Comment from MisinformedPoet

Exceptional

Rating of Chapter 20 - Fairy Playground
I am going to run out of six's if I keep reading your poetry! This is a lovely, traditional fairy poem with all the aspects of fairy-lore written with beautiful rhyme and flow with a lovely brisk pace.
I particularly love the use of the word 'darkling' in the line "Caper through the darkling glen", I had not heard this word before and I have added it to the list of words i would definetly like to use in the future.
Long live fairies!!!

 Comment Written 05-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Aug-2014

Thanks for the sixer and the very kind words. This popped out of the blue, as I recall and practically wrote itself. I recall it was the first time I had a poem nominated for Poem of the Month but it only came second..

Thomas hardy wrote a poem called 'The Darkling Thrush'. You are right it is a lovely evocative word - so much better than simply 'dark'

Steve

Comment from MisinformedPoet

Exceptional

Rating of Chapter 19 - Teddy Bear
This is such a charming children's poem with lines that flow really well, making it really easy to be read aloud (which is essential and makes it pleasurable to roll off the tongue). I love the gentle capers and finishing off with tea and a bath. Perfect!

 Comment Written 05-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Aug-2014

And thank you again! This is one of my favourites from all the poems I have written for children.

Steve

Comment from lynglyng

Exceptional

Rating of Chapter 19 - Teddy Bear
I had a bear and I played with it much like Molly did in this poem. Good memories this poem brought back to me of childhood days. Thank you for reminding me of Bear. The poem is excellently written and is going to be one of my best kept favorites. Thank you!

 Comment Written 05-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Aug-2014

Thanks so much for the kind review and the six shiny stars.

Steve

Comment from acerisestory

Excellent

Rating of Chapter 19 - Teddy Bear
What a fun poem you've written here, kiwisteveh! It's a great time with one's Teddy Bear and imagination in full gear. It's a truly fun story.

Your poem has a wonderful flow, and your rhyming, both perfect and proximate is really well done.

Thank you for sharing. It's no wonder you won first place. Take care. Alana

 Comment Written 05-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Aug-2014

Thanks, Alana - glad you enjoyed.

Steve

reply by acerisestory on 06-Aug-2014

You are welcome, Steve! Alana

Comment from Carole Rosa

Excellent

Rating of Chapter 19 - Teddy Bear
Steve, This is a cute little prose within a children's poem. (We spring out of bed, my mistress and me,) Did you mean, "misses"? 'Mistress' might not be appropriate for a children's book. Regardless, the work and presentation are outstanding. Carole

 Comment Written 04-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Aug-2014

Thanks, Carole.

Mistress has several meanings apart from the one you are thinking of, including the mistress of a house or, as here, the female owner of an animal - even though it's a stuffed animal.

Steve

reply by Carole Rosa on 06-Aug-2014

Thank you for the information. I appreciate your use of the word. Although, I didn't notice that you appreciated my review. Thank you for the reply. Carole

reply by the author on 07-Aug-2014

Ummm... Did I say something wrong? I did thank you for the review which is appreciated as always.

Steve

Comment from Gaye Hemsley

Excellent

Rating of Chapter 19 - Teddy Bear
Hi from another Kiwi
A delightful poem with excellent rhyming which children will love. I like you idea of putting all your poems in one book. I'm thinking of doing something similar. I have self published several little picture books and have lots waiting to see the light of day.

 Comment Written 04-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Aug-2014

Thanks, Gaye. I'm not sure why I have never seen your work on FS before.

I am keen to get something to a publisher this year - in fact it was one of my New year resolutions!

Steve

Comment from Robin Gilmor

Excellent

Rating of Chapter 19 - Teddy Bear
A delightful verse into the world of make-believe. A lovely trip from
morning till night. Well composed with a nice even flow. Enjoyable thoughts and chuckels. Smiles, Robin :)

 Comment Written 04-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Aug-2014

Thanks, Robin!

Steve

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Rating of Chapter 19 - Teddy Bear
Hi Steve,

Fun story. Can't go wrong with kids and a teddy bear. Easy to see why it's a winner - congrats!

Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax ('-')

 Comment Written 04-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Aug-2014

Thanks, Jax!

Steve

Comment from evilynne

Excellent

Rating of Chapter 19 - Teddy Bear
Teddy bears and children, what a wonderful combination; your poem is wonderfully imaginative and I am sure your book is great. Best luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 04-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Aug-2014

Thank you!

Steve

Comment from GeorgieBoy

Exceptional

Rating of Chapter 19 - Teddy Bear
Piratical bunch! I will always remember that phrase. So original. The poem flows so nicely, you can almost find yourself singing it. Love it

 Comment Written 04-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Aug-2014

Thanks for the kind words!

Steve