the great review, Kiwijenny. Sorry for the delayed response. It has been a very busy week. I am pleased you enjoyed the series. These evil fairies are certainly enjoying their conquest. I appreciate your continued support. Debi
Comment from Dean Kuch
A-h-h-h-h-h, a follow-up to your excellent poem, Snatched, huh, Debi? Very nice...
Of course, this one didn't give off that wonderful eerie, creepy vibe that that poem did, however it was still very well written just the same.
Good work.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2014
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A-h-h-h-h-h, a follow-up to your excellent poem, Snatched, huh, Debi? Very nice...
Of course, this one didn't give off that wonderful eerie, creepy vibe that that poem did, however it was still very well written just the same.
Good work.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2014
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Thank you for the kind comments, Dean. Somehow it is more creepy when one is anticipating the evil deed, but don't know when it is coming. Now everyone can breathe easy... except for the parents of the missing child.
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Yes, Debi, yes it is.
Comment from Delahay
If this is a sequel I missed the original and will have to go find it. I enjoyed your poem and think you did better using the "snuck" instead of "sneaked", it does sound better. I think you have a typo in the third stanza, first line. I believe you put 'out' where you meant 'our'.
Mary
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2014
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If this is a sequel I missed the original and will have to go find it. I enjoyed your poem and think you did better using the "snuck" instead of "sneaked", it does sound better. I think you have a typo in the third stanza, first line. I believe you put 'out' where you meant 'our'.
Mary
Comment Written 05-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2014
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Thank you so much for the excellent review, Mary. I appreciate you catching that typo and letting me know so that I could correct it, too. I am so pleased that you enjoyed this poem. Thank you. Debi
Comment from Zinnia48
this is utterly delightful! I am a great fan of fairies and am happy to see them honored in this poem. The repetition makes the story even more magical. Caroline
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2014
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this is utterly delightful! I am a great fan of fairies and am happy to see them honored in this poem. The repetition makes the story even more magical. Caroline
Comment Written 05-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2014
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Thank you for the kind comments, Caroline. I am so pleased to hear you enjoyed this poem and even more pleased to find someone who is a fan of fairies. Thank you so much for the encouragement. Debi
Comment from Ben Colder
Well tell them fairies that they did good by leaving it for me to read. Nothing is precious as a child especially sleeping all night long. Shalom
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2014
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Well tell them fairies that they did good by leaving it for me to read. Nothing is precious as a child especially sleeping all night long. Shalom
Comment Written 05-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2014
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Thank you, Ben Colder. I appreciate the encouragement, and I'll let the fairies know. Debi
Comment from Spitfire
Well, I disagree about sneak versus snuck because you get the assonance of we and sneak. Other than that, I'll thrilled that your added. Now, I want to know what fairies do with this changeling!
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2014
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Well, I disagree about sneak versus snuck because you get the assonance of we and sneak. Other than that, I'll thrilled that your added. Now, I want to know what fairies do with this changeling!
Comment Written 05-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2014
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You know, Shari, you have a great point about the assonance. And when I read it with "sneaked" instead of "snuck", the poem seems just a touch more sinister. I may change it.
As far as what the fairies do with the changeling, well that has all sorts of possibilities? I wasn't really going for a series, but then I wasn't planning on writing this poem either. Let's see where the fairies take us?.Thank you for the excellent review and a little prodding. Debi
Comment from tfawcus
I love this Pantoum! Such a wonderful sense of unrepentant glee! I hadn't heard of 'fetch' before and so was a bit puzzled by that line until I read your note! Somehow I don't imagine that fairies are too bothered about being grammatically correct! 'Snuck' is right in character! Delightful!
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2014
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I love this Pantoum! Such a wonderful sense of unrepentant glee! I hadn't heard of 'fetch' before and so was a bit puzzled by that line until I read your note! Somehow I don't imagine that fairies are too bothered about being grammatically correct! 'Snuck' is right in character! Delightful!
Comment Written 05-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2014
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Thank you so much for the generous six stars, and even more for the encouraging comments. I am so happy you enjoyed this poem. You made my evening. Thank you so much! Debi
Comment from LIJ Red
Charlotte Mew wrote a -for me-definitive poem about changelings. Yours is much more upbeat and cheerful.
Downright excellent, in fact.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2014
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Charlotte Mew wrote a -for me-definitive poem about changelings. Yours is much more upbeat and cheerful.
Downright excellent, in fact.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2014
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Thank you for the generous comments and equally generous stars. I am so pleased you liked it. Watch out for those fairies. Debi
