Comment from Set in Stone

Exceptional

I just love that bouncy rhythm and humorous rhyming. It really sounds like the sing-song of a child reciting a list of culinary dislikes. "Cower" and "cauliflower" just made me chuckle. Such a delightful rhyme! You round everything off so neatly in the final stanza, ending as you began with praise for "Mom". This is a real day brightener. Thanks!

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014

Set in Stone, thank you so very much for your generous sixth star and thoughtful comments :-) Brooke

Comment from humpwhistle

Exceptional

Geez, Ma, it has 'wurst' right in it's name? How good can it be? And cauliflower? Who named that, the joker who named Greenland?

So what the heck is wrong with a good old ice cream sandwich? It's got all the good major food groups. Sugar. Chocolate. Sugar.

Lots of fun, Brooke. Chewless is right!

Peace, Lee

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014

It is all gray, rainy and gloomy here, so thank you for that laugh and for the shiny extra star :-) Lee, you're the best, practically as good as ice cream :-) Brooke

reply by humpwhistle on 03-Aug-2014

Oh, Brooke, doll, do I ever have to bite my tongue.

reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014

Oh, Lord, what have I said now? LOL

Comment from Domino 2

Excellent

Great fun opinions of Sawyer's not too complimentary views of Mom's cooking, Brooke...until the ending treat of course.

I found all the stanzas great fun, but think my fave is the 'tuna' verse.

Excellent.

Cheers, Ray

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014

Thanks so much, Ray :-) Mom doesn't take it personally because he won't eat anything other than those few things on his very short list any where else either :-) Brooke

Comment from Bryana

Excellent

I'm sure Sawyer wrote this poem since it's what children don't like. I'm glad I taught my boys to eat vegetables
from a very young age.
Dear Brooke, I always enjoy your writings, and his one was
very funny, it made my Sunday.

Have a very happy Sunday.

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014

Any hints on how you "taught" them to eat veggies? - Miranda can't get Sawyer to touch them, and all the hints from a professional nutritionist she visited don't work either :-) Thanks so much for your review, Bryana :-) Brooke

Comment from Smoothiecool

Excellent

well chosen words to portray the dislikes of a child and how ice-cream sandwiches taste so much better

good visual to portray message

good enjambment through verses to allow flow

good rhyme through verses

good alliteration in
stomach, screams

cheers Smoothiecool

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014

Thank you so much, Smoothiecool :-) Brooke

reply by Smoothiecool on 04-Aug-2014

most welcome
have a blessed week

cheers..SC >> Faye

Comment from Pearl Edwards

Excellent

And couldn't we all relate to this one. Lovely story rhyme about the 'good for you' foods mums try to convince us to eat. Gave me a chuckle, I would never have eaten any of them except for the icecream sandwich either.Nice read Brooke.

valda

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014

valda, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from Carole Rosa

Excellent

Brooke, My grandson won't eat meat or vegetables, but he does eat a big cucumber every day. He likes most fruit, so I call him a Fruitarian. Of course, he likes McDonald fries. AND he too, is a finger-licking ice cream kid.

Your poem is a delightful and whimsical rhyme. I enjoyed it, as I do every poem that you write. Smiles, Carole

Cute picture of Sawyer!

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014

Thanks so much, Carole - yep, Sawyer's go to food is fruit :-) That and cheese and peanut butter and jelly and anything chocolate or ice cream :-) Brooke

Comment from Terror2s

Exceptional

As a young child, I'd invite myself to my best friend's house whenever mom made liver or liverwurst. This poem resonated. Delightful as always with smooth, unforced rhymes. T2

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014

Thank you so much, Abby, for your gracious and generous review :-) Brooke

Comment from Ben Colder

Excellent

Sounds like my 4 year old Jacob. If it is topped with Vanilla ice cream the food is eaten. Well done Brooke. Great photo of our little buddy.

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014

Ben, thanks so much :-) The problem with Sawyer is that if you top something with ice cream, he will just eat the ice cream topping. LOL :-) Brooke

reply by Ben Colder on 03-Aug-2014

My Jacob too. Must be catching with Toddlers.

Comment from CR Delport

Excellent

Ah, look at the Cute Little One with his ice cream sandwich. I have to agree, mothers can be clueless sometime about what a growing child really needs to eat :) This is another well crafted poem.

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014

CR, thank you so much :-) Sawyer is the planet's pickiest eater. Miranda would never even try to feed him some of this stuff. She'd be happy if he's eat a chicken nugget or a burger. LOL Thanks so much for your review :-) Brooke