I, Man!
A man thinks himself a god...113 total reviews
Comment from Artist Dilemma
The message is crystal clear. The subject well crafted from a Frankenstein's masterpiece. Though the words are stunning I did not enjoy the read as much as I wanted to, the reason that the design you created was to much for me and my poor mind. I can understand the effect you wanted to achieve, but personally I rather have a plain ordinary text.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2014
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The message is crystal clear. The subject well crafted from a Frankenstein's masterpiece. Though the words are stunning I did not enjoy the read as much as I wanted to, the reason that the design you created was to much for me and my poor mind. I can understand the effect you wanted to achieve, but personally I rather have a plain ordinary text.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2014
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No worries, Artist Dilemma. I fully realize that my animated poems are not to everyone's liking, and I respect your opinion. I am pleased that you decided to review the poem despite that, and I appreciate your generous response.~Dean
Comment from thedreampeddler
So entertaining that I want to try it. Reanimating a corpse that is.
No flaws in the writing, as usual. Just another example of why writing should pay your bills.
Awesome.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2014
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So entertaining that I want to try it. Reanimating a corpse that is.
No flaws in the writing, as usual. Just another example of why writing should pay your bills.
Awesome.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2014
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Heh-heh, I can help you out with that, if you'd like, thedreampeddler. I've got a few very fresh bodies buried right out back in the field behind my house we could work with. I'd need your kind assistance in digging them up, of course.
Thanks so much for the awesome and complimentary review, my friend!~Dean
Comment from Linda Engel
a wonderfully crafted scenario of the Shelly story. Well chosen words on poetic form to relate the dangers of tampering with God's creation; man. All in the name of science and glory can lead to destruction and hell.
Very informative notes and message. I saw the movie of Mary, Lord Byron, Shelly, and the others who locked themselves up in an abandoned house for the weekend (drugs and sex were involved) and that was when the idea of Frankie was born.
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a wonderfully crafted scenario of the Shelly story. Well chosen words on poetic form to relate the dangers of tampering with God's creation; man. All in the name of science and glory can lead to destruction and hell.
Very informative notes and message. I saw the movie of Mary, Lord Byron, Shelly, and the others who locked themselves up in an abandoned house for the weekend (drugs and sex were involved) and that was when the idea of Frankie was born.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2014
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Dean Kuch,
Nice piece of Horror and Thriller Poetry beautifully depicting its chosen theme!
Impressive and perfectly matching the theme wording.
Smooth and captivating flow throughout the poem with lovely rhyming scheme and lively imagery.
Pictures enhance beauty of the poem.
Its last stanza is particularly noteworthy:
"Its ghastly face, so stitched and laced, from sutures sewn by my hand,
drooped in sadness, my mind toyed with madness; he now rose to stand.
"Yes!" I cried, "You are my son, you'd take my life as yours begins?"
Dead eyes brightened, his grip tightened -- "Yes, I, man, and I am sin"
'As you sow so shall you reap.'
Excellent!
Good Luck!!
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Hello Dean Kuch,
Nice piece of Horror and Thriller Poetry beautifully depicting its chosen theme!
Impressive and perfectly matching the theme wording.
Smooth and captivating flow throughout the poem with lovely rhyming scheme and lively imagery.
Pictures enhance beauty of the poem.
Its last stanza is particularly noteworthy:
"Its ghastly face, so stitched and laced, from sutures sewn by my hand,
drooped in sadness, my mind toyed with madness; he now rose to stand.
"Yes!" I cried, "You are my son, you'd take my life as yours begins?"
Dead eyes brightened, his grip tightened -- "Yes, I, man, and I am sin"
'As you sow so shall you reap.'
Excellent!
Good Luck!!
Comment Written 12-Aug-2014
Comment from Andrewajgblue
It was a great story told in poetic form, it was greatly worded and held my interest all the way through I thought your presentation and pictures were amazing as always ,
Andrew
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It was a great story told in poetic form, it was greatly worded and held my interest all the way through I thought your presentation and pictures were amazing as always ,
Andrew
Comment Written 12-Aug-2014
Comment from Genya
At first l wasn't too sure who was playing God here but as l got into the poem it had to be Frankenstein. All those terrible deeds that were done to create such a monster. A brilliant poem with fascinating illustrations. I don't usually read horror, but l do enjoy reading your work and so take the dark with the light. It was a fascinating read and a brilliant poetic horror story. Good luck in the contest. Genya
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At first l wasn't too sure who was playing God here but as l got into the poem it had to be Frankenstein. All those terrible deeds that were done to create such a monster. A brilliant poem with fascinating illustrations. I don't usually read horror, but l do enjoy reading your work and so take the dark with the light. It was a fascinating read and a brilliant poetic horror story. Good luck in the contest. Genya
Comment Written 12-Aug-2014
Comment from JBCaine
Dean-
This is pure nonsense. And by that I mean to say that if a guy has the know-how to do this, is not the greater sin to deny the universe the knowledge?
OK, just messin' witcha. I have no position on any of that stuff, but I reckon I'd have to agree that the one piece lacking would be the soul, as humans have yet to identify, quantify, or un-sanctify such.
Well done. I don't do poetry, but you have managed to tell the entire re-animation story in poetry, and for once, I found that twist to work in favor of the tale.
Very nicely done, Sir.
JBCaine-
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Dean-
This is pure nonsense. And by that I mean to say that if a guy has the know-how to do this, is not the greater sin to deny the universe the knowledge?
OK, just messin' witcha. I have no position on any of that stuff, but I reckon I'd have to agree that the one piece lacking would be the soul, as humans have yet to identify, quantify, or un-sanctify such.
Well done. I don't do poetry, but you have managed to tell the entire re-animation story in poetry, and for once, I found that twist to work in favor of the tale.
Very nicely done, Sir.
JBCaine-
Comment Written 11-Aug-2014
Comment from Michaelk
One of my favorite books.
"Devil," I exclaimed, "do you dare approach me? And do not you fear the fierce vengeance of my arm wreaked on your miserable head? Begone, vile insect! Or rather, stay, that I may trample you to dust! And, oh! That I could, with the extinction of your miserable existence, restore those victims whom you have so diabolically murdered!"
Shelley, Mary Wollstonecraft (1993-10-01). Frankenstein (pp. 51-52). Public Domain Books. Kindle Edition.
The unmitigated gall of Victor, to threaten this being that by his own description was superhuman. This is one of my favorite lines in any book.
Now, on to your poem. As soon as it started, I was thinking Frankenstein. I think Mary herself would like your poem. The cadence, the rhythm, the rhyme, the language. Everything just screams out quality. In the end, Victor would've wished for his creation to do him this service instead of slowly taking everything in his life that he loved. You're ending is more merciful. (How's that for irony)
Farewell, Frankenstein! If thou wert yet alive and yet cherished a desire of revenge against me, it would be better satiated in my life than in my destruction. But it was not so; thou didst seek my extinction, that I might not cause greater wretchedness; and if yet, in some mode unknown to me, thou hadst not ceased to think and feel, thou wouldst not desire against me a vengeance greater than that which I feel. Blasted as thou wert, my agony was still superior to thine, for the bitter sting of remorse will not cease to rankle in my wounds until death shall close them forever.
Shelley, Mary Wollstonecraft (1993-10-01). Frankenstein (pp. 125-126). Public Domain Books. Kindle Edition.
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One of my favorite books.
"Devil," I exclaimed, "do you dare approach me? And do not you fear the fierce vengeance of my arm wreaked on your miserable head? Begone, vile insect! Or rather, stay, that I may trample you to dust! And, oh! That I could, with the extinction of your miserable existence, restore those victims whom you have so diabolically murdered!"
Shelley, Mary Wollstonecraft (1993-10-01). Frankenstein (pp. 51-52). Public Domain Books. Kindle Edition.
The unmitigated gall of Victor, to threaten this being that by his own description was superhuman. This is one of my favorite lines in any book.
Now, on to your poem. As soon as it started, I was thinking Frankenstein. I think Mary herself would like your poem. The cadence, the rhythm, the rhyme, the language. Everything just screams out quality. In the end, Victor would've wished for his creation to do him this service instead of slowly taking everything in his life that he loved. You're ending is more merciful. (How's that for irony)
Farewell, Frankenstein! If thou wert yet alive and yet cherished a desire of revenge against me, it would be better satiated in my life than in my destruction. But it was not so; thou didst seek my extinction, that I might not cause greater wretchedness; and if yet, in some mode unknown to me, thou hadst not ceased to think and feel, thou wouldst not desire against me a vengeance greater than that which I feel. Blasted as thou wert, my agony was still superior to thine, for the bitter sting of remorse will not cease to rankle in my wounds until death shall close them forever.
Shelley, Mary Wollstonecraft (1993-10-01). Frankenstein (pp. 125-126). Public Domain Books. Kindle Edition.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2014
Comment from Selina Stambi
I turned down the volume as it's way past my bedtime!
Pleasant screams alright. I was thinking of Mary Shelley's Frankenstein, as I read.
Your fascination with the dark side fascinates me, Dean.
Fabulous presentation, as always. Excellent aabb rhyme scheme.
Best wishes for the contest, friend.
Have a wonderful week.
Sonali
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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I turned down the volume as it's way past my bedtime!
Pleasant screams alright. I was thinking of Mary Shelley's Frankenstein, as I read.
Your fascination with the dark side fascinates me, Dean.
Fabulous presentation, as always. Excellent aabb rhyme scheme.
Best wishes for the contest, friend.
Have a wonderful week.
Sonali
Comment Written 11-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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No sound for this one, Reach. The FanStory Committee frowns on it, so I never use sound when posting a poem which requires their vote.
I really appreciate your kind review.
Sleep well~
Comment from DALLAS01
Dean,
A lot of effort must have gone into this one. It is awesome, a bit grisly, but none the less fascinating. The wording, rhyme and alliteration combine to make this a very poetic horror story. And the POV in the end gives one pause to ponder. Of course the animations are top shelf. Always appreciate your author notes.
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Dean,
A lot of effort must have gone into this one. It is awesome, a bit grisly, but none the less fascinating. The wording, rhyme and alliteration combine to make this a very poetic horror story. And the POV in the end gives one pause to ponder. Of course the animations are top shelf. Always appreciate your author notes.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2014
